The dragon Mareng
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Comment from TammyGail
I loved this chapter .. It was well written
You kept my att throughout the read
Great imagery as well
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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I loved this chapter .. It was well written
You kept my att throughout the read
Great imagery as well
Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine.
Comment from elgone
Look at the spacing between paragraphs. I don;t know what word pressor program you are using but you may have to place an extra space between paragraphs in your original to benefit from the separation of your paragraphs here.
The story continues to be well presented for the intended audience. I didn't see any spelling errors but, then I'm not very good at seeing them in my own work.
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Look at the spacing between paragraphs. I don;t know what word pressor program you are using but you may have to place an extra space between paragraphs in your original to benefit from the separation of your paragraphs here.
The story continues to be well presented for the intended audience. I didn't see any spelling errors but, then I'm not very good at seeing them in my own work.
E
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine. Will look into it, looked OK when I looked.
Comment from rheabug
This is another good chapter in your ongoing Children's book.
It was a pleasure to read and hope you have great success with this presentation. Blessings, Linda
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This is another good chapter in your ongoing Children's book.
It was a pleasure to read and hope you have great success with this presentation. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine.
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
as always, delighfully enchanting,
Dutchess Ine.
i think it a shame that pupils
can't keep with the same teacher
throughout. i'm sure the results
would be beneficial to all.
thank you. warmly, xx, eph.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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as always, delighfully enchanting,
Dutchess Ine.
i think it a shame that pupils
can't keep with the same teacher
throughout. i'm sure the results
would be beneficial to all.
thank you. warmly, xx, eph.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine.
Comment from misscookie
This one made me smile going to a catholic school there was no nonsence
there was none when we got home because mama was from the old school . we had no choice but to get good grades.
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This one made me smile going to a catholic school there was no nonsence
there was none when we got home because mama was from the old school . we had no choice but to get good grades.
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine. Yes Catholics are good for that.
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Your very welcome, Yes in deed they are. I hope thety have not changed.
Comment from judy corcoran
lovely story ine
- i am sure children would love this - i did
lol teeagers kissing !! yuk !!
a couple of snags i noticed...
- The parents and I think the children would benefit, if I moved on with the class up to the last grade."
(no comma needed there after benefir)
- I have not discussed it with them of course. But their parents indicated the same recently.
(I have not discussed it with them of course, but their parents indicated the same recently.)
- I feel if this is your wish and that of the parents, I have to say yes."
(I feel, if this is your wish and that of the parents, I have to say yes)
- When the children heard she would stay with them, they were so pleased as the all liked her very much
(When the children heard she would stay with them they were so pleased, as the all liked her very much)
good luck with the book...
love judy
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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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lovely story ine
- i am sure children would love this - i did
lol teeagers kissing !! yuk !!
a couple of snags i noticed...
- The parents and I think the children would benefit, if I moved on with the class up to the last grade."
(no comma needed there after benefir)
- I have not discussed it with them of course. But their parents indicated the same recently.
(I have not discussed it with them of course, but their parents indicated the same recently.)
- I feel if this is your wish and that of the parents, I have to say yes."
(I feel, if this is your wish and that of the parents, I have to say yes)
- When the children heard she would stay with them, they were so pleased as the all liked her very much
(When the children heard she would stay with them they were so pleased, as the all liked her very much)
good luck with the book...
love judy
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2011
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Thank so much for you review. And have a nice Sunday, Ine. Thanks for your help with punctuation, think I have to send Robert to English classes-LOL.
