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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Lord of Witchcraft"
Talking to the dead has its consequences

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Comment from adewpearl
Excellent
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Steven knew getting passed him - past him
Excellent use of high-impact verbs in the action/fight sequence
Don't worry, honey, - add the first comma
Quiet...said the goon who kick him - kicked
Excellent use of dialogue
Brooke

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
    Thank you Brooke. But I keep struggling with the words passed and past and when I looked them both up, it said that passed meant to extend or go beyond. And past meant, from behind or something that was over, done with. Can you help me here? So, I felt the one I wanted was "passed" which meant to get beyond the guard and into the room. Brooke "HELP!"
reply by adewpearl on 23-Jun-2011
    passed is the past tense of pass - so you use it as a verb
    He passed by the window.
    He passed her the potatoes.
    He passed on ten years ago.
    He passed the tests back to the students.
    Examples of past:
    The dementia patient lives in the past.
    He remembers his past lives, or so he claims
    She regretted the mistakes in her past.
    She wonders what exists past the horizon.
reply by adewpearl on 23-Jun-2011
    I teach things like this in my SPAG class :-)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2011
    Thank you Brooke for clearing that up. Ok, I'll change it to past.
Comment from forestport12
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I'm not a big fan of this particular genre. But this particular chapter had power, imagery, pace, edgy conflict. The writing rocked me. One thing: her month, should be 'mouth.' Sizzling writ. Stan

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
    Oh wow. Thank you so much for reading, reviewing, and catching mistakes. And thank you so much for the six star. I will make the correction immediately.
Comment from rchitwood
Excellent
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I love this it has good imagination and it is believable.
I want to see what happens to Steven and Esther. This Lord Azi Dahaka Sounds awful. I love the photo it compliments your story.Blessings Rita

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
    Thank you Rita. I really do appreciate your reading and reviewing. Yeah. He really worshipped in certain places in the world. Kind of scarry, Umm.
Comment from c_lucas
Excellent
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Willing human sacrafices are hard to come by. This is very well written with excellent mystery and suspense. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
    Thank you lucas. I really appreciate your review.
reply by c_lucas on 22-Jun-2011
    You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from chita
Excellent
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You have a good flow with your words in this chapter which is very interesting-this is some awful stuff that you have written seems like a scene out of africa but evil is every where--I really enjoyed this write and will follow up on the chapters I need to catch up on--great job.

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 Comment Written 22-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
    Thank you for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Apostate
Good
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It's good supernatural/urban/fantasy adventure.

Pity the villains aren't the good guys. Reading a book where Hernan Cortez is portrayed with only his bad side showing. He had many stirling virtues and he made history . . . ahhh well, I digress. Terrible habit.

I could see this on display at Border's or Barnes and Noble.

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 Comment Written 22-Jun-2011


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2011
    Thank you for your review.
reply by Apostate on 22-Jun-2011
    Forgive my meandering style - I have a bee in my bonnet about good villains. Hey, Darth Vader had a heart, you know?