Veil of Secrets
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh my goodness! What has happened to Miriam? She's a ghost so no one can kill her, but something has happened that isn't good. And the missing child, what happened there? You are already building a huge mystery, I can't wait to read on. Well done, my friend. Love you lots, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
Oh my goodness! What has happened to Miriam? She's a ghost so no one can kill her, but something has happened that isn't good. And the missing child, what happened there? You are already building a huge mystery, I can't wait to read on. Well done, my friend. Love you lots, Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Hurrah! I hoped you'd get to this today.... There will be several plot lines and things are really going to get twisted. So we have someone or someones after Doyle and Rossi, We have Miriam missing and the little boy. And what else is going to unfold as we go further. Fasten your seat belt.....
Love ya, Carol
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Carol... your talent is showing!! Wonderful job on setting the scene, adding background to help the story stay grounded, well thought out dialogue, and ending the piece with a mystery. Wonderful!
Melissa
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
Hello Carol... your talent is showing!! Wonderful job on setting the scene, adding background to help the story stay grounded, well thought out dialogue, and ending the piece with a mystery. Wonderful!
Melissa
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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I'm so glad that you re getting in on the beginning of this story. It will have many twists and turns and plots going on and then somehow it all comes together. I hope you enjoy it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well now, carol.
Spooky. Are you sure I didn't miss a few months and it's already October?
This is promising to shape up into another fine tale of the ghost detectives.
In a way it reminds me of a long-dead series, Randall and Hopkirk Deceased I think it was called. Though that attempted humour, yours is much more chilling.
Loving it girl~
Tim x
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
Well now, carol.
Spooky. Are you sure I didn't miss a few months and it's already October?
This is promising to shape up into another fine tale of the ghost detectives.
In a way it reminds me of a long-dead series, Randall and Hopkirk Deceased I think it was called. Though that attempted humour, yours is much more chilling.
Loving it girl~
Tim x
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Thanks...it won't be all about the ghosts because the story has more than one plot line that tends to tie together further down the line. But I needed to have Miriam disappear and remember (we've got other missing people and a key). Just saying!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is very well written chapter. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from your words. Great dialogue also. This is going to be another great book. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
This is very well written chapter. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from your words. Great dialogue also. This is going to be another great book. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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I'm glad you like the dialogue. That's how I like to move my stories forward is through the characters actually chatting with each other about what's happening. Thanks so much, Teri.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
We have a mystery on our hands. I'm not sure Eleanor would have left the letter lying there when she felt something about it. I also thought Rebecca had a bodyguard since those men escaped during the accidents. Things are adding up right now.
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
We have a mystery on our hands. I'm not sure Eleanor would have left the letter lying there when she felt something about it. I also thought Rebecca had a bodyguard since those men escaped during the accidents. Things are adding up right now.
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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She didn't really have a bodyguard. Just one of Garth's men had hung out at her apartment but there wasn't actually a threat against her, so she could come and go as she pleased. And my thoughts were that Eleanor was concerned in looking for Miriam on the estate and would get back to the letter later (it wasn't going anywhere and Rebecca had said it was just one of the old letters). So you don't think this works? Good thoughts to think out now before we progress. I value your suggestions.
Smiles, Carol
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Okay, I thought Danni told Matthew that Pongo was with her for safety. I guess I misread.
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I'll have to go back and read what I wrote...we all know I can thnk one thing and write another. Thanks for rattling my brain.
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It's probably me.
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Don't count on it...I am losing my mind trying to catch up. Thanks as always.
Comment from patcelaw
You're writing always amazes me how that you can come up with chapter after chapter for book after book and yet everyone is different and everyone is a pleasure to listen to. May you have the very best with all the books that you write may God bless you and give you a wonderful good year with all of your writing. Patricia
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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
You're writing always amazes me how that you can come up with chapter after chapter for book after book and yet everyone is different and everyone is a pleasure to listen to. May you have the very best with all the books that you write may God bless you and give you a wonderful good year with all of your writing. Patricia
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Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much, Patricia. I am thrilled that you continue to enjoy the stories. I especially love these characters and the mysteries they get their lives entangled in. Thanks for enjoying it with me.
Smiles, Carol