Comment from rouskin

Excellent

Night's cursed undead king
says, "I vant to bite your neck"
Ooo...to scream...or dream...

A very enjoyable read
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is correct.
Good luck and have a nice day.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

Thank you, Ruskin. I am so pleased that you enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you for the kind review and excellent rating. I appreciate it.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Vampires are relative new to the poetry world. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

Thank you, c_lucas. I appreciate the kind comments. I am glad that you enjoyed reading this little poem.

reply by c_lucas on 24-Nov-2013

You're welcome, WJ. Charlie

Comment from denhagan

Excellent

This is a nice colorful and imaginative 5-7-5 poem for the contest about Count Dracula. I like the last line about scream or dream. :) Nice picture to go with the poem.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

Thank you, denhagan. I am happy that you liked this poem, especially the last line. I appreciate the kind comments and encouragement.

reply by denhagan on 28-Nov-2013

You're welcome,
Dennis

Comment from jandeck

Excellent

Oh, decisions, decisions. What should a girl do? This is a clever, little 5-7-5 that is really fun to read. Has good form and flow and cute picture complements it.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

Thank you, jandeck. I am so glad you had fun reading this little poem. I appreciate the kind comments on the flow and presentation.

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Dracula bites, indeed that's a great picture, that's a very
dramatic expressed 5/7/5 poem.I enjoyed reading it.God bless
you.Hugs!Lakeport.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you, Lakeport. I am so happy you enjoyed reading this silly little poem. I appreciate the encouragement.

reply by lakeport on 23-Nov-2013

your welcome,Hugs!lakeport.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

smiling when i read this got bit by a few vampires in my day Night's cursed undead king says, "I vant to bite your neck"beautifully drawn words

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

I am so happy this poem made you smile, Darkhorse. I appreciate the kind comments and encouragement of your review. I love the phrase "beautifully drawn words." Thank you.

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

This was an excellent entry for the contest, w.j.debi! Loved the tongue and cheek of your write, and especially "I vant". The picture is a scream too. :)

bichonfrisegirl aka Connie

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you, Connie. I notice you used the same picture with your entry. It is a wonderful piece of artwork, so fun and a tad naughty.
Thanks so much for the review and the kind comments. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi

reply by bichonfrisegirl on 24-Nov-2013

LOL .... I liked the artwork for the same reason as you Debi ... fun and a tad naughty. :)

Connie

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

Night of the undead.
Out comes the vampires to bite our necks!
Ooo..is this a dream or are they real??
Quick..run for our lives..they are coming fast!!
Good wrtie and well penned. Good luck to the contest.
Cheerio, hugs, Rithcie. :))

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you, Ritchie. This is a fun review. Thank you for the kind comments and good luck wishes. I am happy you enjoyed this poem. And keep running ....

Comment from Meta4ors

Excellent

W.J.,

Very well done 5-7-5. Most expressive. Line 2; Changed standard " suck your blood" to "bite your neck" nicely done regardless of intent. Cute picture and reference to romantic fantasy!
-meta

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 24-Nov-2013

Thank you, Meta. I appreciate the kind comments and encouragement. You noticed the change from "suck your blood". I wanted it to sound familiar, but "suck your blood" just didn't sound as romantic as "bite your neck". Since the haiku and senryu rules were out I stretched it a little further. Why not? Thank you for the review.

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

night's cursed undead king
says," I vant to bite your neck
Ooo...to scream...or dream
Good complimentary photo. The syllable count is correct. Good creativity using vant. Good internal rhyme with scream/dream. Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2013

Thank you, Righteous Riter. I appreciate the kind review and the details of what you thought worked. I appreciate the encouragement.