Comment from cinderbella

Excellent

Cruel and chilling, and hilarious, all at once.
"..intimate intestinal embrace" You have quite a way with words, Mikey, and imagination to boot.
Lots of great alliteration. I loved it! :) Sandra

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

Thank you very much Sandra. I just thought I would throw this one out there. ha! I love to exaggerate. This is exaggerating to the furthest extreme. Delighted you liked this and won't be joining the lynch mob! mikey

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

from the title to the picture like mixing colous of love dear friend very beautifully penned sings of the page a real beauty sweet love smiling

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

Glad you got it. Ha! Not many do. Much appreciated. mikey

Comment from kenni

Excellent

I'm totally mesmerized and delightfully confused, I think. Have I just witnessed a killing or a blowjob? Whatever. Powerful imagery and driving rhythms, extremely emotive: erotic, and just great writing, as far as I'm concerned. Aye aye. kenni

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

You are right on the money my friend. You are about the only that got this. I am exaggerating love making to the extreme to where it sounds much like two people devouring each other. I was hoping at least one person would get this. Thank you very much. Excellent observations. mikey

reply by kenni on 19-Oct-2013

Every now and then I get one right. You have a good working imagination.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Don't know if I'm ready for that kind of love song.

Your heroine suggests Poe and the grim details of death and disease reek of him as well.

No let up in the gloomy horror as your poem crescendos to the very end.

Steve

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

Yes, now that you mention it, I see that. This is my extreme exaggeration of love to the maximum extent of exaggeration. I use Lenore whenever I don't want to identify the individual directly. I debated whether to submit this. An evil voice told me to. ha! Appreciate the mention of Poe though not exactly a compliment. ha! Thank you for reading and reviewing. Your thoughts are appreciated. mike

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Sweetie...did you remember to take your meds this morning?
I laid them out for you on the...oh dear where did I put those pills?
Any way while I look for them...this is wonderful in spots. And some I agree with...but...damn

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 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

You should have read the other nice sweet one. hahaha. I admit this one is pretty nuts. I found the pills and I promise to take them BEFORE my next piece! But, I already wrote a Halloween poem. Really sweet involving cauldrons and kids and things. mikey

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Wow is this a couple of vampires or what?
Intriguing to say the least my friend. I jumped the gun and came straight here again. Working on my book today so have a look for some Chapters to review!
Unsutured un satiated should that be insatiated not sure. un satiated probably right. Phew what a gourmet's delight?? Um Ah.

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 Comment Written 19-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

Should have read the other sweet love poem. hahaha! This is a crazy one for sure! I will look for the new chapters. mike

reply by Sankey on 19-Oct-2013

Not new chapters just updated between 7 and 10 ok! Look for the Promotion

reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013

will do. mike