Comment from karenina

Excellent

Sadness welled up in me as I read this...

How poignant the love which will wane with her final breath as the man she adores cannot save her...

Free verse that brings a tear!

Excellent descriptive passages here, as well.

You awakened my senses!

Karenina

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

Your words are truly poetic. Thank you 😊

reply by karenina on 07-Dec-2024

Welcome!

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What a beautifully sad read, from one who is saying goodbye to someone who must stay, I guess we wonder what we might say to those we leave behind, this is wonderful, (the font could be larger) for us old folks) very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

I will change the font just for you.😁

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I loved the story you told about this woman and the man whom she loves but must leave as her life is ebbing away. Great use of invoking the senses so that we feel the sensations which show her she's still alive. And she grieves that her man who can resurrect dead saplings can't save her life. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 07-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

Thank you so much, Iyenochka.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This poem has a contrast of joy and sorrow as the man of your dreams toils in the garden to bring life to dead plants but he cannot save you. A poignant post for the contest, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 07-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024

Thank you, Dolly. It's lovely to hear from you, as always.