Comment from samandlancelot

Excellent

Excellent descriptive writing. I haven't followed your story, but I'm thinking Nathan and Norman is the same man with a dual personality. I wish I could offer more. No suggestions.

Patricia

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010

Hey Patricia!

So good to see you. It's been ages. I'm glad you like the chapter and hope to see you again soon.

Gayle

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

The food menu is a calorie buster. You eat the food and your waist will bust out. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010

Hey Dave,

Those events always guarantee at least a five-pound gain. Thanks for the fine comments!

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by c_lucas on 23-Feb-2010

You're welcome, Gayle. Sorry My younger brother is David. I realize Dave M. and I look like twins, but I can't use his name.(LOL)Charlie

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

ruhroh i think they shoulda started with dessert first - they may not get there lol :-P

great chapter - only 3 left?!?? wahh! ;-)

[tuxedoed] <-- you sure about this spelling the 'doed' just loooks really weird :-P

didn't notice any spaggies or typos (great job reginald!)

thanx for sharing!
shelley :)


p.s. ya know what? the cover of the book should have a picture of nathan surrounded by about four or five "ghostly faces" -- eh just a thought ;)

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010

Great idea about the cover. I kinda was thinking about the 'elevator'. Also, I think this one would be good with several scenes, like Secret Lives. That 'tuxedoed' looks silly but that's the way it's spelled!

Thanks so much for the great comments, my friend. Have a great day!

Hugs,
Gayle

reply by shelley kaye on 23-Feb-2010

ooh an elevator would be cool too - one like one of those old frieght elevators (like cali adv's 'twilight zone's tower of terror' - instead of numbers you could put 'scenes' from the book with nathan's pic on the doors! :)

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

Oh no. Here we go again. Poor Nathan, just when he thought he had everything under control. I can't wait to see what happens next. Great job.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010

LOL! Yes, I think it's going to be a fight to the death this time. Hang in there and thanks for the great review and comments.

Gayle

Comment from Heidixoxo

Excellent

Although I still hve not got caught up on reading this, I truly enjoyed this poece. Ot was quite interesting and held my attention from start to finish. KUDOS to you and good luck as well...........xoxo

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 Comment Written 22-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010

Hi Heidi,

Thanks for the great comments and review. I appreciate you stopping by!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Korton

Exceptional

I knew it, Norman has arrived. The only question is; what kind of mele will now ensue. Although Cathy is well protected, Norman is obsessed and anything could happen. Very well done.

 Comment Written 22-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2010

Oh, Frank! A sixer! Thanks so much. I really enjoyed this chapter, and am doing my best to make the closing as scary as possible! Thank you so much for the encouragement and wonderful comments.

Hugs,
Gayle