Winter Is Deceiving
a sonnet16 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Yuo not only presented us a picture in words but added a picture commensurate to pennings heard. Good luck
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Yuo not only presented us a picture in words but added a picture commensurate to pennings heard. Good luck
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much, Tom.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
You made a good attempt at a sonnet, but you didn't quite get there. All of your stanza should have alternating rhymes and your first stanza does not.
I also don't see any iambic pentmeter.
You may want to revise this.
Cecilia
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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You made a good attempt at a sonnet, but you didn't quite get there. All of your stanza should have alternating rhymes and your first stanza does not.
I also don't see any iambic pentmeter.
You may want to revise this.
Cecilia
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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I beg to differ with your assessment of my rhyme scheme in stanza 1 and my meter. Please read the poem aloud.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Beautifully written, and these lines are a beautiful reminder of this old friend winter:"Deceptive is this wintry country scene
which is alluring, soundless and pristine" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Beautifully written, and these lines are a beautiful reminder of this old friend winter:"Deceptive is this wintry country scene
which is alluring, soundless and pristine" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much, Iza, for your wonderful praise of my sonnet.
Comment from zanya
A tableau of the winter season painted effectively with well chosen language here in this sonnet - the reader can almost feel the cold and admire the beautiful landscape
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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A tableau of the winter season painted effectively with well chosen language here in this sonnet - the reader can almost feel the cold and admire the beautiful landscape
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Thank you very much, zanya, for your wonderful praise of my sonnet and those six glittering stars.
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed your beautiful Sonnet of a winter scene. The imagery is lovely and the lines flow smoothly with excellent rhyme and meter. You placed the reader right there in that lovely scene. Thank you and good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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I enjoyed your beautiful Sonnet of a winter scene. The imagery is lovely and the lines flow smoothly with excellent rhyme and meter. You placed the reader right there in that lovely scene. Thank you and good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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So glad you enjoyed my sonnet, Nancy, and that I could put you there. Thank you for the kind words.
Comment from Mintybee
Your title has an ominous feel that is largely soothed away by the description in the first two stanzas. The volta hits hard, showing a definite downside to the snow. The way peace is capitalized makes it seem like a condemnation, which I think it is. Winter is deceiving, because the peace is a quietness and stillness due to survival mode, not harmony. I think this works.
Mintybee
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Your title has an ominous feel that is largely soothed away by the description in the first two stanzas. The volta hits hard, showing a definite downside to the snow. The way peace is capitalized makes it seem like a condemnation, which I think it is. Winter is deceiving, because the peace is a quietness and stillness due to survival mode, not harmony. I think this works.
Mintybee
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Wow! Mintybee, you captured everything in my sonnet I hoped a reader would, especially the negative connotation of PEACE. You truly made writing and sharing this poem worthwhile. Thank you!
