Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Nathan isn't doing too well, is he? He is dangerous, not only to Cathy, but to himself.

In the scene beginning with Cathy, it isn't until the eleventh chapter you identify whose she speaking with. I knew it was Rudy from previous posts, but you may want to consider mentioning him before you did.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

Hey Barbara,

I know, that's because I had to split up a chapter for FS. I guess I could go in there and make note, but with my luck, I'll leave it in the ms! Oh, I'm soooo blonde!

Thanks for the great review!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from Sweet Victory

Excellent

Well written. Excellent picturesque I was able to see each image that you painted. As well as feel your characters emotions starvation exhaustion confusion.

Nice Job!

Sweet Victory

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

Hi Sweet Victory,

Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your input. Thanks,

Gayle

Comment from rogerpolly

Excellent

You've probably heard this before, but you are an excellent writer. Without knowing the content of previous chapters, this held my interest from beginning to end. I liked the detail about the horses, the bridles, etc. and getting on and off. Both the beginning paragraph and the end paragraph made me want to read on.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

Hi Roger,

So nice to meet you and thanks for the grand review. I love horses and dogs and seem to find them worming their way into all my stories!

I appreciate your stopping by and hope you'll come back again soon.

Gayle

Comment from Korton

Excellent

Another excellent chapter, Gayle. You didn't say whether the dogs acompanied them on their ride or not. May be something to consider. Very well done.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

You know, Frank, I'm just going to pull that sentence. We'll just leave them sitting in the barn where we last saw them.

Good catch, thanks a bunch.

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from bruceg

Good

He staggered down the hall to the kitchen, pulled a glass from the cupboard and slammed it into the front of his fridge. The ice cold water refreshed him. His second glass eased the pain in his throat to the point where he could swallow a couple of valium. (Did the glass break?) It was good piece of writing but I cannot keep up with the story, it was a distracting I'm sorry it wasn't one of my favorites.

Bruce


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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

Hi Bruce,

No problem. This would be a hard chapter to come into, so much happened earlier.

Thanks for stopping by,
Gayle

Comment from ZigzagMLT

Excellent

Great call. No cutting! I loved it just the way you presented it. How beautiful. a great lead in, you built it up well.

I liked the sensitivity in Nathan. I sense you're reeling us in. Can't wait for the next one. I truly love this book.

Thank you, so very much.

Zigzagmlt

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010

Hi Zig,

Thanks for the fine review and input. I'm trying to make Nathan a character we can relate to, even though he's got Norman in there. Thanks so much for stopping by,

Hugs,
Gayle