A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "~Waiting with Open Graves~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
96 total reviews
Comment from Matoshka
Wow! Dean, I normally don't read these as I dream of them at night. LOL This is so well written I was totally drawn in. I bet that old caretaker wasn't expecting that! I loved your Author's notes, as they were so interesting, its strange how some stories are told and why. I wound up enjoyed this very much. Blessings, even on Halloween. LOL
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Wow! Dean, I normally don't read these as I dream of them at night. LOL This is so well written I was totally drawn in. I bet that old caretaker wasn't expecting that! I loved your Author's notes, as they were so interesting, its strange how some stories are told and why. I wound up enjoyed this very much. Blessings, even on Halloween. LOL
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hey, I am very glad you did give it a shot, Matoshka. I always try and make it so the bad guy loses.
Thanks again!
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So welcome, Dean, it is so awesome of a write. You have such a great talent, my friend. Blessings
Comment from Darkhorse555
this carried so many warnings it scared me smiling to read as the caretaker was digging loved this line when darkness swallowed all the light excellent piece dear friend really enjoyed
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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this carried so many warnings it scared me smiling to read as the caretaker was digging loved this line when darkness swallowed all the light excellent piece dear friend really enjoyed
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hah, bombs away, right, DH?
Thanks for read and reviewing it for me!
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for sure friend
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
drained drop/cranky caretaker - good use of alliteration
wonderfully dark descriptive detail
strong, moody verbs
The music and visual presentation add to the dramatic power and eerie feeling :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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solid use of rhyming couplets
drained drop/cranky caretaker - good use of alliteration
wonderfully dark descriptive detail
strong, moody verbs
The music and visual presentation add to the dramatic power and eerie feeling :-) Brooke
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for the outstanding review, Brooke! Much appreciated.
Comment from TOMORAL
Wowee..This is the scariest, most detailed Halloween story I have ever read. I have use the word "brilliant" for this one. Perfection in poetry. Thank you for the author notes as well. You have educated me in the ways of Satan this morning. Deserves a six, but sorry to say I don't have one.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Wowee..This is the scariest, most detailed Halloween story I have ever read. I have use the word "brilliant" for this one. Perfection in poetry. Thank you for the author notes as well. You have educated me in the ways of Satan this morning. Deserves a six, but sorry to say I don't have one.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hey, I'll take a fiver form you all day, TOMORAL my friend! I am very happy you enjoyed it, that means the most to me...
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Dean,
Your presentations of your poems are the best I have ever seen and this one is no exception. Your author's notes are interesting and set the stage for you poem. Your rhyming is solid, the flow is even. You have used graphic words to express the theme. also good use of alliteration and enjambments. Virtual six Bravo! chey
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hi Dean,
Your presentations of your poems are the best I have ever seen and this one is no exception. Your author's notes are interesting and set the stage for you poem. Your rhyming is solid, the flow is even. You have used graphic words to express the theme. also good use of alliteration and enjambments. Virtual six Bravo! chey
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thanks, chey. That's quite a compliment coming form a talented poet and writer such as yourself! I am very grateful...
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you are most welcome...chey
Comment from LeMuseNoir
A delightful little midnight meander up the hill to the boneyard. Tapping into the shared psyche of the local "haunted place" gives the verse a universal appeal though it is in itself about a specific place.
It puts me in mind of some of Lovecraft's "Fungi of Yuggoth" poems - except for the subtly saucy attitude that provides a bit of "whistling past the graveyard" humor.
My only suggestion would be to, perhaps, consider a slight change to the first line of the seventh stanza. "Sire" is a term reserved for addressing royalty or someone highly placed- if you're placing the poem in the time of the witch trials and hysteria - the common address to a man would be "Sirrah" - or even "fellow" which was a more general term - and "doest" is not a correct vernacular for the period - you might want to consider either "doth" or "dost" - just something to think about - but the poem is
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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A delightful little midnight meander up the hill to the boneyard. Tapping into the shared psyche of the local "haunted place" gives the verse a universal appeal though it is in itself about a specific place.
It puts me in mind of some of Lovecraft's "Fungi of Yuggoth" poems - except for the subtly saucy attitude that provides a bit of "whistling past the graveyard" humor.
My only suggestion would be to, perhaps, consider a slight change to the first line of the seventh stanza. "Sire" is a term reserved for addressing royalty or someone highly placed- if you're placing the poem in the time of the witch trials and hysteria - the common address to a man would be "Sirrah" - or even "fellow" which was a more general term - and "doest" is not a correct vernacular for the period - you might want to consider either "doth" or "dost" - just something to think about - but the poem is
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hey, thanks for that great feedback, LeMuseNoir! I really appreciate that. A 'pictapoem', such as this, when changed has to be completely redone. But, rest assured, I will take your fine suggestions and do just that at the earliest opportunity.
Comment from Sueellen11
Excellent write on this believed haunted cemetery,,, you are one great writer,,,I always love reading your authors note you give so much history behind your poem/stories,,, a very deserving all time best,,,bedpan love your work,,, excellent,,, blessings,,sueellen
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Excellent write on this believed haunted cemetery,,, you are one great writer,,,I always love reading your authors note you give so much history behind your poem/stories,,, a very deserving all time best,,,bedpan love your work,,, excellent,,, blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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And I always appreciate you wonderful reviews and intelligent feedback, Sue Ellen! Thank you, very much!
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What the did spell check change,, bedpan,, ha ha ha,, that is a classic,, the best auto change so far it should have read Dean I love your work,,,nothing like what I wrote,,sorry boney,,blessings,,sueellen
Comment from Vladilynn
Hi Dean!!
I finally catch with your post and what an AWESOME read!! I've enjoyed from the start up to the end. You really do write a very excellent poems. You took the attention out of me, that's for sure. Lol
You've the originality and creepy way to describe vivid scene!
Thank you for waiting sharing and will be checking again with you, I believe that you also posting for the Halloween contest right?
Love much,
Lynn:0)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Hi Dean!!
I finally catch with your post and what an AWESOME read!! I've enjoyed from the start up to the end. You really do write a very excellent poems. You took the attention out of me, that's for sure. Lol
You've the originality and creepy way to describe vivid scene!
Thank you for waiting sharing and will be checking again with you, I believe that you also posting for the Halloween contest right?
Love much,
Lynn:0)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thanks very much, Lynn, I appreciate those kind comments. Yes, I do have a poem in the Halloween Contest. It is in my portfolio, and it's entitled "The Bones of Robert Payne". Check it out some time, if you like...
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Will be checking it for sure!!!:)
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It's in a book collection titled "A poem is Worth a Thousand Pictures". You'll find it in that book, along with all of my other 'pictapoems'...
Comment from dmt1967
Very well written my friend I hope you are alright and well very nice background picture as well love the whole atmosphere of the poem thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Very well written my friend I hope you are alright and well very nice background picture as well love the whole atmosphere of the poem thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much, dmt1967 my friend!
Yeah, I'm hanging in there, thanks I pray you are well, too!
Comment from Lulube
First off I'm so glad that this cemetery Harker's Mill,is no way close to where I am. And secondly, I would guarantee you that I would not go a-visiting there even if I could.
Great imageries that I hope do not stay into my sleep.
good work
lulube
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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First off I'm so glad that this cemetery Harker's Mill,is no way close to where I am. And secondly, I would guarantee you that I would not go a-visiting there even if I could.
Great imageries that I hope do not stay into my sleep.
good work
lulube
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review, Lulube!
Sweet dreams, heh-heh...
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What is your costume next week Dean?
How long will it take you to come together? Oh, you've already started!!!! lol
lulube
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I wear it year around, my friend, LOL...
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lol lol shit!!!! great funny Now I don't often suggest for one to read something of mine but it's just the pic that you really need to get into.,
2 Faces, just posted today. try it there's more to it than what I wrote on
lulube