My Book of Favored Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Eternity Beckoned"My collection of various sonnets.
30 total reviews
Comment from Amyna
This is a beautiful poem, with so much love and emotion in it. Makes one want to cry... I definitely had a lump in my throat by the time I finished reading.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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This is a beautiful poem, with so much love and emotion in it. Makes one want to cry... I definitely had a lump in my throat by the time I finished reading.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much, it makes a writer feel good when they have touched the reader so.
Comment from TheBritsWife
Hi Dawn, Bravo! This sonnet is gorgeous and perfect in every way. I can feel Michael's style blended with your own, and it's a perfect fit. If I had to pick a favorite line it would be this: "O Michael, let thy whispers ride the wind," That is so Jarls! You've captured grief, but hope as well in your beautifully crafted poem. I know he would have loved this. (And he loved you too) - Karen
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Hi Dawn, Bravo! This sonnet is gorgeous and perfect in every way. I can feel Michael's style blended with your own, and it's a perfect fit. If I had to pick a favorite line it would be this: "O Michael, let thy whispers ride the wind," That is so Jarls! You've captured grief, but hope as well in your beautifully crafted poem. I know he would have loved this. (And he loved you too) - Karen
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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I know he did and still does. That kind of friendship love last for eternity. I miss him though but it does get easier with each passing day. I really appreciate your review and those pretty stars, you're a gem.
Comment from Renee' J Thomas
I find this to be beautifully written. You did a good job on this sonnet, following the guidelines well, the artwork also enhanced it nicely
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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I find this to be beautifully written. You did a good job on this sonnet, following the guidelines well, the artwork also enhanced it nicely
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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thank you so much for the time to read and review.
Comment from rama devi
This is absolutely beautiful, dearest sister---and I am sure Michael adores it. the meter is flawless and you use enjambement to excellent effect, especially incorporating it on the turn in ninth line.
The tone and theme is lovely, touching and elevating.
definitely capture's Michael's style with a hint of your own well blended.
Love this-
embraced by peace once searched for but not found,
yet overflows in paradise above.
I would recommend a comma here:
Until then(,) bathe me, let thy words surround
the presentation is stunning with Angelheart's beautiful artwork and a fine color choice to accent it well.
Bravo and good luck. A strong contender for sure.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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This is absolutely beautiful, dearest sister---and I am sure Michael adores it. the meter is flawless and you use enjambement to excellent effect, especially incorporating it on the turn in ninth line.
The tone and theme is lovely, touching and elevating.
definitely capture's Michael's style with a hint of your own well blended.
Love this-
embraced by peace once searched for but not found,
yet overflows in paradise above.
I would recommend a comma here:
Until then(,) bathe me, let thy words surround
the presentation is stunning with Angelheart's beautiful artwork and a fine color choice to accent it well.
Bravo and good luck. A strong contender for sure.
Love, rd
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thank you, dearest, I added that comma as you suggested. Angelheart has the most stunning artwork, I love visiting her profile, one can almost always find a perfect fit there for anything emotional. Not sure about the contender part as I've read a couple that are very strong. I wasn't even sure I could find any words at all but I didn't want to let him down. Thanks so much for your kindness sister. Love ya, JL
Comment from laren
This is a great poem honoring Michael, I'm very sorry for your lost but I'm sure he is now smiling at you and sending his blessings. It's very well written!
Congratulations!
Laren
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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This is a great poem honoring Michael, I'm very sorry for your lost but I'm sure he is now smiling at you and sending his blessings. It's very well written!
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thank you laren, truly appreciate your time and sweet thoughts.
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Thank you for sharing, I wish you the best,
Laren
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Truly sorry for your loss, hon. Your sonnet is absolutely brilliant and if he loved the old world tone, you have def captured it here! Beautiful lines in perfect meter with such a heartfelt message...good to read you again! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Truly sorry for your loss, hon. Your sonnet is absolutely brilliant and if he loved the old world tone, you have def captured it here! Beautiful lines in perfect meter with such a heartfelt message...good to read you again! Hugs and smiles, Susanne
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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You're such a gem, Susanne, always rewarding me with those shining stars. If I've not told you, I appreciate you, very much. Love and hugs, JL
Comment from zwrite1
I wish I had known Michael. He sounds like a beautiful soul. Your sonnet gives a grerat tribute. do you write many sonnets? I think this contest will be a tight one. Good luck. zwrite1
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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I wish I had known Michael. He sounds like a beautiful soul. Your sonnet gives a grerat tribute. do you write many sonnets? I think this contest will be a tight one. Good luck. zwrite1
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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I use to write quite a few, haven't been doing much writing the last couple of years though. He was a beautiful soul. I miss him but I know he's in a better place. thanks for the great review.
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
As a lover of old world english myself, I find that your words captured the craft. You show great passion for this man, here. I'm sure he smiles down at you, knowing he is Loved. Well done. Your site name is interesting "Dawn of Tomorrow".
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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As a lover of old world english myself, I find that your words captured the craft. You show great passion for this man, here. I'm sure he smiles down at you, knowing he is Loved. Well done. Your site name is interesting "Dawn of Tomorrow".
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thanks so much for your great words of review. Dawn of Tomorrow...we have to have hope somewhere, do we not?
Comment from prophetess
This is an excellently written traditional sonnet with all the thees and thous in the right place. good job, I wouldn't even know where to begin. this style is very hard for me, but you seem to have made it look so easy, the flow is smooth and the verses make sense. I don't have to stop and go, "hmmm, what did she say?" scratching my head.
Prophetess
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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This is an excellently written traditional sonnet with all the thees and thous in the right place. good job, I wouldn't even know where to begin. this style is very hard for me, but you seem to have made it look so easy, the flow is smooth and the verses make sense. I don't have to stop and go, "hmmm, what did she say?" scratching my head.
Prophetess
Comment Written 26-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2010
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Thanks for the great review and smile. Really appreciate it.
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You're very welcome. Thanks for putting traditional in a way that is comprehensive for an untraditional gal. Lol.
Comment from katz meow
This is definitely exceptional reading - a true to form Sonnet, and a piece that Michael would surely appreciate and identify with. I enjoyed this beautiful poem. katz
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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This is definitely exceptional reading - a true to form Sonnet, and a piece that Michael would surely appreciate and identify with. I enjoyed this beautiful poem. katz
Comment Written 25-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2010
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Thank you so much, I'm truly touched by your generous response.
