Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

Your sonnet filled with vivid imagery is delightful. I especially enjoyed your abundant use of alliteration and your "serenades" metaphor. Your presentation is striking as well. -Joan

 Comment Written 03-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thank you so much, Joan :-). This one came to me while I was heading for my evening train - I just had to get it written down!

Mike

Comment from Rdfrdmom2

Excellent

Oh, Fleedleflump:

You did not go to the zoo, I'm thinking; you went
to the wildlands of either Asia or Africa to get
this kind of primal feeling for your protective
and loving tigress


thanks for sharing
love,
jan

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thank you, Jan :-). The truest specimens can only exist in their natural habitats.

Mike

Comment from WLHall

Excellent

I liked this for the content, but also the way you used words with started with the same letter early in the poem, like "and punctures me with poise, my perfect balm." and "When battle beckons, boisterous and brash," The repetitious letters are so powerful when spoke out loud. Love those strong "p" and "b" words. Brings the poem even more to life. Great job!

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thank you, Wanda :-). They have a solid, stark sound, those Ps and Bs, don't they? Great for creating a staccato, juddering rhythm. I'm so happy you enjoyed this one :-).

Mike

Comment from Sasha

Exceptional

This is marvelous. I loved every word. You convey such vivid descriptive detail that I actually got goosebumps. Marvelous, just marvelous. Great artistic presentation too with pauline cheeseman's beautiful photograph on a black background. This most definitely deserves a 6 and I am so happy I still had one to give you.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thank you, my wonderful friend :-). This one came to me, rather than needing too much thinking. I'm so glad it came across as well as it sounded in my head.

Mike

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

FS says I have given you too many sixes. I don't think they know what they are talking about because your word usage in this poem deserves another six.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thank you, Barbara - what a wonderful compliment :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Mike

Comment from elgone

Excellent

This is a well written poem with a natural theme about it. It is a smooth read. The imagery is strong. It is very easy to imagine the tigress and the setting as described.

E

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thanks so much, E - I'm thrilled you enjoyed it :-).

Mike

Comment from Deejharrington

Excellent

Loved it! It certainly deserves a six. I love the way you use the language so well to describe "your tigress" protecting and staying by your side forever. A beautiful and enjoyable read.
deb

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thanks so muc, Deb! I'm so glad you liked it :-).

Mike

reply by Deejharrington on 03-Apr-2012

my pleasure
deb

Comment from Herb

Excellent

Mike me old china this is exceptional stuff. But I'm afraid I haven't got the stars to reward you, there aint enough in the world.

sublime, Peter

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Cheers, Peter! I was really pleased with the idea for this, so I'm glad it's come out well.

Mike

Comment from James crofoot

Excellent

Good job. that's the kind of women to have. lol. Sorry if this isn't about a woman, that's what I got out of it.

This is free verse, right. It was well written and had a very cool flow. thanks for paying me to read it. peace

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

You got it dead right, James. It's Blank Verse; non-rhyming lines in iambic pentameter.

Mike

Comment from Rasp E

Excellent

"Punctures me with poise" is such a fascinating line.

Juxtaposing the visceral and violent imagery with such a loyal and admiring tone...I like the effect.

The final quatrain and couplet are especially nice.

Good job!

I see you've got Chronicles of the Wandering Man out! Oooh. I've been waiting for that!

E

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2012

Thank you, Erica :-). You're the only person who mentioned the violent/tenderness contrast, which was the central theme of the poem for me.

Oh yes, got the Wandering Man on Kindle. The formatting was a nightmare! I think it worked in the end though.

Mike