Old Man at the River
An old man paints a river scene34 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about art and human nature. I paint too but mostly people. Yo described it so well. Thank you.
Excellent haiku poem. Good composition and theme. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for participating in the haiku club.
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Excellent poem about art and human nature. I paint too but mostly people. Yo described it so well. Thank you.
Excellent haiku poem. Good composition and theme. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for participating in the haiku club.
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from ESOSTINE
I love the narrative poem of an artist, drawing and painting by the river side, creating memories. Thanks so much, dear Pam for sharing your work. I enjoyed reading the piece.
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I love the narrative poem of an artist, drawing and painting by the river side, creating memories. Thanks so much, dear Pam for sharing your work. I enjoyed reading the piece.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story in a poem with us. I enjoyed reading. I would have been sad if he didn't finish this painting. It was his journey to complete it.
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Thank you for sharing this story in a poem with us. I enjoyed reading. I would have been sad if he didn't finish this painting. It was his journey to complete it.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from royowen
Not quite up to your usual standard Pam, but you've worked in all sorts of sympathetic imagery into your literary canvass, I enjoyed it, probably needs an edit, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : The old man's at the river painting scenes. 2: for houses on hillsides...
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Not quite up to your usual standard Pam, but you've worked in all sorts of sympathetic imagery into your literary canvass, I enjoyed it, probably needs an edit, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : The old man's at the river painting scenes. 2: for houses on hillsides...
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Hi Roy
I have to admit I don't understand your suggestions but in any case thank you for them and for the wonderful review
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Well done
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent poem to accompany your excellent painting. I loved the nostalgic tone and the way the poem flowed like the river with new scenes floating by. A sweet tribute to his deceased mother.
Very nicely done Pam.
Blessings
Janet
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Excellent poem to accompany your excellent painting. I loved the nostalgic tone and the way the poem flowed like the river with new scenes floating by. A sweet tribute to his deceased mother.
Very nicely done Pam.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Mintybee
There is a lot to unpack in this poem. There is a man on a clock, a person almost drowning, and a deceased mom. But the whole thing is told gently, as a background to the peaceful art of painting. I suppose art can do that - provide a peaceful alcove where we can take a break from a stressful world.
Mintybee
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There is a lot to unpack in this poem. There is a man on a clock, a person almost drowning, and a deceased mom. But the whole thing is told gently, as a background to the peaceful art of painting. I suppose art can do that - provide a peaceful alcove where we can take a break from a stressful world.
Mintybee
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
This is a great poem. It's kind of sad at the same time. Painting for someone who has passed is a special type of tribute to the person who has gone.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
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Pam,
This is a great poem. It's kind of sad at the same time. Painting for someone who has passed is a special type of tribute to the person who has gone.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from TPAC
A very touching story, never having that delight of viewing a painter work in progress. I would have visited everyday to learn technic of that artistry. A great shout in my given viewpoint.
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A very touching story, never having that delight of viewing a painter work in progress. I would have visited everyday to learn technic of that artistry. A great shout in my given viewpoint.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is lovely, my friend, the rhyme and meter flawless, but I think what makes it so very special to me is the imagery it evokes, and not simply the beautiful sounds and mental pictures, but the sentiment.
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This is lovely, my friend, the rhyme and meter flawless, but I think what makes it so very special to me is the imagery it evokes, and not simply the beautiful sounds and mental pictures, but the sentiment.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Darlene BoClair
It's awesome to have river waters in the land to paint a beautiful and serene picture in memory of your Mom.
I like your patience and gratitude expressed in each written line. Life moments do create the hues of our mind.
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It's awesome to have river waters in the land to paint a beautiful and serene picture in memory of your Mom.
I like your patience and gratitude expressed in each written line. Life moments do create the hues of our mind.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
