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Comment from Darkhorse555
FROM THE PICTURE MICK IT LOOKS LIKE SHES ALL FIRED UP READY FOR ACTION I CAN DIG IT ROLLING ON THE TRACKS IN THE SOUND EXCELLENT PIECE MY OLD FRIEND
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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FROM THE PICTURE MICK IT LOOKS LIKE SHES ALL FIRED UP READY FOR ACTION I CAN DIG IT ROLLING ON THE TRACKS IN THE SOUND EXCELLENT PIECE MY OLD FRIEND
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I like this one myself. ha! thank you, mike
Comment from ravenblack
Or infinity will disappear/ and all the wind/ will slip over the horizon- keep moving or longing to move or the tracks slipping out to the vanishing point will do simply that- vanish. Hearing a train whistle always gets me goin' akin to Johnny Cash . Great song. Don't stop longing to hop the train.
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Or infinity will disappear/ and all the wind/ will slip over the horizon- keep moving or longing to move or the tracks slipping out to the vanishing point will do simply that- vanish. Hearing a train whistle always gets me goin' akin to Johnny Cash . Great song. Don't stop longing to hop the train.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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very pleased you like this one. this is one of mine that I finished and thought "that's pretty good." yes, love hearing that whistle at 2am when I can't sleep telling me it's okay. regards, mike
Comment from Cajungirl
Some of us go through life like smoke in the wind, no directions--no plans. Loved your poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
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Some of us go through life like smoke in the wind, no directions--no plans. Loved your poem. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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kind words. thank you. mike
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of taking the reader where the reader needs to go. The photo compliments the piece well as the words bring the photo to life. I see nothing that I would change in this piece. Good job.
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The writer does a good job of taking the reader where the reader needs to go. The photo compliments the piece well as the words bring the photo to life. I see nothing that I would change in this piece. Good job.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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thank you. mike
Comment from rhonny
I like your kind of poetry. It's quite different and deep. Your words have a way of drawing me in and looking for more. I think apostrophes on the end of abbreviated words blowin',,, polishin' etc would be good, and 'whose' needs to be who's.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I like your kind of poetry. It's quite different and deep. Your words have a way of drawing me in and looking for more. I think apostrophes on the end of abbreviated words blowin',,, polishin' etc would be good, and 'whose' needs to be who's.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I knew "whose" looked awfully strange to me. ha! thank you. completely forgot about the apostrophes as well. thank you for pointing that out. it is funny how you know something is off but, you can't put your finger on it. I sure appreciate you taking the time to wade through my poetry which I know at times is much different than the norm. I am so happy you give it a chance and often find something to your liking. your reviews are always helpful and appreciated. regards, mike
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glad to help! Rhonda :)
Comment from amanda98653
Hi Mike:)
A beautiful poem you've written there.
"smoke at the wind's mercy
no direction of its own "- A very good use of personification
Smoke, like reality, blinds us and makes it hard to move on.
"we wouldn't want to sit around
in a cloud of smoke
can't see too well like that
not enough oxygen
in smokey air "
We never want to dwell in uncertainty
"makes me want to ride it away
like smoke at the wind's mercy"
A very good use of repetition there, goes back to the main point.
Very beautiful
-Amanda
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hi Mike:)
A beautiful poem you've written there.
"smoke at the wind's mercy
no direction of its own "- A very good use of personification
Smoke, like reality, blinds us and makes it hard to move on.
"we wouldn't want to sit around
in a cloud of smoke
can't see too well like that
not enough oxygen
in smokey air "
We never want to dwell in uncertainty
"makes me want to ride it away
like smoke at the wind's mercy"
A very good use of repetition there, goes back to the main point.
Very beautiful
-Amanda
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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pleased that you like this one as this is one that I like myself. one of my few songs that I will listen to. great review. warmest regards, mike
Comment from krys123
It would like to thank sharing your poem with fans and other readers and writers. You have a multi-conceptual to your poem. What does many concepts it is fun too jostle between the many different ideas that you are trying to portray. The rim of your poem was done a very well so well that makes it easy to read your style. I like your ending because it's fitting to be blown away like smoke to wear the wind and the air takes you. Very nicely written Michael and I enjoyed it very much. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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It would like to thank sharing your poem with fans and other readers and writers. You have a multi-conceptual to your poem. What does many concepts it is fun too jostle between the many different ideas that you are trying to portray. The rim of your poem was done a very well so well that makes it easy to read your style. I like your ending because it's fitting to be blown away like smoke to wear the wind and the air takes you. Very nicely written Michael and I enjoyed it very much. You have a good one in God bless.
AK
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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a very thoughtful review that is always so appreciated. so happy you enjoyed this one as I kind of like it myself. mike
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You are welcome
Comment from baustian64
I really like your poem. It makes me think about smoke, any smoke. I live in Montana and right now we are having Forest Fires, not only is the smoke at the wind's mercy, so is the fire and the fire firefighters.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I really like your poem. It makes me think about smoke, any smoke. I live in Montana and right now we are having Forest Fires, not only is the smoke at the wind's mercy, so is the fire and the fire firefighters.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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hope that works out. I am sure the fire fighters will take control before long. glad you liked my poem. mike
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. It inspired great mental images. I like the flow that it has. You express your theme well. The picture is a good choice.
Barbara
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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This is a wonderful poem. It inspired great mental images. I like the flow that it has. You express your theme well. The picture is a good choice.
Barbara
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Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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most kind. appreciate the very encouraging words. thank you, mike