Just believe!
Somethings never die, if only you will ....50 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
What a delightful piece. The only concern I have is the mention of the year Puff was in the charts, 46 years ago and the sad thing is, I remember it.
Like I said, this is writing at its best, entertaining and amusing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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What a delightful piece. The only concern I have is the mention of the year Puff was in the charts, 46 years ago and the sad thing is, I remember it.
Like I said, this is writing at its best, entertaining and amusing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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Bob
I am so glad that you enjoyed the story. It was my first attempt at writing a fantasy, but my grandchildren love the cartoon. Thanks so much! Carol
Comment from tati
Even though I never heard the song Puff the Magic Dragon, it's obvious that "Just Believe" is truly a very creative and imaginative story, Carol. I love the imagery:
A fuzzy green caterpillar worked its way across the bench. When he reached the old man's pant leg, he stopped and looked up. Wow, that's going to be a climb. But climb I must!
This is truly a great entry. Wish you the best of luck in the contest. (tati, Nov. 21, 2009)
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Even though I never heard the song Puff the Magic Dragon, it's obvious that "Just Believe" is truly a very creative and imaginative story, Carol. I love the imagery:
A fuzzy green caterpillar worked its way across the bench. When he reached the old man's pant leg, he stopped and looked up. Wow, that's going to be a climb. But climb I must!
This is truly a great entry. Wish you the best of luck in the contest. (tati, Nov. 21, 2009)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2009
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Tati
Puff has gotten some bad raps about marijuana in the past, but the cartoon was meant for children. My grandchildren loved it. It is really cute. You should go on line and type in lyrics for Puff the Magic Dragon or look at you tube...it really is a cute song.Thanks so much for all your
kind comments. Smiles to you my friend, Carol
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Hi, Carol, it's Saturday evening over here. Smiles to you too.
love,
tati
Comment from maxic59
What a beautiful story one of magic and imagery. I liked how you continued the magic on through the Grandson. Well done.
a lovely picture also.
Onya mate :)
cheers max
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What a beautiful story one of magic and imagery. I liked how you continued the magic on through the Grandson. Well done.
a lovely picture also.
Onya mate :)
cheers max
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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Max
Thank you so much for the lovely review. I really appreciate the time and comments. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from flygirl254
I actually remember watching the movie, "Puff, the Magic Dragon" when I was young. My sisters told me the song is about marijuana. I don't know if that's true. I like your story very much. Not only does it bring back good memories, it is also a sweet tale on its own. I like your form with the paragraph breaks making the story move along smoothly. Your story all fits together neatly with an identifiable beginning, middle, and ending that are interesting and fun. I like your hook at the beginning, although I'm not sure if I would have written both the first and second sentences as opposed to combining them. I think that's just a matter of writer's decision, and it works quite well the way you have it. Great work and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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I actually remember watching the movie, "Puff, the Magic Dragon" when I was young. My sisters told me the song is about marijuana. I don't know if that's true. I like your story very much. Not only does it bring back good memories, it is also a sweet tale on its own. I like your form with the paragraph breaks making the story move along smoothly. Your story all fits together neatly with an identifiable beginning, middle, and ending that are interesting and fun. I like your hook at the beginning, although I'm not sure if I would have written both the first and second sentences as opposed to combining them. I think that's just a matter of writer's decision, and it works quite well the way you have it. Great work and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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flygirl
I am really happy that you enjoyed this story. It was my first attempt at writing a fantasy. I suppose people change sweet innocent things into ugly a lot of times...but I remember my grandchildren watching the cartoon and that's why I wrote the story. Thank you again. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from Mark Nolan
This was very good and an interesting read. It was quite comical in parts and flowed very well. I especially liked this line...."Wow, a worm. Where'd you get it, Grandpa?"
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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This was very good and an interesting read. It was quite comical in parts and flowed very well. I especially liked this line...."Wow, a worm. Where'd you get it, Grandpa?"
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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Mark
Thanks for putting a smile on my face this morning, Mark. I truly appreciate your comments. This was my first attempt at fantasy and I am so glad you enjoyed it.
Carol
Comment from RebelRose
I.m very familiar with Puff, The Magic Dragon. Such a cute story with a message. Some things you just never grow too old for. Well written.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2009
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I.m very familiar with Puff, The Magic Dragon. Such a cute story with a message. Some things you just never grow too old for. Well written.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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RebelRose
My grandchildren love the cartoon so that's why I based my fantasy on it. Glad you enjoyed it. Carol
Comment from wierdgrace
I love the story and the song Puff the Magic Dragon, and your story is so great, fantasy is one of my favorites, and this is a great entry as you know. wish you so much luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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I love the story and the song Puff the Magic Dragon, and your story is so great, fantasy is one of my favorites, and this is a great entry as you know. wish you so much luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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Wierdgrace
This is my first attempt at a fantasy so I am glad that you enjoyed it. Smiles, Carol
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Comment from Live2Write
Awww shucks, I just got choked up reading that. It's sad the things we lose when we grow into adulthood. This was a very touching, sweet tale that speaks to always nurturing your inner child. :)
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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Awww shucks, I just got choked up reading that. It's sad the things we lose when we grow into adulthood. This was a very touching, sweet tale that speaks to always nurturing your inner child. :)
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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Live2Write
Glad you enjoyed my first attempt at fantasy fiction. Thanks for the ki8nd review. Carol
Comment from DrCarter2001
Excellent job. I enjoyed this tremendously, both the fantastical and the realistic elements. The dialogue is clever and your initial images are precise. Well done, indeed.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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Excellent job. I enjoyed this tremendously, both the fantastical and the realistic elements. The dialogue is clever and your initial images are precise. Well done, indeed.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
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Dr,Carter
Thanks for the review and for enjoying my first attempt at flash fiction. Appreciate the comments. Carol
Comment from ladybird
I did enjoy your little tale. We used to have a programme on TV by that name, that I used to sit and watch with my children, your story brought it all back. A delightful piece of flash fiction.
(")Placing the caterpillar in Tommy's hand, he smiled.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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I did enjoy your little tale. We used to have a programme on TV by that name, that I used to sit and watch with my children, your story brought it all back. A delightful piece of flash fiction.
(")Placing the caterpillar in Tommy's hand, he smiled.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2009
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Ladybird
Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate it very much. Thanks for catching that little nit. Fixed and gone!! Smiles to you, Carol
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You're welcome.
