Precious Gems: An Anthology
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Carved in Stone"A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works
21 total reviews
Comment from joanie
A well deserved 6 stars for this poem. If I was so lucky as to have one, you'd get another. This poem is simply outstanding. The feelings you have for this child come through in love and pain. I know how hard it is to find all those rhyming words, but you were more that up to the task. Joanie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
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A well deserved 6 stars for this poem. If I was so lucky as to have one, you'd get another. This poem is simply outstanding. The feelings you have for this child come through in love and pain. I know how hard it is to find all those rhyming words, but you were more that up to the task. Joanie
Comment Written 24-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
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Well, it's the comments that matter, and your comments are more than enough anyway! Thanks so much for what you've said here - you have been very encouraging. Bless you. xoxoxo
Comment from blissful1
I liked this poem very much. I thought the flows was very good. The rhymes are very creative. The emotion was portrayed well too.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
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I liked this poem very much. I thought the flows was very good. The rhymes are very creative. The emotion was portrayed well too.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
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Thank you so much blissful1. Your words of encouragement and generous rating are so much appreciated! xoxoxo
Comment from mmichelle97219
I take care of foster children, and this poem really spoke to me. Unconditionally loving a child is not wrong, and their furture is never set in stone. Or perhaps if it is it is only shale one that can be broken and rebuilt. Even marbel can be recarved. I thought this was so excellent.
Michelle
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
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I take care of foster children, and this poem really spoke to me. Unconditionally loving a child is not wrong, and their furture is never set in stone. Or perhaps if it is it is only shale one that can be broken and rebuilt. Even marbel can be recarved. I thought this was so excellent.
Michelle
Comment Written 24-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
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Yes, I think you're right. Maybe when you're so close to a situation, you only see the negatives. I feel sure he'll be ok; it's just those times when his emotions get the better of him that I see those shutters come down, and the explosion rumbling round down there. Loving someone else's child is surely one of the greatest challenges one may undertake I think. My hat is off to you, and my warmest appreciation also for such a wonderful review and thoughtful, helpful comments. xoxoxoxo
Comment from heyjude
Alpacalady,
This pain reveals strongly the pain that a woman feels when
she loves a child that isn't hers and has to let go. This story
goes along very well with the picture.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2008
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Alpacalady,
This pain reveals strongly the pain that a woman feels when
she loves a child that isn't hers and has to let go. This story
goes along very well with the picture.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2008
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Thanks heyjude. And sometimes it does seem to be more painful when it's not your child. I think it's because there's always that insecurity that they'll go looking for natural mum/dad and forget all about you...but that's probably a bit of ego at play there! Again, thanks so much for your warm words of encouragement! xoxoxo
Comment from PUPA
Hi alpacalady,
Oh what a heartwrenching story you have told us here in such a poetic and well chosen words that really touched my heart deeply. I really feel for you. It is difficult not to be able to approach the inner part of a person that you love.
Good luck with the contest, I love this entry.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2008
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Hi alpacalady,
Oh what a heartwrenching story you have told us here in such a poetic and well chosen words that really touched my heart deeply. I really feel for you. It is difficult not to be able to approach the inner part of a person that you love.
Good luck with the contest, I love this entry.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 23-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2008
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Thanks so very much Pupa. It is frustrating as on the surface he's such a cheerful, happy go lucky person, but it's those moments when something crops up and the dark clouds move in. He's so hard to talk to and get through to. But nothing worked for, nothing gained!
I love your review and really appreciate your warm comments and your encouragement, as well as the generous rating! xoxoxo
Comment from Charles Keith
Hello
I think you have made a brilliant job of getting over your story in this poem.
I can relate to you very closely, since I love a child who is not my own, but he sees me as 'Papa'. It is very hard to go my own way with this responsibility.
Good luck in this contest
Keith
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Hello
I think you have made a brilliant job of getting over your story in this poem.
I can relate to you very closely, since I love a child who is not my own, but he sees me as 'Papa'. It is very hard to go my own way with this responsibility.
Good luck in this contest
Keith
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Thank you so much Keith. It's one of those challenges we take on sometimes, and I believe it's one we were were meant to. Bless you and all the luck with your boy. xoxoxo
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
You know, I don't know your first name and "Alpacalady" is nice but if you don't mind I'd like to address you by your first name. Did I tell you that I was born on July 16th? (1958) No wonder I like you so much.
Anyway, I digress...back to the task at hand! :)
This is an absolutely gorgeous write and you have a wonderful innate ability to write your feelings down, to express yourself that is exceptional. Your writing showcases (especially this post) your keen intellect and loving heart. This child is fortunate to have you and your love. God bless you!
Love,
Penny
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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You know, I don't know your first name and "Alpacalady" is nice but if you don't mind I'd like to address you by your first name. Did I tell you that I was born on July 16th? (1958) No wonder I like you so much.
Anyway, I digress...back to the task at hand! :)
This is an absolutely gorgeous write and you have a wonderful innate ability to write your feelings down, to express yourself that is exceptional. Your writing showcases (especially this post) your keen intellect and loving heart. This child is fortunate to have you and your love. God bless you!
Love,
Penny
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Won't say too much more, as have already replied, But thanks again Penny; and bless you a thousand times you fellow Cancerian you! xoxoxo
Comment from Auntie Pat
A caring heartfelt poem, surely if the young man in question read it he would know how much he is loved. You explain the situation and your feeling so well making me care about you and this young man who has been damaged so badly in his early years. Loving difficult children is always hard, and must be more so if the child hasn't been with you from birth.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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A caring heartfelt poem, surely if the young man in question read it he would know how much he is loved. You explain the situation and your feeling so well making me care about you and this young man who has been damaged so badly in his early years. Loving difficult children is always hard, and must be more so if the child hasn't been with you from birth.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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I'm glad you liked this Pat. And thank you for your comments and review. I do worry sometimes that he's only been with us a short time and will be out in the world on his own soon. But I guess that's what it's all about, eh? I'll just pray that he's looked after and watched over on his journey...Thank you again so very much xooxoxoxoxo
Comment from carolm5415
What I like the most about your poem is the topic because I also have an adopted son (and adopted twin daughters as well). Our boy had a difficult time before he came to us and was not easy to raise but he has fianally turned out great (at 38). I also like the aaaa rhyming scheme and the metre. In all, a very lovely poem.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2008
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What I like the most about your poem is the topic because I also have an adopted son (and adopted twin daughters as well). Our boy had a difficult time before he came to us and was not easy to raise but he has fianally turned out great (at 38). I also like the aaaa rhyming scheme and the metre. In all, a very lovely poem.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2008
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Thanks so much carolm. It is a difficult road to take, but well worth it I still believe. I appreciate your comments and generous rating. Sometimes you do feel all alone in the world with something like this...xoxoxo
Comment from jshep
Very well done. The rhyme, the flow, the rhythm were excellent. The sadness, frustration, and disappointment came through your words to the reader. NO changes, no spag. You got this one on the nose. Excellent descriptions, held the reader in its grip.
Excellent job.
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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2008
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Very well done. The rhyme, the flow, the rhythm were excellent. The sadness, frustration, and disappointment came through your words to the reader. NO changes, no spag. You got this one on the nose. Excellent descriptions, held the reader in its grip.
Excellent job.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2008
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Thanks so much jshep. I'm glad you enjoyed this one, and I thank you for taking the time to read it and for your generous rating. Mostly I appreciate your comments as always. xoxoxo