The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Eagles eye (Tableau)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Carolyn,
This is a great poem, written very well and interesting. I don't recall seeing a Tableau poem before when each sentence has five syllables. Sounds like fun though.
Kat
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Hi Carolyn,
This is a great poem, written very well and interesting. I don't recall seeing a Tableau poem before when each sentence has five syllables. Sounds like fun though.
Kat
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thanks Kat for enjoying this one. It was fun to write. I have now written author informational notes about the Tableau which I found on this site. :-) Carolyn
Comment from david bell
You have just proven that a poem doesn't need a lot of lines to be great. The Columbus zoo has an eagle and I think one of our parks does also.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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You have just proven that a poem doesn't need a lot of lines to be great. The Columbus zoo has an eagle and I think one of our parks does also.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thanks David, I love Eagles too. :-)
Comment from The Death
You have shared a wonderful moment here.Use of strong verbs make a strong impact and creates a lot of imagery.Nice use of assonance and consonance.You should include info about this form in notes.Amazing work:)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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You have shared a wonderful moment here.Use of strong verbs make a strong impact and creates a lot of imagery.Nice use of assonance and consonance.You should include info about this form in notes.Amazing work:)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Hi there, I have written informational notes about this charming form that I found here on FS. Maybe you will post one also. Thanks for the great review. Carolyn
Comment from Brocha1
I really enjoyed this Tableau. I especially liked Lush tall golden grass- the words are very smooth and almost sing.I find the second line a little stilted but in all you have painted a vivid picture of the eagle's flight.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I really enjoyed this Tableau. I especially liked Lush tall golden grass- the words are very smooth and almost sing.I find the second line a little stilted but in all you have painted a vivid picture of the eagle's flight.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I appreciate all you have said and am delighted you enjoyed this one. Carolyn
Comment from denhagan
This was a very nice tableau style poem, a new style to me, about an eagle. had a nice picture to accompany the poem. Good colorful and descriptive use of words.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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This was a very nice tableau style poem, a new style to me, about an eagle. had a nice picture to accompany the poem. Good colorful and descriptive use of words.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the wonderful review. I'm glad you liked it. Carolyn
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You're welcome Carolyn,
Dennis
Comment from Jackarrie
A great image of nature in the wild grasses. I looked up Tableau on poetry dances and this style was not there, I have not heard of it,
Thunderbird soars high
Keenly peers ore plains
Lush tall golden grass
Buffalo wallows
Seen by eagles eye
Rabbits habitat
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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A great image of nature in the wild grasses. I looked up Tableau on poetry dances and this style was not there, I have not heard of it,
Thunderbird soars high
Keenly peers ore plains
Lush tall golden grass
Buffalo wallows
Seen by eagles eye
Rabbits habitat
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I found this one on FS. Since posting this I have written informational author notes regarding the Tableau. I'm happy you enjoyed this one. Maybe you will try one. :-)Carolyn
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
Nice passage. The most visual moment for me is "Lush tall golden grass". It gives a nice, mellow pause in the reading. That lines forces me to slow down even as I read it over again I can't get myself to read that line quickly. That's a nice touch. The last line bounces off the lips like a rabbit. Though it changes the pace a bit awkwardly it doesn't seem to distract.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Nice passage. The most visual moment for me is "Lush tall golden grass". It gives a nice, mellow pause in the reading. That lines forces me to slow down even as I read it over again I can't get myself to read that line quickly. That's a nice touch. The last line bounces off the lips like a rabbit. Though it changes the pace a bit awkwardly it doesn't seem to distract.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Well thank you for such a through review. I am glad it made you slow down for a minute. :-) we all need that occasionally. In my minds eye, when the eagle saw the ' rab bits hab I tat... he speeds up his flight for the final swoop. (Aren't we poets silly sometimes?) so happy you enjoyed this one. Carolyn
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, notesandmore, you did an excellent job writing this tableau giving us a glimpse of what the eagle sees. what are the rules of a tableau?
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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this is very well written, notesandmore, you did an excellent job writing this tableau giving us a glimpse of what the eagle sees. what are the rules of a tableau?
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Hi there, I just posted author informational notes about the Tableau. I actually found one here on FS and thought I would try it. I am delighted you liked this one. Want to try one? :-) Carolyn
Comment from krys123
Thank you for sharing this with myself, fans and other readers. Your conceptual topic and/or concept is particularly of freedom and of a hunting ground which is free for the tall soaring Eagles, that being rabbits. Your graphic description of this poem is done to perfection. This and including your imagery has proved to be profoundly and wisely chosen. You have a good one and God bless. I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
AK
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you for sharing this with myself, fans and other readers. Your conceptual topic and/or concept is particularly of freedom and of a hunting ground which is free for the tall soaring Eagles, that being rabbits. Your graphic description of this poem is done to perfection. This and including your imagery has proved to be profoundly and wisely chosen. You have a good one and God bless. I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
AK
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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AK, Your wonderful review means a lot to me. Thank you for being so through and for enjoying this one. Carolyn
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You are welcome Carolyn.