Old Wounds
a 20 syllable poem23 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
Nicely done, Melissa. Harboring grudges and hatred does clutter our heart. I like the excavation motif that you use with the words debris and unearthing.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Nicely done, Melissa. Harboring grudges and hatred does clutter our heart. I like the excavation motif that you use with the words debris and unearthing.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hello there Debbie. Thank you. I really appreciate your words and understanding. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Jacob1395
There is some beautiful imagery in this piece. To me this is about a person finding themselves again after so many years of being lost. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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There is some beautiful imagery in this piece. To me this is about a person finding themselves again after so many years of being lost. A well written piece, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hello Jacob. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You have used your 20 syllables well with a good topic.
-Very good opening lines describe this woman
very well as she tried to forgive old wounds.
-Once she had done that, it was evident
that her heart was tender.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You have used your 20 syllables well with a good topic.
-Very good opening lines describe this woman
very well as she tried to forgive old wounds.
-Once she had done that, it was evident
that her heart was tender.
-Very well done; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Good afternoon Pam. Thank you. I really appreciate your words and understanding. Hugs!
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think forgiveness frees us of all our bad thoughts and helps us renew, I have been practicing it for years, a fine poem Melissa, love Dolly x x x x x x
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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I think forgiveness frees us of all our bad thoughts and helps us renew, I have been practicing it for years, a fine poem Melissa, love Dolly x x x x x x
Comment Written 27-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hi Dolly. Thank you. I really appreciate your words and understanding. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
We should never underestimate the power of forgiveness. It does cleanse the soul and makes room for new growth. Lovely entry for the contest. With perfect artwork.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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We should never underestimate the power of forgiveness. It does cleanse the soul and makes room for new growth. Lovely entry for the contest. With perfect artwork.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hello there, dear June. Thank you. I really appreciate your words and understanding. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
This is a great use of twenty syllables for the contest! She cleared out the old, making room for a fresh new start. How lovely! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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This is a great use of twenty syllables for the contest! She cleared out the old, making room for a fresh new start. How lovely! Best wishes in the contest. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hello Carol. Thank you so much for your lovely words and best wishes. I really appreciate your comments and perceptions.
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Hi. I enjoyed reading your brief words, and I hope they do well in the contest. Have a great weekend.
Comment from lyenochka
Beautifully crafted and I like how your words are formatted to hint at a heart shape. Yes, forgiveness is critical to heal old wounds even if the one who caused the pain doesn't ask for forgiveness. It's in the forgiving that one 'clears the debris from the soul" and "unearths a tender heart" ready to love again. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Beautifully crafted and I like how your words are formatted to hint at a heart shape. Yes, forgiveness is critical to heal old wounds even if the one who caused the pain doesn't ask for forgiveness. It's in the forgiving that one 'clears the debris from the soul" and "unearths a tender heart" ready to love again. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Hi Helen. Thank you. I really appreciate your words and understanding. Hugs, sweet friend!
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
A wise and beautiful write, Melissa. Those "old wounds" can be deeply embedded, so deeply that we can and do overlook them as we get on with our lives. Then something happens to remind us and we have a choice. Forgiving, as you state, is a process. But it's so worthwhile.
This could be a love poem. Or it could refer to anything that hurt us deeply, perhaps in childhood.
Couple of small points for your consideration
"its debris" should be "their debris" since this refers to "old wounds".
Further down, I suggest "unearthing" to avoid repetition of "and"
Hoping this does well in the contest, Melissa
Blessings, Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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A wise and beautiful write, Melissa. Those "old wounds" can be deeply embedded, so deeply that we can and do overlook them as we get on with our lives. Then something happens to remind us and we have a choice. Forgiving, as you state, is a process. But it's so worthwhile.
This could be a love poem. Or it could refer to anything that hurt us deeply, perhaps in childhood.
Couple of small points for your consideration
"its debris" should be "their debris" since this refers to "old wounds".
Further down, I suggest "unearthing" to avoid repetition of "and"
Hoping this does well in the contest, Melissa
Blessings, Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Thanks for your important suggestions, Marilyn. I used them and think they really helped to improve the verse. I so appreciate you!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
Oh yes Melissa, it's amazing what forgiveness can do, it clears the muck from your soul, and it certainly does release forgiven from the bondage we have put them in. Beautifully written Melissa, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Oh yes Melissa, it's amazing what forgiveness can do, it clears the muck from your soul, and it certainly does release forgiven from the bondage we have put them in. Beautifully written Melissa, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Thank you sweet Roy!
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Not enough syllables allowed to clarify the message
I think your entry is fine but not knowing who was the subject was too few syllables
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Not enough syllables allowed to clarify the message
I think your entry is fine but not knowing who was the subject was too few syllables
Yhtfrdtgyfedygyfrxyhtdesrftfwzeftdectfrxyk
Comment Written 26-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2024
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Thanks Tom!
Melissa