The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Senryu (joy like a fountain)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from Hollyhock
Really enjoyed this one.
The whole poem breathed the feeling of joy. From the first line, which could stand alone as a title, through the movement and freedom of line two, to the raison d'etre "hearts full of love".
Neat, concise, reads well, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Really enjoyed this one.
The whole poem breathed the feeling of joy. From the first line, which could stand alone as a title, through the movement and freedom of line two, to the raison d'etre "hearts full of love".
Neat, concise, reads well, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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I appreciate your time and the wonderful comments. Glad you enjoyed it. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Sueellen11
Beautiful Senryu true to rom and count, worded so beautifully, love the picture, a excellent entry into this contest, good luck, blessings , sueellen
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Beautiful Senryu true to rom and count, worded so beautifully, love the picture, a excellent entry into this contest, good luck, blessings , sueellen
Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Thanks Sueellen, for a wonderful review
Comment from vkmack
Really like this--and it uses emotion! Some of the entries don't even bother with that. The artwork adds a lot here, too.
You choice of words here is excellent--"fountain, bubbles, wild and free"--all to describe joy. Use of youth and hearts is extremely good as well. All of this speaks to the emotion of love very well, not just joy alone. You've done excellent work with this senryu. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Really like this--and it uses emotion! Some of the entries don't even bother with that. The artwork adds a lot here, too.
You choice of words here is excellent--"fountain, bubbles, wild and free"--all to describe joy. Use of youth and hearts is extremely good as well. All of this speaks to the emotion of love very well, not just joy alone. You've done excellent work with this senryu. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Thanks so much for the great review and rating. I am happy you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Caressa_08
Believe this is the way our Dear God wanted his gifts, our children, our youth to be, So joyous, so exuberant, like your poem, Exuberance, expresses, with complimentary picture to enhance your wondrous poem...
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Believe this is the way our Dear God wanted his gifts, our children, our youth to be, So joyous, so exuberant, like your poem, Exuberance, expresses, with complimentary picture to enhance your wondrous poem...
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Comment Written 24-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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What a wonderful review and such insightful comments. Have a great weekend.