Olde Woman Who Lived In A Shoe
Acrostic Poem18 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
It must have been a nightmare to live in an old shoe with too many children and plenty to do. I feel for the children who were whipped every night whether they deserved it or not they were hit with a belt to bring home the so-called values of the day. I wonder why this old fairy tale is banned. Is it because it is reality for the sake of it instead of fantasy land with children laughing and playing?
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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It must have been a nightmare to live in an old shoe with too many children and plenty to do. I feel for the children who were whipped every night whether they deserved it or not they were hit with a belt to bring home the so-called values of the day. I wonder why this old fairy tale is banned. Is it because it is reality for the sake of it instead of fantasy land with children laughing and playing?
Jesse
Comment Written 10-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Jesse.
Just the way it used to be, I guess - except for the shoe part which is just whims and probably what makes this nursery rhyme memorable in the first place.
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
It's always a pleasure to see your name in my Inbox, except of course when I'm competing against you. This is bloody brilliant. On the whole, I detest acrostic poems, but this is the exception that proves the rule. I wouldn't be surprised if it earned you enough to buy a new pair of shoes.
I can't remember if it was you or Gareth who reminded me of C S Lewis's space trilogy. It made fascinating reading alongside the latest Booker Prizewinner, Samantha Harvey's Orbital. Though times have changed, the essentials have not.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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It's always a pleasure to see your name in my Inbox, except of course when I'm competing against you. This is bloody brilliant. On the whole, I detest acrostic poems, but this is the exception that proves the rule. I wouldn't be surprised if it earned you enough to buy a new pair of shoes.
I can't remember if it was you or Gareth who reminded me of C S Lewis's space trilogy. It made fascinating reading alongside the latest Booker Prizewinner, Samantha Harvey's Orbital. Though times have changed, the essentials have not.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Many thanks, Tony! I know what you mean about acrostics. At their worst they are presented as what I call laundry lists. At least I try to make mine regular enough so that you might not even know it was an acrostic...
Not me with the C.S. Lewis books - I think I've read 'Out of the Silent Planet' many, many years ago but obviously didn't persevere to the other two.
New shoes? We're painting our old weatherboard cottage at the moment, so if I win anything it's more likely to go on paint!
How is your new(ish) place? happy with it?
Steve
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I like this acrostic poem. It us a clever idea. It is imaginative and written well. Picture goes well with the poem. Interesting thoughts. Great job.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I like this acrostic poem. It us a clever idea. It is imaginative and written well. Picture goes well with the poem. Interesting thoughts. Great job.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Brenda.
The muse has been absent for a bit so i was glad to come up with something for the new year!
Steve
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I loved how you took the classic nursery rhyme and turned it into a poem that shows real life struggles. The word choices are great including "toe to rundown heel" and "soulless creaking floor" - it really makes the story feel alive. Your twist on the "evil old woman" is so creative. This poem really makes me stop and think - powerful work!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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I loved how you took the classic nursery rhyme and turned it into a poem that shows real life struggles. The word choices are great including "toe to rundown heel" and "soulless creaking floor" - it really makes the story feel alive. Your twist on the "evil old woman" is so creative. This poem really makes me stop and think - powerful work!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Many thanks, Michael. The nicest compliment a poet can get is that they have made a reader 'stop and think,' so extra thanks for that comment.
Steve
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Steve
Wow how clever to write this and I found it well thought out and an interesting take on this nursery rhyme
only suggestions are your spacing is odd
you don't need a space between A and N
then a space
no space between E and D
then a space
Space between N and A
good luck with the contest
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Hi Steve
Wow how clever to write this and I found it well thought out and an interesting take on this nursery rhyme
only suggestions are your spacing is odd
you don't need a space between A and N
then a space
no space between E and D
then a space
Space between N and A
good luck with the contest
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Chris.
I was faced with a choice with the spacing, to match it with the Acrostic words or to present it as a normal piece in 4-line stanzas. I went with the stanzas at the expense of making the Acrostic a little harder to decipher!
Steve
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not a problem now I understand why
it was still a great Acrostic
Good luck.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Yeah; she'd be locked in jail today. As a teacher, I spent years as a mandated reporter. The little ole woman needed to chill out instead of having children she couldn't feed. That's bad enough, but then she beat them though. I was a single mother when my child was a baby because I eft abuse; I didn't impose it. So, yeah, what's with this little ole woman?
Your poem is interesting and well written. Best wishes, Alex
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Yeah; she'd be locked in jail today. As a teacher, I spent years as a mandated reporter. The little ole woman needed to chill out instead of having children she couldn't feed. That's bad enough, but then she beat them though. I was a single mother when my child was a baby because I eft abuse; I didn't impose it. So, yeah, what's with this little ole woman?
Your poem is interesting and well written. Best wishes, Alex
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Alex.
Maybe understandable in the context of the period, but still cruel.
You should check out the poem by Sara Hay I mention in my notes to see the potential effect of this treatment on kids. Scary!
Steve
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You're welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
There are so many children growing up in poverty all over world. I'm not sure how to help so many of them. I do pray daily that a solution will be found. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
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There are so many children growing up in poverty all over world. I'm not sure how to help so many of them. I do pray daily that a solution will be found. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Barbara.
Of course it is a big problem but at least we've moved on (mostly) from the times when this mother's behaviour was considered relatively normal.
Steve
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A new perspective on the old fairytale here Steve and your serious words about hardships hit home just now as the UK is suffering very low freezing temperatures and many elderly people and families are cold as they cannot afford the heating bills, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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A new perspective on the old fairytale here Steve and your serious words about hardships hit home just now as the UK is suffering very low freezing temperatures and many elderly people and families are cold as they cannot afford the heating bills, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Dolly.
Keep warm. We are heading into the hottest part of summer!
Steve
