Comment from Jade Lawson

Excellent

I wish I could give you a six, but I can't. This work is wonderful. I loved the word choice the imagery, the creepy sound. I love also how you ended saying it's your imagination... great!
The darkness of this poem was beautiful and outstanding. One of your bests. You just dragged me into each description of each tale.
I enjoyed this style very much, but at the moment I am not sure why, I think my poetry muse is sleeping.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Ah well, sixer, or no sixer, I still very much appreciate you taking the time to speak your mind about it, Angel. That's always a pleasure!

reply by Jade Lawson on 21-Aug-2013

Glad you liked, always a pleasure. I don't have any sixes left this week, but I think I'm not allowed to give you more sixes for a while because of the system. I've been trying to write a poem for a contest outside fs because it pays, but I'm not sure what's happening to me, my muse must be on vacation.

Comment from lindalcreel

Excellent

I think this works pretty well. I love the use if the pictures. Everything that you described in this poem can be identified by the writers of different genre's. I hope you continue with this line of poetry. It was well done. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks very much, lindalcreel, that's exactly the sort of feedback I needed. If the poem wasn't very well received, I wasn't even going to attempt another one like it. However, I've been pleasantly surprised by how well it's been received, so I suppose I'll continue to do them for a while. They are exceptionally hard to produce!

Thanks so much, again.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I did like the general layout a lot very original. I did not think it was that scary, might be as you were concentrating on the form. Nice and original.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thank you Robina, and you are absolutely right, I didn't want it to be overly horrifying. I wanted to include the nicer places in my imagination that writers like yourself sometimes take me to in your stories and poems. No all of them are scary places...

Thanks, again.

reply by robina1978 on 23-Aug-2013

welcome, Ine

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

I really wish I could have saved a 6 star rating opportunity for this little gem Deano..I love the flow I love the presentation..every one of your posts are like a movie..I love it..when you come aboard facebook I am so looking forward to you sharing one of these gems for all my friends to see....you are amazing!

dip

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks, dip. I think your special brand of poetry is pretty amazing too, my good friend!

reply by DR DIP on 21-Aug-2013

I mis calculated I have only 196 posts so I am here for another day that will make an even 200..talk on facey..did you get my reply to your question?

reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Yes, I did dip, thanks!

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

I COULD LIVE WITH IT,----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks, country ranch writer...me too-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

Comment from marijmd

Excellent

Oh your imagination - that does work - at first I was thinking of a movie theater. Of course a journey inside your head would certainly be cool too!

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks, marijmd. I sincerely appreciate that, & I am very glad you felt that way!

Comment from S A Bullen

Exceptional

Dean, this is an excellent piece. You have such a vivid imagination and you seem to be able to translate it perfectly in rhyme. This new style flows well and presents a mystical picture: a conglomeration of fantasy and horror as a trailer for film. I can actually see the detective's smokey office-film-noir style. Well done. Sheryn :-)

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks very much, Sheryn. I just thought I'd test the waters, see how it did here on FS. I must say, I was apprehensive, at first. But, many people seemed to like it, so perhaps I'll do a few more 'pictapoems'.
Thanks for your excellent feedback, as always!

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

Oh yes Dean your imagination is one horrorlandia where you can travel at the flick of your finger. It does seem that scary stories just grow leaves on your fingers that you can just pick them out of whim. What I mean is, it comes out naturally, that you are never run out of ideas. God bless, my friend, and may the Lord's guidance temper the scare blood running in your veins. Be well my friend.

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks, nassus957, I appreciate the gracious remarks. The Lord's guidance is always my primary guiding light, even blinding at times...

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

The writer stays consistent with the aabb rhyme scheme. The rhyming is good. The piece flows well as the writer does a good job of not forcing the rhymes. The writer delivers a dark message that holds the readers attention from start to finish.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks, RR, I am very glad you thought so, my friend.

Comment from poet.wayne

Exceptional

I like it! I always print my poems and writing over a pic- faded just enough for the writing to show clearly. Is there any special writing format here? If there is let me know, I'm always looking for new forms to learn. I enjoyed all the diverse images you presented... all quite lifelike. Great music too... fits perfectly!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013

Thanks, PW, I appreciate it buddy!

I'll get back with you in a PM about the formatting of one of these most challenging poems! It's quite a job!

reply by poet.wayne on 21-Aug-2013

Thanx... can't wait!