A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from jmdg1954
Great chapter, Barbara.
You've shown Tyler though with her best interests in mind medically, he finally showed that he still is "a guy" and saw her shape and beauty (cleanly$.
I can't wait till they meet the father. That'll be interesting,
Can't wait...
John
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Great chapter, Barbara.
You've shown Tyler though with her best interests in mind medically, he finally showed that he still is "a guy" and saw her shape and beauty (cleanly$.
I can't wait till they meet the father. That'll be interesting,
Can't wait...
John
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Yes, Tyler is a really nice person. Thank you for the kind review. It's about four weeks until Tyler meets Rebeka's dad. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from patcelaw
Your serendipitous stories are always very interesting to listen to as they flow very well when they're read that. Your sentence structure and your paragraphing is always very well done your punctuation is also very good. Patricia.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Your serendipitous stories are always very interesting to listen to as they flow very well when they're read that. Your sentence structure and your paragraphing is always very well done your punctuation is also very good. Patricia.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mistydawn
I thought it was a great chapter, and I didn't see any mistakes, but then again I was so intrigued with the story I didn't really look. Your chapter is very interesting, well-written. Your characters seem realistic relatable. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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I thought it was a great chapter, and I didn't see any mistakes, but then again I was so intrigued with the story I didn't really look. Your chapter is very interesting, well-written. Your characters seem realistic relatable. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Unfortunately the electricity is out, which is a bit of a problem but he's looking after Rebekah, she's pregnant, but her father seems to belong to a religious, law-bound cult, which forbids all sorts of things, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo (I will()be checking,
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Unfortunately the electricity is out, which is a bit of a problem but he's looking after Rebekah, she's pregnant, but her father seems to belong to a religious, law-bound cult, which forbids all sorts of things, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo (I will()be checking,
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the corrections. I appreciate the help.
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Most welcome
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent story. You are moving the story along nicely. I am looking forward to the next chapter and to when Rebeka tells her father. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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This is another excellent story. You are moving the story along nicely. I am looking forward to the next chapter and to when Rebeka tells her father. I do not see any need for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Begin Again
I know most people of today would think that people who grew up like Rebekah were weird, but their normal people who had different parental standards. I remember I had to get my father's approval for any clothes I wore and none of it were halters or shorts. WE weren't as strict as REbekah's dad but I can understand how she is dealing with all of it and how her fther's opinion counts the most. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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I know most people of today would think that people who grew up like Rebekah were weird, but their normal people who had different parental standards. I remember I had to get my father's approval for any clothes I wore and none of it were halters or shorts. WE weren't as strict as REbekah's dad but I can understand how she is dealing with all of it and how her fther's opinion counts the most. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Yes, there are still people out there who live and dress like this. Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from Esther Brown
I liked the way you presented Rebeka's past, so matter of fact. It just was. I was raised with much the same guidelines and although my views have changed, it was a good start. A space was missing between will and be, but otherwise perfect. Esther
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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I liked the way you presented Rebeka's past, so matter of fact. It just was. I was raised with much the same guidelines and although my views have changed, it was a good start. A space was missing between will and be, but otherwise perfect. Esther
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Teri7
This is another very well written chapter. I can't wait to hear how Rebeka and Aunt Beth do while Tyler is gone! You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. Great job as always! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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This is another very well written chapter. I can't wait to hear how Rebeka and Aunt Beth do while Tyler is gone! You used great descriptive words and great dialogue. Great job as always! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
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You are so welcome!!!
Comment from lancellot
Well written and it feels like one of your novels. The formula is clearly there, and the male character is very nice, supportive and fully invested at an early stage. I'm sure your fans will be pleased.
His fears have validation now she's unwed and pregnant. She'll face condemnation. I can't imagine her guilt.
-In America 2025?
"Maybe but [it] sounded good." Tyler reached over and picked up their plates.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Well written and it feels like one of your novels. The formula is clearly there, and the male character is very nice, supportive and fully invested at an early stage. I'm sure your fans will be pleased.
His fears have validation now she's unwed and pregnant. She'll face condemnation. I can't imagine her guilt.
-In America 2025?
"Maybe but [it] sounded good." Tyler reached over and picked up their plates.
- suggest adding
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Yes, it still happens in the US, even in 2025. I guess you don't know my next-door neighbors, well they live across the street. My husband calls them the religious compound. I am also aware of a colony that live around my mom in Missouri. I'm sure there are more that I'm unaware of. I'm actually surprised that living in Chicago how sheltered you are. Thank you for pointing out the correction. I appreciate it and have made the correction.
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Like I said. Your fans will enjoy the formula. That is the goal, right?
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Yes, it is.
Comment from nomi338
This story is entertaining but also sad. I am a religious person, but someone who is overly religious miss the point badly. The point of true religion is to love God and your neighbor as you love yourself, not consider yourself the judge of anyone else's religion. We are given clear instructions not to judge anyone as none of us alive on Earth are beyond fault or redemption. Your excellent story very clearly highlight the damage done by someone committing serious sin in the name of being religious. Rebeka's father is not helping her, he is damaging her in a very harmful manner.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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This story is entertaining but also sad. I am a religious person, but someone who is overly religious miss the point badly. The point of true religion is to love God and your neighbor as you love yourself, not consider yourself the judge of anyone else's religion. We are given clear instructions not to judge anyone as none of us alive on Earth are beyond fault or redemption. Your excellent story very clearly highlight the damage done by someone committing serious sin in the name of being religious. Rebeka's father is not helping her, he is damaging her in a very harmful manner.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
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Rebeka will eventually learn about God's grace, but it will take some time. Thank you for the kind review.
