The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "The Stream"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
23 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
You avoid rhyme as blank verse requires, but I would label this a free verse poem and not blank verse because you don't have a consistent meter in all your lines
good internal rhyme in sounds profound
Water's symphony - add apostrophe for possessive
good alliteration in rocks and rills
and in warm words
Words' transformation - add apostrophe for plural possessive
poet's bliss - add apostrophe for possessive
a thoughtful look at the creative writing process
Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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You avoid rhyme as blank verse requires, but I would label this a free verse poem and not blank verse because you don't have a consistent meter in all your lines
good internal rhyme in sounds profound
Water's symphony - add apostrophe for possessive
good alliteration in rocks and rills
and in warm words
Words' transformation - add apostrophe for plural possessive
poet's bliss - add apostrophe for possessive
a thoughtful look at the creative writing process
Brooke
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Thanks for the wonderful edit Brooke. I made the corrections of punctuation and will work on the meter. :-) Carolyn
Comment from AprilShower
Carolyn, I counted the syllables in "Quietly by the stream he sat with random thought," and I keep coming up with twelve syllables. Did you mean to have twelve syllables in that line? The rest have ten syllables.
I enjoyed reading the poem, though. It goes well with the picture.
April
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Carolyn, I counted the syllables in "Quietly by the stream he sat with random thought," and I keep coming up with twelve syllables. Did you mean to have twelve syllables in that line? The rest have ten syllables.
I enjoyed reading the poem, though. It goes well with the picture.
April
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Thanks April, you counted correctly. I am not sure how I missed that on the first line. I haven't decided what to do, I may call it free verse instead of blank verse. :-) Carolyn
Comment from 9999pool
Sitting quietly by the streams as he cascading sound of the tiny waterfalls crackling up the sound of rushing water over the small cliffs of rocks.
The writer or the painter will scribble without waiting for the muse as the muse had been ignited already.
Swiftly an artistic piece is born and the mastery of solitude begets a masterpiece for all to behold.
Beautiful write and such calm and peace that we will all appreciate and the pic is really lovely too.
Cheerio, hugs, bro Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Sitting quietly by the streams as he cascading sound of the tiny waterfalls crackling up the sound of rushing water over the small cliffs of rocks.
The writer or the painter will scribble without waiting for the muse as the muse had been ignited already.
Swiftly an artistic piece is born and the mastery of solitude begets a masterpiece for all to behold.
Beautiful write and such calm and peace that we will all appreciate and the pic is really lovely too.
Cheerio, hugs, bro Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thank you Ritchie, I am glad you enjoyed this. You certainly got the 'jist' of what the writer intended. :-) Love, Carolyn
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Hi Carolyn,
Your word 'jist' had given me a name for our Duet Poem but the dictionary said 'Gist' so we can have a title called "Gist and Bliss" - the theme is not specific and of a general nature. And you can start off the Duet Poem and I will play catch up to your stanza. You can change the title if you got a better one, smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Carolyn,
This is a well penned poem with strong imagery and direction for the reader. I wanted to be the figure in your artwork - so serene a place to read.
Lovely job on this work.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hi Carolyn,
This is a well penned poem with strong imagery and direction for the reader. I wanted to be the figure in your artwork - so serene a place to read.
Lovely job on this work.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Dear Maureen, I appreciate this lovely review. Yes it would be an easy place to think and write, and or paint. I'm happy you enjoyed this one. Love, Carolyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job crafting this blank verse poem about the majesty of nature that beds to be shared by another's pen. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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this is very well written, carolyn, you did an excellent job crafting this blank verse poem about the majesty of nature that beds to be shared by another's pen. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thank you so very much for this great review. Love, Carolyn
Comment from tbacha58
Quietly by the stream he sat with random thought
Absorbing sounds profound, and oh so clear
Such a delightful poem to read, very relaxing also with that picture, deep lines of a past and now. Well done. Hugs Terry
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Quietly by the stream he sat with random thought
Absorbing sounds profound, and oh so clear
Such a delightful poem to read, very relaxing also with that picture, deep lines of a past and now. Well done. Hugs Terry
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thanks Terry for a wonderful review of this one. So happy you enjoyed The Stream. :-) Carolyn
Comment from lakeport
The stream, indeed beautiful nature, that's a very heartfelt
expressed story poem, I enjoyed reading it, God bless you,
lakeport,
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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The stream, indeed beautiful nature, that's a very heartfelt
expressed story poem, I enjoyed reading it, God bless you,
lakeport,
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Blessings back to you, thank you so much for the review and lovely stars, :-) Carolyn
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your welcome.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from JMUwrites
I did indeed enjoy this work as it describes so very vividly the serene scene, also providing information about the writer's world as he sits next to the stream.
Thanks for sharing this wonderfully penned blank-verse poem...for me it has brought about a peaceful, easy feeling!
All the best to you with it going forward, and with warmest regards!
Jeffrey
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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I did indeed enjoy this work as it describes so very vividly the serene scene, also providing information about the writer's world as he sits next to the stream.
Thanks for sharing this wonderfully penned blank-verse poem...for me it has brought about a peaceful, easy feeling!
All the best to you with it going forward, and with warmest regards!
Jeffrey
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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I am glad you had a 'peaceful, easy feeling'. Good old Don Henley said it best...thank you so much for this wonderful review... Carolyn
Comment from Sylvia Page
Carolyn I loved your blank verse poem very much. Sometimes when you sit in a quite place and reminisce about your past and your life you don't have to wait for your muse to inspire you. This is great stuff. Good visions emerge from your creation.
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Carolyn I loved your blank verse poem very much. Sometimes when you sit in a quite place and reminisce about your past and your life you don't have to wait for your muse to inspire you. This is great stuff. Good visions emerge from your creation.
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hi there Sylvia, I am glad you called this 'great stuff', now that's my kind of compliment. I am so glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is the reason that I write. I want to reflect on my life, and not lest the experiences that I have go to waste. I do this through fiction, but there is a little bit of me in every character that I write about.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is the reason that I write. I want to reflect on my life, and not lest the experiences that I have go to waste. I do this through fiction, but there is a little bit of me in every character that I write about.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Hi Tomes, you are such a wonderful writer that I am not surprised you put a part of you into your characters. I am happy you liked The Stream. :-) Carolyn
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I did like it.
Take care.