Grief
The depth of grief losing your child17 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 20 Syllable Poem contest. You put the emotion into words and I like how you rhymed the first 4 lines and then gave the definition on the final line. Your syllable count is accurate at exactly 20. Nicely done. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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An excellent entry for the 20 Syllable Poem contest. You put the emotion into words and I like how you rhymed the first 4 lines and then gave the definition on the final line. Your syllable count is accurate at exactly 20. Nicely done. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thank you for reviewing. When I saw the contest, I thought I would try it so quickly. I wrote it in less than a minute because the emotions I have watched my husband experience are so real and raw right now.
Comment from DonandVicki
A poem about grief, the photograph accentuates your work. The poem and picture pull at the heart, as most adults have gone through this pain in their lifetime.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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A poem about grief, the photograph accentuates your work. The poem and picture pull at the heart, as most adults have gone through this pain in their lifetime.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much, it is sad that so many people go through this. I have a few friends that have lost their adult sons or daughters and then also my brother's 15 year-old passed away of brain cancer years ago.
Keep on writing,
Lana
Comment from royowen
It is so tragic to lose someone in the permanence of death, don't worry, we will all taste the bitter taste of tears, but I've heard it said, death is part of life, I'm still reflecting on that. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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It is so tragic to lose someone in the permanence of death, don't worry, we will all taste the bitter taste of tears, but I've heard it said, death is part of life, I'm still reflecting on that. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2024
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Yes, it is something we will all experience and go through ourselves. Someday we will be on the other side of eternity. Thank you for your review!
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That's right Lana Marie
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Hi Lana,
Those five lines are very powerful.Grief can be all consuming and I think all of us have experienced it on different levels throughout our lives. It's unusual for these typed of poems to rhyme, but you nailed it.
Great job
Cecilia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Hi Lana,
Those five lines are very powerful.Grief can be all consuming and I think all of us have experienced it on different levels throughout our lives. It's unusual for these typed of poems to rhyme, but you nailed it.
Great job
Cecilia
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you Cecilia for reviewing this. I wrote it 6 weeks after my step son passed away, so it was pretty raw still.
Keep on writing,
Lana
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Lana,
You're welcome.
Again, I'm sorry for your loss.
Cecilia
Comment from Gayla putnam
A few words say volumes. I have several friends who have lost children. Healing is almost impossible, so the words missing your soul and out of control resonate with me. I am not a poet, so I feel like a fraud when I write a critique of poems. Your poem has depth. gayla
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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A few words say volumes. I have several friends who have lost children. Healing is almost impossible, so the words missing your soul and out of control resonate with me. I am not a poet, so I feel like a fraud when I write a critique of poems. Your poem has depth. gayla
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thank you, it is a tough road dealing with this kind of loss. My heart also goes out to those you know have been through this too.
Comment from Regina Elliott
An excellent poem on the
aching of grief. It is not an
easy thing to go through. My
very best wishes for the contest. Have a cozy Sunday
evening and a creative week.
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An excellent poem on the
aching of grief. It is not an
easy thing to go through. My
very best wishes for the contest. Have a cozy Sunday
evening and a creative week.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really feel the of emotion in your poem. It's raw and honest. I appreciate how you keep it short but powerful. Your feelings speak for themselves. So touching and so well written.
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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I really feel the of emotion in your poem. It's raw and honest. I appreciate how you keep it short but powerful. Your feelings speak for themselves. So touching and so well written.
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Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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I appreciate your input and review from my small 20 syllable poem based on true feelings.