Let's Love Today
a pantoum, that blew in on today's winter rains45 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo to complement your poem. I never mind is someone uses a bit of poetic license. It is about the weather and about love. I liked it a lot.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Excellent photo to complement your poem. I never mind is someone uses a bit of poetic license. It is about the weather and about love. I liked it a lot.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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thx Ine! how ARE YOU??
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nice usage of enjambment. Good alliteration with, "lightest lacy". A wonderfully penned pantoum, Sharyn. It speaks of living and loving for now, for today, and never waiting for tomorrow. For many of us, tomorrow may never come...
Beautiful & extremely touching, my friend.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Nice usage of enjambment. Good alliteration with, "lightest lacy". A wonderfully penned pantoum, Sharyn. It speaks of living and loving for now, for today, and never waiting for tomorrow. For many of us, tomorrow may never come...
Beautiful & extremely touching, my friend.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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THX SO MUCH DEAN!
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My pleasure!
Comment from DBastian
You are quite the conductor of words, organizing them in tremendous, melodic ways. Wow ... what concert you created here!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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You are quite the conductor of words, organizing them in tremendous, melodic ways. Wow ... what concert you created here!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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I loved creating this one! and I'm delighted that you, too, can hear the music my dear - thank you so much, both for 'hearing' and for that wonderful sixer!
Big smiles!
Sharyn
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
nice alliteration in lightest lacy and in smile and sigh
beautiful descriptive detail
interesting how you use one of the unused lines from stanza one as your final line but you don't use the other unused line from stanza one in your closing.
excellent repetition of lines in good pantoum pattern in all the stanzas leading up to the last one.
Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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solid use of abab rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to keep thoughts flowing from line to line
nice alliteration in lightest lacy and in smile and sigh
beautiful descriptive detail
interesting how you use one of the unused lines from stanza one as your final line but you don't use the other unused line from stanza one in your closing.
excellent repetition of lines in good pantoum pattern in all the stanzas leading up to the last one.
Brooke
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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I just went from a pantoum definition I found online Brooke - there seem to be a LOT of variations (including Poetry Dances!) And yes, I wondered about that myself! :)S
Comment from DALLAS01
I normally do not care for this form, however this is an exception. It is a visual treat. In addition to possessing vivid imagery, the words themselves decorate the page, my eyes were drawn to it. Favorite line:
we celebrate the seasons - death and birth.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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I normally do not care for this form, however this is an exception. It is a visual treat. In addition to possessing vivid imagery, the words themselves decorate the page, my eyes were drawn to it. Favorite line:
we celebrate the seasons - death and birth.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2013
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Bless you Dallas - I have mixed feelings about this form as it CAN be really boring, but I've read some that are lovely, and these gentle rains just seemed to lend themselves to it ... I'm SO glad you enjoyed it and I really appreciate your lovely six!
:)S
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:.) Have a great weekend.
Comment from Patti R.
OMG! Sharyn! Oh how I wish I'd written this! May I borrow it sometime? Wowsers.
Yea, somethin' blew in on that chilly winter wind ...
A sixer all the way with me - I love pantoum.
Patti
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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OMG! Sharyn! Oh how I wish I'd written this! May I borrow it sometime? Wowsers.
Yea, somethin' blew in on that chilly winter wind ...
A sixer all the way with me - I love pantoum.
Patti
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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aaah, I KNEW you'd like this one! and borrow it any time dear! I love pantoum, too, though I've only ever written one other - it just seemed to fit the mist ... thank you so much for that lovely six! yeah!!
:)S
Comment from Opal H.
Wow, this poem has such intense yet relaxed feelings of love in it. It is filled with romance, and has a sense of yolo in it that's very relaxing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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Wow, this poem has such intense yet relaxed feelings of love in it. It is filled with romance, and has a sense of yolo in it that's very relaxing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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I'm definitely into yolo Opal! thx so much!
:)S
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
With all your script writing and acting, you have not forgotten how to write a perfect pantoum. It read very well as you made use of alliteratons in lines and rhymes at line ends. This I see as a professional write and a keeper. Thanks for sharing this with your fans and admirers. Bob
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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With all your script writing and acting, you have not forgotten how to write a perfect pantoum. It read very well as you made use of alliteratons in lines and rhymes at line ends. This I see as a professional write and a keeper. Thanks for sharing this with your fans and admirers. Bob
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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I like this one too, Bob - so glad that you do! And yes, I feel this one's a 'keeper' too. I'm delighted with your magic sixer! Bless you, as always, my friend.
Big hugs
Sharyn
Comment from Cumbrianlass
You've used some sweet descriptive lines, Sharyn. I can tell you were inspired by what you saw. I always find the ocean to be inspirational. In this, I get to share your impressions.
There's romance woven with a sense of peace in your words. I love the image of tendrils of rain, and the curtains moving with the breeze.
Quite beautiful!
Bravo
Av
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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You've used some sweet descriptive lines, Sharyn. I can tell you were inspired by what you saw. I always find the ocean to be inspirational. In this, I get to share your impressions.
There's romance woven with a sense of peace in your words. I love the image of tendrils of rain, and the curtains moving with the breeze.
Quite beautiful!
Bravo
Av
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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thx so much Av! :)S
Comment from emrpoems
Superb combination of picture and poem
The perfect Pantoum structure --quatrains having the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza repeated as the first and third lines of the next stanza. The first and last lines are the same.
Alliterations: blurred between, sea and sky, lightest lacy,
wreaths of winter's, smile, and sigh.
An enjoyable read
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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Superb combination of picture and poem
The perfect Pantoum structure --quatrains having the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza repeated as the first and third lines of the next stanza. The first and last lines are the same.
Alliterations: blurred between, sea and sky, lightest lacy,
wreaths of winter's, smile, and sigh.
An enjoyable read
Comment Written 15-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2013
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thank you so much my dear!
:)S
