Willing Hearts
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Comment from royowen
Ah Sami and Noah are becoming closer and closer, sometimes I forget how short the time is concerning the length of time the relationship between Noah and Sami has developed, Noah and his crew are succeeding with the shutting down of Chen's operation. Where to now, a great story Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Ah Sami and Noah are becoming closer and closer, sometimes I forget how short the time is concerning the length of time the relationship between Noah and Sami has developed, Noah and his crew are succeeding with the shutting down of Chen's operation. Where to now, a great story Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Still more to come. Thank you for the kind review.
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Well done
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I don't know how you keep it going, but you do. I look forward to the ending and , at the same time I don't want it to end. You have a good week. Karen
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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I don't know how you keep it going, but you do. I look forward to the ending and , at the same time I don't want it to end. You have a good week. Karen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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LOL Thank you for the kind review. I do understand.
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:-)
Comment from Jacob1395
This was another great chapter, Barbara, I can feel that things are steadily making their way towards a conclusion. The tension is really turning up a notch as well, which I really like. An excellent piece, I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This was another great chapter, Barbara, I can feel that things are steadily making their way towards a conclusion. The tension is really turning up a notch as well, which I really like. An excellent piece, I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Well written and edited. It's your story but I would really think about the way your adult characters speak and act (not speaking about sex or cursing). It almost seems like this is their first relationship. At their age that's unlikely.
notes:
"I'm with you twenty-four-seven. The only time we aren't together is when we're sleeping. My feelings for you grow stronger every day. I'm messing up more and more. I'm worried I'm putting your job at risk."
Sami stood. "I don't want to have this conversation." She knocked on the door and yelled, "Somebody open the door."
-Suggest combining these two. If the first is Sami speaking.
Jose opened the door. "Sami, is everything all right?"
-This is an overused line in the story (most stories) Everyone is constantly asking if the female protagonist is okay or worried about her. All the time. Like she is a baby.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Well written and edited. It's your story but I would really think about the way your adult characters speak and act (not speaking about sex or cursing). It almost seems like this is their first relationship. At their age that's unlikely.
notes:
"I'm with you twenty-four-seven. The only time we aren't together is when we're sleeping. My feelings for you grow stronger every day. I'm messing up more and more. I'm worried I'm putting your job at risk."
Sami stood. "I don't want to have this conversation." She knocked on the door and yelled, "Somebody open the door."
-Suggest combining these two. If the first is Sami speaking.
Jose opened the door. "Sami, is everything all right?"
-This is an overused line in the story (most stories) Everyone is constantly asking if the female protagonist is okay or worried about her. All the time. Like she is a baby.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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I moved the two closer together. I'll consider the second part, but to me Jose would ask if everything is all right or why would she want somebody to open the door. She's with Noah. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written story about a subject. That is very timely right now with the human trafficking that is going on in our country. I enjoyed reading it. I am also pleased with the fact that you had so much dialogue going on that it made it very interesting to read. God bless you. You have a wonderful week and may you find that you're writing is always very well done. Patricia.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This is a very nicely written story about a subject. That is very timely right now with the human trafficking that is going on in our country. I enjoyed reading it. I am also pleased with the fact that you had so much dialogue going on that it made it very interesting to read. God bless you. You have a wonderful week and may you find that you're writing is always very well done. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Another outstanding yet informative chapter. It seems like things are wrapping up nicely.
Sami is a bit emotional but there is no telling how one would react being kicked down for so long.
Good stuff
Douglas
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Another outstanding yet informative chapter. It seems like things are wrapping up nicely.
Sami is a bit emotional but there is no telling how one would react being kicked down for so long.
Good stuff
Douglas
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Sami's whole world was turned upside down. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
Well at last, Noah is admitting to himself, and to Sami that he has fallen in love with her. That may help Sami to relax a bit and not worry about future rejection. Another well-written chapter!
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Well at last, Noah is admitting to himself, and to Sami that he has fallen in love with her. That may help Sami to relax a bit and not worry about future rejection. Another well-written chapter!
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Fabulous chapter. I'm so happy that Noah finally said the words "I love you". I'm sure Sami was even happier. I'm sure she knew but there is nothing like hearing it. So, now that all of the sex shops have been shut down, Noah has to leave. Why do I feel like the other shoe is going to drop? Gretchen
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Fabulous chapter. I'm so happy that Noah finally said the words "I love you". I'm sure Sami was even happier. I'm sure she knew but there is nothing like hearing it. So, now that all of the sex shops have been shut down, Noah has to leave. Why do I feel like the other shoe is going to drop? Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. There is another shoe to drop but only shortly.
Comment from jim vecchio
As usual, I'll follow your characters wherever they go. I enjoy watching the way Sami and Noah evolve in their love. So different from me. My wife knew I loved her so we didn't have to talk bout where our relationship should go. Thanks for another memorable chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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As usual, I'll follow your characters wherever they go. I enjoy watching the way Sami and Noah evolve in their love. So different from me. My wife knew I loved her so we didn't have to talk bout where our relationship should go. Thanks for another memorable chapter.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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I love all the chapters.
Comment from estory
In this chapter we see how Sami and Noah are handling the relationship and its effect on Noah's job, and also how that job is affecting their relationship. She seems still to be a bit uncomfortable with her position distracting him from his job, but he seems to be leaning into it in spite of the risks to his career. Love triumphs over all again. There is some suspense building about Chen's operation and it seems he has a complicated legal scheme in place to make it difficult for them. The dialogue was crisp and realistic as always. estory
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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In this chapter we see how Sami and Noah are handling the relationship and its effect on Noah's job, and also how that job is affecting their relationship. She seems still to be a bit uncomfortable with her position distracting him from his job, but he seems to be leaning into it in spite of the risks to his career. Love triumphs over all again. There is some suspense building about Chen's operation and it seems he has a complicated legal scheme in place to make it difficult for them. The dialogue was crisp and realistic as always. estory
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the insightful review. I appreciate it.