Comment from ScarletClearwater

Excellent

This is so adorable. Perfect for a children's book. It read like a professional passage. Great job with the flow and the imagery and wonderful little tale.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012

Thank you, Scarlet, that is so nice of you! xsx

Comment from oozer

Excellent

I simply can't understand why you do not use the word 'stair' in first line. In my dictionary 'stair' is a series of steps!

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012

Hi,oozer, thanks for that, I will go in and change it. Do you know, I never thought of it like that, you are quite right of course, nobody has ever picked it up before!! Guess I'm not the only idiot!! Thanks for letting me know, lol xsx

Comment from Betty517

Excellent

This is a sweet and very cute poem. It is written so that the reader has fun reading it! I think I'll read this to my Grandchildren I think they would enjoy this just as I have.

Betty

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012

Thank you Betty, that is such a lovely thing to say. Thank you. xsx

Comment from Veronica Grace

Excellent

This is the cutest poem and chapter I've read all day. I like the fast pace, rythm, rhyme, and your well chosen words to tell the tale of friends and the first day of schoo. Sure to be enjoyed by many children. So impressed.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012

Thank you so much for such a lovely review, Veronica! You have really made my day!! xsx Sandra.

Comment from rchitwood

Excellent

Very creative and I can imagine this being read at night to children. Your poem has cute little characters like Timmy and Tommy. Very good imagination and smooth line flow.
I would recommend this to others. Blessings Rita

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012

Thank you so much Rita, for such an incredible review, I really appreciate it. Sandra.xsx

Comment from WilliamDeen

Excellent

Your children's poem, Off We Go To School, is about the first day of school. It tells a wonderful story! The children would LOVE this story! It has an exceptional rhyming scheme and the cadence is light and happy!

Corrections:

mummy Mouse /// Mummy Mouse

bus has arrived/// bus had arrived

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012

Thank you William, for reviewing my poem and for finding my two mistakes. I have gone in and made the corrections, I am very grateful for your help and for such a lovely review. xxx Sandra.

Comment from percival86jack

Excellent

Then, Tommy and Timmy raced into the house
Waving their pictures to give Mummy Mouse

This is so delightful... thoroughly enjoyed it, my dear friend! Thanks for sharing... hugs, Jack xxxxxxxx

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012

Oh thank you! I am so glad you enjoyed it. xxx Sandra.

Comment from Rahul@ISM_India

Excellent

This is really a great poem!
The message is very thoughtful.
The flow and appeal seem so perfect.
Pleasure to read and review!
Happy New Year

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012

Thank you, Rahul, for your lovely review! Happy New Year to you also. xsx

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Dear sandramitchell,
Excellent children's' poetry. The use of the strong, simple rhyme in couplets and the great metre just begs to be read out loud slowly to the little ones. Your story line is simple, engaging and applicable to children's' interests. Well done.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012

Thank you Reg, I appreciate the thought you put into my poem, that is so kind of you. xsx

Comment from Tammara

Excellent

This is a great poem, I really enjoyed reading it! It is very creative and original too. Great poem! It was my pleasure to read and to review your work! :)


Tammara

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012

I really appreciate your review, thank you so much! xsx