Bruce-San Is In Love
how to write a tanka28 total reviews
Comment from Amicus
Clever merchandising, Alvin...full of accessible info regarding haiku, tanka, your preference for naked oysters and your upcoming courses and with two wonderfully amusing characters to boot. Well done!
Love the slow burn peevishness of the narrator in this one especially.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Clever merchandising, Alvin...full of accessible info regarding haiku, tanka, your preference for naked oysters and your upcoming courses and with two wonderfully amusing characters to boot. Well done!
Love the slow burn peevishness of the narrator in this one especially.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks. I really appreciate the excellent rating.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Alvin,
you made me smile of how you told us how Fanstory is a very good site to get opinions on one's writing
and with you great humor showed us of how, to compose a haiku and the tanka
Take care.
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Hello Alvin,
you made me smile of how you told us how Fanstory is a very good site to get opinions on one's writing
and with you great humor showed us of how, to compose a haiku and the tanka
Take care.
Gert
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am most appreciative.
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Hi Alvin take care
Comment from amada
Oh yes, I do remember this fun and very instructive lesson. I loved the characters then, and even more today. Besides, is a great reminder to our lesson. I'm bookcasing it for safekeeping and more readings at my ease.
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Oh yes, I do remember this fun and very instructive lesson. I loved the characters then, and even more today. Besides, is a great reminder to our lesson. I'm bookcasing it for safekeeping and more readings at my ease.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks. I wrote it for the current tanka class. You'll be in that class in September.
Comment from lola29
Alvin, this is genius. You've shown us the differences in poetry styles, as well as given us great examples. This is, in my opinion, a great learning tool.
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Alvin, this is genius. You've shown us the differences in poetry styles, as well as given us great examples. This is, in my opinion, a great learning tool.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for an excellent review.
Comment from Vladilynn
Lol.... I didn't know that oysters, sea urchin and the quail egg are aphrodisiacs. :P
Those are one of my favorites including kanimiso. Very well written Alvin, it's my pleasure reading again your dramatic story, specially it's about Japan. You are well educated with our customs. And you're a gaijin too. Lmao:D
I did enjoyed it and thank you for sharing.
Love much
Lynn:0)
I'm out of sixer....sorry and this one is deserving.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Lol.... I didn't know that oysters, sea urchin and the quail egg are aphrodisiacs. :P
Those are one of my favorites including kanimiso. Very well written Alvin, it's my pleasure reading again your dramatic story, specially it's about Japan. You are well educated with our customs. And you're a gaijin too. Lmao:D
I did enjoyed it and thank you for sharing.
Love much
Lynn:0)
I'm out of sixer....sorry and this one is deserving.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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I think only oysters and sea urchins are rumored to be aphrodisiacs. kanimiso is crab soup, right? Thanks for a great review; I graciously accept your virtual six.
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Hi Alvin Kanimiso is a sushi with crab n brain or the greyish inside a crab(one of my favorite) Lol Maybe gross for others but not for me. Misoshiru is the miso soup with different sea weeds or vegetables or maybe clams. Ohh..I didn't know the rumors about the oysters and sea urchins. Lol
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Ah, yes. Miso is just soybean paste, not necessarily soup. What confused is the name for white soybean paste soup--misoshiro. Thanks for setting me, ahem, straight.
Comment from MyYiaYia
Wow, Alv! (couldn't resist! lol) This had everything, great comedic plot line, taught an in-depth lesson, wonderful use of self-promotional plugs (with the detail to back it up showing your expertise), and some, err, lovely poetry. I got such a kick out of this. I think my favorite line was the 'light in the slippers', Never heard that one before. It was a wonderfully light-hearted read. Deb :0)
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Wow, Alv! (couldn't resist! lol) This had everything, great comedic plot line, taught an in-depth lesson, wonderful use of self-promotional plugs (with the detail to back it up showing your expertise), and some, err, lovely poetry. I got such a kick out of this. I think my favorite line was the 'light in the slippers', Never heard that one before. It was a wonderfully light-hearted read. Deb :0)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for a great review. I liked that line when I thought of it, as well.
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I am sure it will be the new 'shot heard round the world', shall we say. Deb :0)
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really great.
I liked reading these very clever creative words.I liked how
the words were written, and very entertaining words to read.
Annie
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The art work is really great.
I liked reading these very clever creative words.I liked how
the words were written, and very entertaining words to read.
Annie
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the exceptional review; I am truly grateful.
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
hi alvin,
this is hilarious and talk about shrewd self-promotion! you've done it here with class and in spades. i did find one typo:
"That's little ordinary, Bruce. Shall we just leave it at Champagne?"
"That's a little ordinary, Bruce...
You're one of my all time favorites here, 'Alv' and this was beyond funny. I love your wit and your humor in this piece. It's just what I needed tonight.
Your friend,
Penny
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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hi alvin,
this is hilarious and talk about shrewd self-promotion! you've done it here with class and in spades. i did find one typo:
"That's little ordinary, Bruce. Shall we just leave it at Champagne?"
"That's a little ordinary, Bruce...
You're one of my all time favorites here, 'Alv' and this was beyond funny. I love your wit and your humor in this piece. It's just what I needed tonight.
Your friend,
Penny
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Thanks. I am glad I made you happy--thinking about taking one of my classes? SMILE. I took your advice on the typo. Thanks again for the exceptional review.
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kOoL! you're welcome my friend. if i ever get any money i will be happy to take your classes. i remember when i asked you to read my haiku poetry and you tore me to shreds (nicely) teaching me all about them. i appreciated the time you took to honor my request and fulfill it and was not the least bit taken aback by your ratings or responses. i am here to learn from great teachers like you. God bless you! your friend- penny
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Thank your for your response; it's more than kind.
Comment from StevenJosephBruening
Brilliant presentation of introduction to constructing haikus and tankas. The story is quirky, flows well and has great characterization. I love the line dealing with, "you have to learn the rules before you can break them."
Extremely enjoyable, informative and a pleasure to read.
~ Steven
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Brilliant presentation of introduction to constructing haikus and tankas. The story is quirky, flows well and has great characterization. I love the line dealing with, "you have to learn the rules before you can break them."
Extremely enjoyable, informative and a pleasure to read.
~ Steven
Comment Written 16-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2011
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Yes, I can't stress that teaching enough. Too many people try to break the rules for Japanese poetry before they break them. Thanks for an exceptional review.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Now, THIS is wha I'm talkin' about!! Who can read this, Al, and not learn the basics of tanka writing? Your humor directed at both yourself and Bruce was absolutely wonderful, and a great way to get duh students to learn and remember. Deserving a sixer for your creativity, your delightful dialogue/thoughts, and for teaching so entertainingly. You're the bee's knees, Teach.
Indy :>)
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Now, THIS is wha I'm talkin' about!! Who can read this, Al, and not learn the basics of tanka writing? Your humor directed at both yourself and Bruce was absolutely wonderful, and a great way to get duh students to learn and remember. Deserving a sixer for your creativity, your delightful dialogue/thoughts, and for teaching so entertainingly. You're the bee's knees, Teach.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the exceptional review. I am extremely grateful. Did I have self-directed humor? You're the cat's pajamas.
