Emerald Isle
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Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for helping Carol with this big adventure, Rachelle. I liked your description of Eve and our reservations about Max continues as his "ice-cold eyes" remain even while smiling. Now we know Eve's superpower, I'm sure that will come in handy in the future!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Thank you for helping Carol with this big adventure, Rachelle. I liked your description of Eve and our reservations about Max continues as his "ice-cold eyes" remain even while smiling. Now we know Eve's superpower, I'm sure that will come in handy in the future!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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It's fun to be part of another multi-author book she's sponsored. She has great opening chapters! Don't you think YOU should join in the fun, too, Helen? You and that wonderful writer's imagination of yours could do wonders for this intriguing tale!!
xoxox
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Rachelle.
Your opening statement of "The story so far." Sent me back through time to the opening minutes of Fantasy Island with Mr. Rourke and Tattoo introducing all of the guests. You quickly accelerated the action of this story with the interaction between Eve and Max. It was interesting she remembered him right off the bat. The story got very interesting when the conversation between the two warmed up and she did her dance. I appreciate your contribution to the story. My favorite Shirley Bassey song is Goldfinger. I heard that the first time in 1964 and I have been a fan of it ever since.
Z
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Hello Rachelle.
Your opening statement of "The story so far." Sent me back through time to the opening minutes of Fantasy Island with Mr. Rourke and Tattoo introducing all of the guests. You quickly accelerated the action of this story with the interaction between Eve and Max. It was interesting she remembered him right off the bat. The story got very interesting when the conversation between the two warmed up and she did her dance. I appreciate your contribution to the story. My favorite Shirley Bassey song is Goldfinger. I heard that the first time in 1964 and I have been a fan of it ever since.
Z
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Yesss!! That was my first thought, too, when I read Carol's (Begin Again) initial chapter!!! Hahaha. Great minds are at it again, I see!!
Thanks for the reassurances here and the kind and warm review. I always appreciate how generous you are to me, Z. xoxo
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You're welcome, Rachelle. I enjoyed your entry. It is showing... not telling.
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It was certainly that: PEEP-showing! HAHAHAHA
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Ugh - I've done that a thousand times. xoxo
Comment from GWHARGIS
Of course, the woman would shed her stodgy librarian clothes and climb onto the table. What dinner party would be complete without that happening. I'm thinking that Eve might be a holder of many secrets. I'm wondering if she might have put the spotlight on herself and now is going to regret it. Great addition. Gretchen
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Of course, the woman would shed her stodgy librarian clothes and climb onto the table. What dinner party would be complete without that happening. I'm thinking that Eve might be a holder of many secrets. I'm wondering if she might have put the spotlight on herself and now is going to regret it. Great addition. Gretchen
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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It's my person favorite activity whenever I'm at a party: strip down to my unmentionables and shimmy on top of a table to lascivious jazz. I'm sure, since we're practically personality twins, Gretchen, that the same is true for you.
Thank you for the absolutely delight review. I think this story needs a GW Hargis chapter! In fact, I KNOW it does!!! Tell Chuck to hurry the hell up fixing your computer!!
xoxoxo
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Remember, I was the one hiding under the table at the Fanstory convention. But I might have videoed at this dinner.
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Ohhh, I remember! Everyone on FS remembers THAT vignette! CLASSIC stuff!! xoxox
Comment from Wendy G
That has set the cat among the pigeons - the fact that Eve doesn't forget a face means Max has definitely something to hide - he's not only changed his appearance but gone to great lengths to do so with plastic surgery. Her disappearance - an excellent lead-in for the next chapter. Very well done, a super read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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That has set the cat among the pigeons - the fact that Eve doesn't forget a face means Max has definitely something to hide - he's not only changed his appearance but gone to great lengths to do so with plastic surgery. Her disappearance - an excellent lead-in for the next chapter. Very well done, a super read.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Ohhh, the POSSIBILITIES, right? Maybe he's not the only one to whom she's referring!! And the plot thickens. Dut, dut, DUNNNNNNNNN!! Don't you think it needs the wonderful Wendy G touch, this novel? You'd give it just the pizzazz and intrigue it calls for! Come on! Join the party here, Wendy!! We need you!! xoxoxo
Comment from Bill Schott
Wow! Quite a lot to take in with this presentation by Eve. She has opened a lot of worn cans, it seems, and who know where all of this tension is going to lead them all.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Wow! Quite a lot to take in with this presentation by Eve. She has opened a lot of worn cans, it seems, and who know where all of this tension is going to lead them all.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Wellll, you could help lead it somewhere in a chapter penned by none other than your talented, creative self!! And don't tell me all you do is poetry, because I am CONVINCED anyone who can write can write ANYTHING. I never considered myself a poet - that's for damn sure! - But I've been taking th Jaosepanese Poetry Club assignments to heart every week - and voila! I've grown to enjoy the genre. So, howsabout it, Bill? Stretch your talented writing self a little here? xoxox
Comment from Begin Again
Bravo. Rachelle! I laughed so hard this morning when I saw the video with no story..... that's my version of speed writing! But now you've taken the story up a few notches and this should become very interesting. I chuckled because I brought strippers to your story and you brought one to mine. LOl Great job, Rachelle. Now I have to send Katherine a notice for her chapter.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Bravo. Rachelle! I laughed so hard this morning when I saw the video with no story..... that's my version of speed writing! But now you've taken the story up a few notches and this should become very interesting. I chuckled because I brought strippers to your story and you brought one to mine. LOl Great job, Rachelle. Now I have to send Katherine a notice for her chapter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Trust me, Carol, that was DELIBERATELY (forgive this wretched pun...) tit for tat. You livened up the FS party, so the least I could do was light a firecracker under that tense Emerald Isle dinner party!! Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for this lovely review. xoxo
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Eve certainly made them notice her and she seems to have frightened Max with her identification of him. What else could explain the fact that she was missing the next morning. There is one problem with this book by committee. This seems to be chapter four according to that thingee at the top, but if each person gives it their own title, there is no way to know what the others are entitled. If they were labeled Emerald Isle chap whatever and given a chapter title if desired, they would be a lot easier to find. I found this entirely by accident and I would have hated to miss such a character introduction.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Eve certainly made them notice her and she seems to have frightened Max with her identification of him. What else could explain the fact that she was missing the next morning. There is one problem with this book by committee. This seems to be chapter four according to that thingee at the top, but if each person gives it their own title, there is no way to know what the others are entitled. If they were labeled Emerald Isle chap whatever and given a chapter title if desired, they would be a lot easier to find. I found this entirely by accident and I would have hated to miss such a character introduction.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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I see what you're saying about how to continue on with the story...like, especially if the ensuing contributors don't post particularly high on the Welcome Page, then how would you know? I guess the solution is to keep checking in periodically on Carol (Begin Again)'s page (or anyone who's written a chapter) and see if more's been added. Very good point. Maybe I'll see if Tom can do anything to remedy that.
Thanks for the good review and the helpful suggestion. xoxox
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Rachelle!
No! I don't "have the chops" to add to this story, but I surely enjoyed this chapter!
And I really am intrigued by its ending: cliffhangers and I go way back!
Keep it coming!
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Hello, Rachelle!
No! I don't "have the chops" to add to this story, but I surely enjoyed this chapter!
And I really am intrigued by its ending: cliffhangers and I go way back!
Keep it coming!
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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You??? You Miss Talent Extraordinaire don't have the chops? Please! Peddle that somewhere else, Truelove; I know better!! We could USE your brand of writing pizzazz!!
Thank you for the nice review. (I bet a Mrs. KT-style cliffhanger would be FABULOUS!!)
xoxoxox
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This sounds like it is the start of a very bumpy ride Rachelle and I enjoyed your opening tantalising post to get everybody going here. I wish you luck with this one, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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This sounds like it is the start of a very bumpy ride Rachelle and I enjoyed your opening tantalising post to get everybody going here. I wish you luck with this one, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Ohhhh yeah! Nothing like a Vegas showgirl bringing her talents to an otherwise angst-filled dinner party!! Life is all about making memories, right??!
Thank you for the great review. xoxo
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You had me trapped when you had Eve defrock her library frock. The only thing that would have been better was to have a video of her bumping to to tune on the table top.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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You had me trapped when you had Eve defrock her library frock. The only thing that would have been better was to have a video of her bumping to to tune on the table top.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2025
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Bring it on in your OWN chapter, Horozny!!! I double-dog dare ya!! Don't hold back!! Bring on the naughty, I say!! Write Carol (Begin Again) and ask her for a chapter number assignment!!! Please!! We need your talent and fun here!!! xoxo
