For Now
123 words, 47 fans16 total reviews
Comment from RYME4U
I like the theme of this one...it's hard to behave when you are a kid...The rhyme and rhythm are well done and the presentation is nicely done. Nice work!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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I like the theme of this one...it's hard to behave when you are a kid...The rhyme and rhythm are well done and the presentation is nicely done. Nice work!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the kind words. I have fun with these kiddy poems. - Wendy
Comment from visionary1234
What a very strange competition Wendy - asking to display number of 'fans'! No author notes but you have author notes? A sweet, whimsical piece - no surprise there, as I know you'll always give me something unique. And here was the forgiveness-before-it-happened concept which was delightful.
(There's waaaay to (too) many rules to learn!)
"Disrupt the class," run in the halls. - I think I'd leave out the inverted commas for "Disrupt the class" and just have it in list form like the other transgressions???
I'm not writing or reviewing much at the moment - I'm in a play, rehearsing 6 nights a week for the next five weeks, then performing for 3 weeks ... so all fairly intense - so not much time for anything else by the time all the B&B stuff is taken care of ... but I saw you'd posted something new and just had to take a peek!
Big hugs
Sharyn
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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What a very strange competition Wendy - asking to display number of 'fans'! No author notes but you have author notes? A sweet, whimsical piece - no surprise there, as I know you'll always give me something unique. And here was the forgiveness-before-it-happened concept which was delightful.
(There's waaaay to (too) many rules to learn!)
"Disrupt the class," run in the halls. - I think I'd leave out the inverted commas for "Disrupt the class" and just have it in list form like the other transgressions???
I'm not writing or reviewing much at the moment - I'm in a play, rehearsing 6 nights a week for the next five weeks, then performing for 3 weeks ... so all fairly intense - so not much time for anything else by the time all the B&B stuff is taken care of ... but I saw you'd posted something new and just had to take a peek!
Big hugs
Sharyn
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Hi Sharyn, I do miss treading the boards dear and I am so jealous. What play? What Part?
I am overrun with guests right now, so mostly cleaning up and posting stuff that I had in the hopper already. A few new ones, but no concentrated poetry time. I appreciate the suggestions, the reprimand and agree, the fan number is puzzling except that perhaps it keeps the perpetual winners at bay? - Wendy
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"Bermuda Avenue Triangle" - a fun romp about two oldies in Las Vegas who meet a Lothario and transform accordingly - I play Tess, the crankly old Irish lady - total FUN! WHEW!
Oh dear - I hope it didn't come across as a reprimand!!! :)
Comment from Debra White
Yay!! Let us let kids be kids while they can, they grow up way too quickly.
I love this.
Lovely and smoothly flowing, excellent meter and rhyme.
The kid in this poem is a very lively, fun and likeable character, just how kids should be!
Excellent presentation and overall wonderful.
Well done...good luck in the contest.
Kindest regards, Debra :)
ps. As per prompt rules, there shouldn't be any author notes (although it's good to know what you wrote in your notes!)
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Yay!! Let us let kids be kids while they can, they grow up way too quickly.
I love this.
Lovely and smoothly flowing, excellent meter and rhyme.
The kid in this poem is a very lively, fun and likeable character, just how kids should be!
Excellent presentation and overall wonderful.
Well done...good luck in the contest.
Kindest regards, Debra :)
ps. As per prompt rules, there shouldn't be any author notes (although it's good to know what you wrote in your notes!)
Comment Written 11-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks Debra for the read and review. I missed the notes notation as I was rushing as usual. I appreciate your letting me know about that and for listing, specifically, what you liked. - Wendy
Comment from Domino 2
Thanks very much for entering, Wendy.
However, I must insist you delete your 'author notes', as they contravene the rules, as none are allowed.
This is very cute, and of course we all should 'forgive' the kids' development and humour.
After all, we're ALL adults with hang-ups for far too long.
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much for entering, Wendy.
However, I must insist you delete your 'author notes', as they contravene the rules, as none are allowed.
This is very cute, and of course we all should 'forgive' the kids' development and humour.
After all, we're ALL adults with hang-ups for far too long.
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2013
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Sorry about the notes Ted, I missed that part (I tend to rush through things.) All deleted. Thanks for hosting the contest. - Wendy
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No probs, Wendy, and thanks.
I'm the same with 'rushing' - I put everything off to the last minute and then panic! :-)
Ted x
Comment from SteveY
A great little story told in wonderful poetic style and format. A great children's story that should maybe be read to them at bedtime.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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A great little story told in wonderful poetic style and format. A great children's story that should maybe be read to them at bedtime.
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks Steve. I think children should be read to daily and every night. - Wendy
Comment from Iese
Awesome, fun, relate able, and I enjoyed reading you were able to capture the feel of being a child one-day where everything else felt like ti was better to be doing. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Awesome, fun, relate able, and I enjoyed reading you were able to capture the feel of being a child one-day where everything else felt like ti was better to be doing. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Hi Iese, (you will have to let me know how to pronounce that.) I combined both my son and daughter (both approaching 40 now) to create this one. Kids want to be loved as unconditionally as they love you and need to be reassured of their lovability frequently, since we also spend so much time telling them what they have done wrong. - Wendy