Comment from ZigzagMLT

Excellent

Nothing out of place here! A wonderful chapter, and the language was appropriate for the action, so don't worry.

I loved the image of the lovers on her balcony.

I did get whiplash (perhaps only mine) after Norman seemed to be next door watching, and all of a sudden putting photos in the display case in his other condo. I might have missed something.

Good. Awaiting the next one, as usual.

Thanks,
Zigzagmlt

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 Comment Written 10-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2010

No, you didn't, I did! I went back in there and clarified. What threw you off was in the opening of the chapter we're talking about the new condo. Most of the action takes place at his 'real' place. He only uses the new one for proximity to Cathy. I'll go in and make fix. GREAT EYE!

Hugs and thanks,
Gayle

reply by ZigzagMLT on 11-Jan-2010

Thanks. I call em like I see em, and I appreciate your attitude. After alll, we're here to help each other out. Z

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

You did an excellent job describing the scenes and making sure the characters stayed in character. I didn't start reading from the beginning, but I assumed Norman stole her dog. He didn't? I am confused now. I sure hope Norman doesn't hurt Cathy the end of this.

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 Comment Written 10-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2010

Hey Barbara,

Well, one question is solved, Norman didn't steal Suzi. Just a red herring there, lol. Sorry. But that story's not over yet, after all, someone stole her!

Thanks for the grand review,

Gayle