I See You
Flash fiction the power of YOU15 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Your writing stuns me every single time, I swear. You burrow down into the darkest haunts of every subject's life you choose to illuminate and leave them utterly exposed. To me, you are this diamond of a writer whose talents MUST be discovered by the general public. How that has not happened yet mystifies me. Your writing is sooo unique and dead-on and brilliant.
The following sentences stopped me in my tracks as I read. I honestly - literally - could not move on to the next words until I'd re-read them and savored them ad shook my head and said, "This woman is AMAZING." NO hyperbole:
You are a living apology,
Now, when you talk, your sentences wither before they reach anyone.
Day after day, I looked at you and saw only what was missing.
I need a thousand sixes to bestow on this one. Absolutely brilliant. xo
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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Your writing stuns me every single time, I swear. You burrow down into the darkest haunts of every subject's life you choose to illuminate and leave them utterly exposed. To me, you are this diamond of a writer whose talents MUST be discovered by the general public. How that has not happened yet mystifies me. Your writing is sooo unique and dead-on and brilliant.
The following sentences stopped me in my tracks as I read. I honestly - literally - could not move on to the next words until I'd re-read them and savored them ad shook my head and said, "This woman is AMAZING." NO hyperbole:
You are a living apology,
Now, when you talk, your sentences wither before they reach anyone.
Day after day, I looked at you and saw only what was missing.
I need a thousand sixes to bestow on this one. Absolutely brilliant. xo
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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There you go, making my day!!! Thank you, beautiful. I adore you!
Xo
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Same! xoxo
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is exceptional writing, as always, Jessica.
Unflinching, emotionally layered, and technically precise. The voice is controlled but intense, capturing that unique emotional paradox where self-loathing and self-awareness coexist.
The opening accusation-"You are failing"-hooks immediately, and the slow shift from blame to understanding is handled with grace.
What stands out most is how well the rhythm mirrors the emotional arc. The clipped, biting sentences of the early sections feel like internal punches-"You fake it. And you make me sick."-while the language softens just as the speaker begins to realise the weight of their own cruelty.
That moment-"I press my hand to yours against the cold mirror"-lands with genuine force, perfectly timed and deeply affecting.
This piece walks a narrow line between internal dialogue and dramatic monologue, and it handles both with clarity. There's no excess here, no sentimentality-just raw, earned emotion and a resolution that feels authentic: You are trying.
A stunning piece of self-confrontation.
Tim x
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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This is exceptional writing, as always, Jessica.
Unflinching, emotionally layered, and technically precise. The voice is controlled but intense, capturing that unique emotional paradox where self-loathing and self-awareness coexist.
The opening accusation-"You are failing"-hooks immediately, and the slow shift from blame to understanding is handled with grace.
What stands out most is how well the rhythm mirrors the emotional arc. The clipped, biting sentences of the early sections feel like internal punches-"You fake it. And you make me sick."-while the language softens just as the speaker begins to realise the weight of their own cruelty.
That moment-"I press my hand to yours against the cold mirror"-lands with genuine force, perfectly timed and deeply affecting.
This piece walks a narrow line between internal dialogue and dramatic monologue, and it handles both with clarity. There's no excess here, no sentimentality-just raw, earned emotion and a resolution that feels authentic: You are trying.
A stunning piece of self-confrontation.
Tim x
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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Tim, this means the world. Thank you. Xo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It sounds like there is much disappointment in this person who has probably let you down and not responded in the way you expected. We are all human and sometimes we are not as perfect as we would like to be, an emotional post Jessica, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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It sounds like there is much disappointment in this person who has probably let you down and not responded in the way you expected. We are all human and sometimes we are not as perfect as we would like to be, an emotional post Jessica, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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Thank you, Dolly xo
Comment from forestport12
I hope the best for you. I love your lyrical pros. The facial descriptions, like "The brittle smile that never reaches your eyes." I love the thought you put into this for flash subject. Sensual power of words, but knowing just the right brush strokes. Not many with such a gift. It's refreshing not having to old my nose in review, but could breathe it in. Oh and the twist at the end. The mirror the reflection when at first you made it feel as if it was someone else. It least that's how I took it without considering the title first.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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I hope the best for you. I love your lyrical pros. The facial descriptions, like "The brittle smile that never reaches your eyes." I love the thought you put into this for flash subject. Sensual power of words, but knowing just the right brush strokes. Not many with such a gift. It's refreshing not having to old my nose in review, but could breathe it in. Oh and the twist at the end. The mirror the reflection when at first you made it feel as if it was someone else. It least that's how I took it without considering the title first.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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Oh, thank you so much. That means the world! Xo
Comment from pome lover
That is amazing. At first, before I caught on to what you were doing, I thought perhaps it was a parent, disappointing you, but then, I began to see.
That is true showing instead of telling. Your conversation with yourself was gut-wrenching and sad and realistic, and I sincerely hope, pure fiction.
Katharine
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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That is amazing. At first, before I caught on to what you were doing, I thought perhaps it was a parent, disappointing you, but then, I began to see.
That is true showing instead of telling. Your conversation with yourself was gut-wrenching and sad and realistic, and I sincerely hope, pure fiction.
Katharine
Comment Written 01-Apr-2025
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2025
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Thank you so much, Katharine xoxo
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well, it does say flash fiction, so I hope it is!
