A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, my romantic angel, thank you for the gift of reading this book. You got me under your spell, and I cannot wait to read some more. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Wow, my romantic angel, thank you for the gift of reading this book. You got me under your spell, and I cannot wait to read some more. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Karen Cherry
This has my attention. I think It is the best yet. You know how to draw us in. For some reason I thought she was pregnant. How odd! I need to recline for a while. Have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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This has my attention. I think It is the best yet. You know how to draw us in. For some reason I thought she was pregnant. How odd! I need to recline for a while. Have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. We'll learn more soon.
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Comment from judiverse
Very intriguing. You're off to a great start. It sounds like Rebeka is hiding from something, the way she's behaving at the beginning. Doesn't want anyone to know where she's going, and she's reluctant to give the doctor her name. The accident with her car is an excellent way to introduce the characters. Tyler's really something if he's undertaken the job of raising his late sister's niece. Giving up his job, too. My thinking is Rebeka is too young and I'd suggest adding a few years. It's hard to believe someone could become an established novelist at her age. I'm glad to see you added a dog. They always add interest.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Very intriguing. You're off to a great start. It sounds like Rebeka is hiding from something, the way she's behaving at the beginning. Doesn't want anyone to know where she's going, and she's reluctant to give the doctor her name. The accident with her car is an excellent way to introduce the characters. Tyler's really something if he's undertaken the job of raising his late sister's niece. Giving up his job, too. My thinking is Rebeka is too young and I'd suggest adding a few years. It's hard to believe someone could become an established novelist at her age. I'm glad to see you added a dog. They always add interest.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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I want Rebeka really young. The reasons will come out later. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Yes, one could say this was a serendipitous liason, she, involved in a car crash, he, an ER doctor, I wonder about the examination, things like this happen, and we really don't know the person who ministers to us, sounds like a story Barbara would write, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Yes, one could say this was a serendipitous liason, she, involved in a car crash, he, an ER doctor, I wonder about the examination, things like this happen, and we really don't know the person who ministers to us, sounds like a story Barbara would write, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from estory
I think this is a pretty strong opening for this next story. You started out with a bang, pardon the pun, as Rebecca gets into this accident and the dashing Dr. Tyler, a good samaritan, runs out to bring her to safety and checks her out. Like many of your women characters, Rebecca seems to be hanging back, reluctant to get involved with him; she spots that picture and assumes it's his wife. But it isn't, so the opening for the romance is there. Nice crisp dialogue, great scene setting, and plenty of suspense and action. This opening grabs you right away, as you wonder about the writer and where she is off to and why, and the accident just sets you on the edge of your seat. estory
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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I think this is a pretty strong opening for this next story. You started out with a bang, pardon the pun, as Rebecca gets into this accident and the dashing Dr. Tyler, a good samaritan, runs out to bring her to safety and checks her out. Like many of your women characters, Rebecca seems to be hanging back, reluctant to get involved with him; she spots that picture and assumes it's his wife. But it isn't, so the opening for the romance is there. Nice crisp dialogue, great scene setting, and plenty of suspense and action. This opening grabs you right away, as you wonder about the writer and where she is off to and why, and the accident just sets you on the edge of your seat. estory
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from nomi338
I am already intrigued. I can sense that this is going to be good. I like the fact that the hero is an obviously good guy. Not enough around in my opinion. It is really tough to convince those who do not know us already that we are not scoundrels, but really and truly nice guys.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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I am already intrigued. I can sense that this is going to be good. I like the fact that the hero is an obviously good guy. Not enough around in my opinion. It is really tough to convince those who do not know us already that we are not scoundrels, but really and truly nice guys.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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You're right. It's hard to find a good guy in today's world. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
A storm, an accident ,a lady (possibly pregnant) and a bachelor doctor--all elements for a thrilling romance. The heroine is so old fashioned that she is reluctant to stay alone with a man even in a stormy emergency..
I am looking forward for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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A storm, an accident ,a lady (possibly pregnant) and a bachelor doctor--all elements for a thrilling romance. The heroine is so old fashioned that she is reluctant to stay alone with a man even in a stormy emergency..
I am looking forward for the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Rebeka has rewritten the entire 'old fashion' theme.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
So far it is a really good beginning, although your note that Rebeka is very old fashioned kept me from wondering if she was a kook. You might want to be sure that is in the blurb because a modern woman in general would not be so worried about being with a man that has no female counterpart.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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So far it is a really good beginning, although your note that Rebeka is very old fashioned kept me from wondering if she was a kook. You might want to be sure that is in the blurb because a modern woman in general would not be so worried about being with a man that has no female counterpart.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review. Rebeka rewrote the entire 'old fashion' idea. More will come out later.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written. Error-free as near as I can tell.
So where did Peter get off to? Where does he live? Isn't he stuck there by the storm as well?
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Nicely written. Error-free as near as I can tell.
So where did Peter get off to? Where does he live? Isn't he stuck there by the storm as well?
Best wishes.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is exactly what I was hoping to find today on FS: a brand new novel by a writer I like. Voila!
It's started out with everything right out of the gate: excitement, a handsome, sweet single doctuh (if they're single, you have to say it that way; Jewish rule...) with strong family values, a sweet, morally-driven female-in-distress protagonist, lots of land, horrendous a crash but no way to get to a hospital. PERFECTION!!
I already know I am going to love this. Can't wait to read the next chapter!! xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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This is exactly what I was hoping to find today on FS: a brand new novel by a writer I like. Voila!
It's started out with everything right out of the gate: excitement, a handsome, sweet single doctuh (if they're single, you have to say it that way; Jewish rule...) with strong family values, a sweet, morally-driven female-in-distress protagonist, lots of land, horrendous a crash but no way to get to a hospital. PERFECTION!!
I already know I am going to love this. Can't wait to read the next chapter!! xoxo
Comment Written 02-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2025
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Thank you for the kind review and the support.
