A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "~Clowns in my Head~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
52 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Creepy carnival and creepy clowns. Ohhh they are so scary too Dean. You.ll be scarin' the bejeezus out of every one with this one. Yikes.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Creepy carnival and creepy clowns. Ohhh they are so scary too Dean. You.ll be scarin' the bejeezus out of every one with this one. Yikes.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thank you Gungalo, I appreciate it. So sorry for the lengthy response time, we just moved into a new home and I had to go with a totally different internet provider. I was down for a few days... I'm back up again now. It's kinda' like sex, you know? Up again, down again---Well, I won't go there... or, have I already? Oh hell, I think I'd better go take my meds...
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Not to worry. Something have to be done.
Comment from GracieAnn
Dean, I was able to grab a few data bites to review this one. Definitely a look into the childish mindset tortured with evil. Unfortunately for some who are mentally ill adults, this is not far from fantasy for them never having a quiet mind is hell.
"For our struggle is not against flesh and blood, but against the rulers, against the authorities, against the powers of this dark world and against the spiritual forces of evil in the heavenly realms" (Ephesians 6:12 New International Version) GracieAnn
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Dean, I was able to grab a few data bites to review this one. Definitely a look into the childish mindset tortured with evil. Unfortunately for some who are mentally ill adults, this is not far from fantasy for them never having a quiet mind is hell.
"For our struggle is not against flesh and blood, but against the rulers, against the authorities, against the powers of this dark world and against the spiritual forces of evil in the heavenly realms" (Ephesians 6:12 New International Version) GracieAnn
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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So true, Gracie Ann, and thanks for the biblical reference. It was spot-on...
Comment from Selina Stambi
NICE. So very well done, as always.
Reminded me of the imaginary (or was it??) Zeego that my kids used to talk about when they were little, their eyes wide, as they pointed to the closet from their cribs. I was beginning to wonder ...!
You've really got into the child's head, Dean. This was very well done - had a real Victorian feel to it. A horrific R.L. Stevenson, perhaps. :)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
NICE. So very well done, as always.
Reminded me of the imaginary (or was it??) Zeego that my kids used to talk about when they were little, their eyes wide, as they pointed to the closet from their cribs. I was beginning to wonder ...!
You've really got into the child's head, Dean. This was very well done - had a real Victorian feel to it. A horrific R.L. Stevenson, perhaps. :)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, Reachingforthestars, I truly appreciate that!
Comment from tfawcus
Yes - I suppose we all have clowns in our head, some more malicious than others. Thanks for your brief summary of the history of the clown. You manage to create a wonderful sense of tension in your poem between the rational self trying to keep the clowns at bay and the clowns urging him to let them out 'to play'. What devastation and destruction can ensue when the clowns win that battle. There is something particularly chilling about the laughing maniac.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Yes - I suppose we all have clowns in our head, some more malicious than others. Thanks for your brief summary of the history of the clown. You manage to create a wonderful sense of tension in your poem between the rational self trying to keep the clowns at bay and the clowns urging him to let them out 'to play'. What devastation and destruction can ensue when the clowns win that battle. There is something particularly chilling about the laughing maniac.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Yes, and Pink Floyd's fantastic song, "Brain Damage" always tends to remind me of this fact.
Thanks for the spot-on review, tfawcus...
Comment from patsypats
Can't say I'm a fan of such work, but it is well written and with such graphic and vivid imagery through your word choices.The music really make your words come to life.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Can't say I'm a fan of such work, but it is well written and with such graphic and vivid imagery through your word choices.The music really make your words come to life.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Dean
Fabulous as usual. You are quite a mega talent. presentation is perfect. Your meter and rhyme is outstanding in this. Your words certainly contain the horror of one afraid of clowns. When I first heard that so many fear these painted entertainers, I thought it curious.I wondered what could possibly scare them? As a four year old I was taken to the circus and when I received a new puppy shortly after named him after the clown I remembered in the circus. My name was "Bimbo", I can't be sure that was the clown's correct name, but that is what it came across to me. LOL
As I grew older I did come to understand how they can be scary. After all Punch and Judy were pretty violent. Loved your informative notes. I usually try to keep my notes to a minimum, yet when I think the readers might be interested I add a little information or history. You gave us heaps of info and an interesting subject to peruse further.
I love the images you create, enough to scare the pants off me. Graphic and disturbing, poor little boy, what nightmares. I love the last line ... if you can't beat 'em, join 'em. Hahaha! That image is awesome.
** "... but there (they're) in there ..." - typo.
Great work and very entertaining. Hugs - Lovinia xoxoxo
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Hi Dean
Fabulous as usual. You are quite a mega talent. presentation is perfect. Your meter and rhyme is outstanding in this. Your words certainly contain the horror of one afraid of clowns. When I first heard that so many fear these painted entertainers, I thought it curious.I wondered what could possibly scare them? As a four year old I was taken to the circus and when I received a new puppy shortly after named him after the clown I remembered in the circus. My name was "Bimbo", I can't be sure that was the clown's correct name, but that is what it came across to me. LOL
As I grew older I did come to understand how they can be scary. After all Punch and Judy were pretty violent. Loved your informative notes. I usually try to keep my notes to a minimum, yet when I think the readers might be interested I add a little information or history. You gave us heaps of info and an interesting subject to peruse further.
I love the images you create, enough to scare the pants off me. Graphic and disturbing, poor little boy, what nightmares. I love the last line ... if you can't beat 'em, join 'em. Hahaha! That image is awesome.
** "... but there (they're) in there ..." - typo.
Great work and very entertaining. Hugs - Lovinia xoxoxo
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much for the fantastic review, Lovinia. I do appreciate that!
Comment from Spitfire
I'm thinking this is what a demon child would say... We talk about having demons to deal with. He has clowns. Hell, if you can't beat them, join them. Love the ending. Excellent meter and rhyme and terrifying images. I'll look under my bed tonight!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
I'm thinking this is what a demon child would say... We talk about having demons to deal with. He has clowns. Hell, if you can't beat them, join them. Love the ending. Excellent meter and rhyme and terrifying images. I'll look under my bed tonight!
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Spit, and please, don't look too long or too hard. You might be terrified at what you find lurking under there. Some things are best left unknown, I think...
Comment from Christof McTarnahan
Ahh, more friggin klowns. The only klown that did anything remotely interesting was Pogo. (Uncle Gacy's other half). If you got klowns in your head D - Nuts it is time for a drill bit lobotomy. Fantastic poem.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Ahh, more friggin klowns. The only klown that did anything remotely interesting was Pogo. (Uncle Gacy's other half). If you got klowns in your head D - Nuts it is time for a drill bit lobotomy. Fantastic poem.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Well, I did have, 'Sak, but they're all out now. Poor mother. She never knew what hit her...
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
This one reminds me of how my younger son used to be afraid of his clown doll. Maybe he was on to something I didn't understand. God, that ending really got to me. Poor mother! Were you a devilish child? Another entertaining read, my friend.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
Hi Dean,
This one reminds me of how my younger son used to be afraid of his clown doll. Maybe he was on to something I didn't understand. God, that ending really got to me. Poor mother! Were you a devilish child? Another entertaining read, my friend.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Was I a devilish child? Hah, do you even need to ask?
Seriously, Lou, thanks very much for your outstanding review!
Comment from Darkhorse555
mother of sweet mothers now thats what i call a clown wait to you see what i have right up your street the darkest of dark i tell you a tale excellent piece my old friend
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
mother of sweet mothers now thats what i call a clown wait to you see what i have right up your street the darkest of dark i tell you a tale excellent piece my old friend
Comment Written 03-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Hah, thanks, Oh Dark One...coming from you, that means a lot to me!