Comment from rwilliam

Excellent

Like an Irish lullaby, the poignant strains tugged at the heartstrings of anyone with an ounce of Celtic blood.
I love this. So true. I have Celtic in me and I know what you mean. Great line! :-)

Great chapter! I really like how you have the antagonist behaving and thinking. Convincing! Didn't see anything to critique. Great job!

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Hi Rebecca,

Norman/Nathan ... I love such complex characters. This, I hope, will get to the real nail-biting stage here fairly soon. Hold onto your hat!

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from EllieKaye

Excellent

Oh my goodness. Norman, Norman, Norman... Scary dude.
I love the sights and sounds, the smells and tastes of ELLA'S. I want some stuffed shrooms now. :) Well written, well told. Looking forward to more.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

He is a strange dude, no doubt. We're beginning to peel back the layers of this - these guys, and I think it'll be very interesting.

The food! LOL! All my regular fans credit me with five pounds for each book of mine they read. I can't help it, I guess.

Hugs and big thanks,

Gayle

Comment from Granny Gluk

Excellent

I liked the story line. It was easy to follow and very interesting. Your use of adjectives were good and not in excessiveness. Good Work!

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Hi Granny,

Thanks for coming by again, nice to see you. I appreciate the R&R and great comments. Thanks,

Gayle

reply by Granny Gluk on 08-Jan-2010

You're quite welcome Gayle.

reply by Granny Gluk on 08-Jan-2010

Hi Gayle,
I hope you will have the time to check out latest post "The Diary of June Beaudine". It is about a woman living on the streets of The Bronx and how she ended up there.

Comment from ZigzagMLT

Good

Good, good, good. It's getting closer. This character following Cathy seems very bizarre. Can't wait to understand more.

Very visual once more. Nice work with the musician.

Some things I picked up while reading:
supposed to leave her alone

what he was waiting for.

Later that night instead of tonight ... or the effect would be ethereal ...

Thanks!
Zigzagmlt

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 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Hi Ziggy,

I'm glad you're enjoying this one but you need to clarify how I can fix those sentences you picked up:..supposed to leave her alone. I'm thick, but I don't know what you mean.

No rush, I have lots of editing to do, but if you get the chance, could you come back and tell me what to do there?

Thanks and big hugs,
Gayle

reply by ZigzagMLT on 08-Jan-2010

Gayle, here is the rest of the sentence. Sorry to have posted such a short snippet.
'You miserable son of a bitch! You were supposed to leave alone

Hope this help! Z

Comment from Korton

Excellent

So now, Norman is positioned to follow them out to the farm. I still think he probably drugged Suzi, hauled her out into the desert and dumped her. So far though, either she hasn't picked up his scent or I'm on the wrong track. Very well done.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Oh Frank, you're going to love the next one! I promise!

Thanks so much for the review and the input. You often give me great ideas with your reviews and I treasure them <~>

Hugs,
Gayle

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Another good post. I didn't find any mechanical errors. You did a wonderful job with descriptions of the setting. The characters are strong as is the plot. This post moved at a good pace.

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 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010

Hey Barbara,

Thanks so much for the great review. You input means a lot to me. Thank you.

Gayle