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Comment from Mrs Anna Howard
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Haha! This is so unique and refreshing. I adore your imagination and your sense of humor. Also love the use of different font colors in the presentation. Wishing you the best for the contest!
(Not done reading yet so not promising my vote, but I may come back!)

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thanks very much Anna! Playing with the colors is always the last thing I do at the end and it was particularly fun this time : )
Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi
This is a nicely done sonnet which tells of unrequited love and how passion can blind you. I like the twist at the end.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy healthy
Have a great day.
Joan

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thanks very much Joan. That's a really good summation.
reply by dragonpoet on 17-Mar-2025
    You're welcome, harambe. I am glad I got our intended meaning.
    Joan
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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That was indeed a different Sonnet. That poor banana rejected for an orange. Lol. That was very well done and I enjoyed reading it very much. A different and fabulous poem for the contest. Well done and good luck. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thank you very much Sandra, much appreciated!
Comment from ~Dovey
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Hello Poet!

You did an excellent job with the internal and external rhymes in your sonnet. I think we all reject the "too green" bananas at the grocery store. They just may get a complex!

Good luck in the contest!
Kim

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thank you very much Kim!
Comment from Stacy M.S.
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Honestly, I felt like I was reading about relations between two people...but in the description I see you are talking about fruit.
Maybe I should get my mind out of the gutter (haha).
I liked it though. I still think it sounds kind of like a lost romance.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thanks Stacy! Yes it is very much about that as well : )
Comment from Karen Cherry
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This is fun and endearing. Truisms are heard here. My back is some better. Greatly improved by nice weather.
Rain and cold and wind stirs up allergies which cause sneezing, hacking, honking, coughing and rampant sinus drainage which stirs up my back. Better now. good work here, Karen

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thank you Karen! Sorry to hear about your back and hope you fully recover!
Comment from tempeste
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I'm glad I had still one star to reward because , I love surprise ending as this one was particularly tasty.

I couldn't help making the comparison with blood oranges which I go mad for.

I have a visceral love for blood oranges and I can't wait to see them on sale.

The blood orange delights many of my senses.

sight:
I just love the warm orange hued peel in contrast with the crimson pulp inside .. it's stunning.

Smell:
as I peel I get sprayed with the fruits scented oils which make my mouth water even more.


Taste:
I peel off several segments together and oh my god the unique sweet , raspberry taste is pure bliss and the juice runs down my chin ..

And then I lick my fingers after ..

My second all time favourite is the banana.. I love the fruit , banana frappes and yoghurt.

Your poem made me all giddy.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Hahaha oranges were an afterthought in this piece (I originally had it as apple, but realized an orange contrasted better both phonetically and as a more vibrant color, shining better against the black than either the green or the yellow). And I like oranges too. My favorites lately are the ugly ones with the big bumps on the end, the Sumos. Glad you liked this piece. It was a fairly challenging one to write!
    🦍
Comment from Gloria ....
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Lol, this is hilarious and so very well written. Great metre and rhymes in your sonnet and I had no idea at first it was going to be a banana. But to be replaced by orange? That's really gotta sting. It could've been a papaya at least.

Wishing you all the best in the contest. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2025
    Thank you very much Gloria, I really appreciate it! I somehow managed to pull off a win, which I never imagined possible in such a seriously themed contest. It was a great topic.

    🦍
Comment from jessizero
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I was very amused by this poem. I hope you intended it that way; I'd hate to think I missed the point of the poem. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2025


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2025
    Thank you! Yes it was very much intended that way : )
Comment from LJbutterfly
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I enjoyed the romantic idea illuded to in this beautiful love poem. I especially liked your question, "Can love begin as lust and still be true?" Your clever unexpected twist at the end produces a chuckle and demonstrates your skill as a poet. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2025