Comment from alexisleech

Excellent

Gorgeous! I have only come across two people on this site who I swear could talk in rhyme and perfect meter all day long, and you are one of them. Another delightful addition to your poetry stories, which I enjoyed tremendously. Alexis x

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012

That is such a great compliment, alexis, thank you so much! xsx

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

I love it. It is a children's poem of glee. They are so fulfilling to compose. I just wrote one for a granddaughter called 'the honeybee' and sent it to my Son. He immediately recited the last verse. I was dumbfounded.This poem made me feel like a child again!

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012

Thank you, artemis. You must post 'The Honeybee,' you would be surprised how many adults like these childrens poems, I enjoy writing them too. Thank you for the lovely review, I am so glad you liked it. xsx

Comment from rightforyou

Excellent

Sandra

Wow what a wonderful job on this awesome poem...I think that this tells a whole story and a fun one too read.I enjoyed the flow of the story through the poem very well done...Ron

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012

Thank you, Ron! You are the one that I look to mostly, as you are such an honest man at reviewing, I know if you didn't like it, you would tell me. Thank you! Sandra. xsx

reply by rightforyou on 01-Feb-2012

You need to write a book...Kids will love this !!!

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is a very cute story. I don't usually stick with the long poems but I stuck with this one to the ending. I enjoyed the suspense of the surprise gift. I was not disappointed one bit. A home made rocking chair would be a lovely gift. This Mummy Mouse is lucky to have a family that loves her so much!

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012

Thank you, Joy. That is an even better review. If the words made you read it to the end when you wouldn't normally, the I think I might have done something right. Thank you!! xsx

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

This poem is wonderful! We are kindred spirits. We enjoy the same type of poetry. Your poem sounds like my Cat and Mouse or FOOTBALL? SERIOUSLY? I have become a Fan. I read the one where they went camping. GOOD JOB! Honeycomb

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2012

That is such a compliment, thank you, Honeycomb! I must make sure my stories come up to scratch! Thank you for such a lovley review. xsx

Comment from babylonia

Excellent

sandra,
this is great. i actually see it as a children's book. maybe add something like mummy doesn't have her own chair or not. either way ... children would love this one. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

Thank you, babylonia, what a lovely review! I am always reading and re-writing parts of my Mice series, I get lots of imput from you all which is so helpful. One day perhaps I will be able to get them published but it is a very competitive market. Thank you again. xsx

reply by babylonia on 31-Jan-2012

it is but from what i understand the children's market is one that the editors actually read the ms versus a flunky or agent. keep trying. it would probably help if you already had illustrations.

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

I will! thank you for such wonderful encouragement! xx sandra.

reply by babylonia on 31-Jan-2012

sandra,
you are very welcome~
love,
barbara

Comment from Denise S

Excellent

You told quite a mousy tale. I really enjoyed reading about this wonderful birthday. Wow it was very nice of these creatures to do so much for mummy. And the rhymes were great

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

Thank you, Denise, I am glad you enjoyed reading it. My sons weren't quite as nice as these mice, but they still gave me a nice birthday! xsx

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Sandra,

How easy do the words come to you when creating your poems? This is amazing and should be a childrens' book,
Such a delightful writer you are!

livelylinda

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

Thank you, linda! What a lovely thing to say. I am so glad you like my writing, I have as much fun working them out, I am still a big kid at heart. Thank you, xsx

Comment from hellion5

Exceptional

I really enjoyed reading this! It almost made me wish I had kids to read it to. Almost...

The only thing I saw that bothered me is really nitpicky, but I have to mention it:

Then for breakfast we'll make her a real special treat,
That tasty strong cheese that she loves to eat.'

The word "make" here brings to my mind a picture of mice standing around in aprons making cheese from scratch.
It didn't take anything away from the story, so to speak, but it did remind me I was reading one.

Wonderful job! Can't wait to read more of your work--

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

Thank you, hellion, now that you have pointed that out, I think its wrong too. I am going to change it to, 'For breakfast we'll GIVE her a real special treat... What do you think? Thank you still for the lovely review, and for all those love stars, also thank you again for the help, this is what this place is all about. xsx

reply by hellion5 on 31-Jan-2012

That's the word I thought of first, so it must be all right with me! Thanks again for the nomination--

Sue

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

You are welcome, and I have changed it! xsx

Comment from peggles

Excellent

I thought this was a lovely sweet verse
Mummy mouse having a surprise birthday
and getting her rocking chair
what a great idea
well written and expressed
a fun read for the children
which I enjoyed very much

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012

Thank you, Peggles, that is so nice of you, thank you! xsx