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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Cavalry in Straw Hats (Rachelle)"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Mrs. KT
And what a saga it is quickly becoming, Rachelle!
I most surely enjoyed your detour in Amish country having visited Lancaster, Bird in Hand, and Intercourse, PA on three separate occasions!
Your attire must have had an amazing effect on your rescuers!
And poor Gretchen, having to ride along rather than drive!
Love your humor!
On to the next chapter!
Fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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And what a saga it is quickly becoming, Rachelle!
I most surely enjoyed your detour in Amish country having visited Lancaster, Bird in Hand, and Intercourse, PA on three separate occasions!
Your attire must have had an amazing effect on your rescuers!
And poor Gretchen, having to ride along rather than drive!
Love your humor!
On to the next chapter!
Fondly,
diane
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I love the names of their towns! What took you there? Was it when the kids were young?
Thanks for this encouraging review! Xo
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is undoubtedly an exciting and interesting story. We often dealt with the Amish while in the dairy business. They are lovely, compassionate people but set in their ways. You're right; they would have hated an outfit like the one you described.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This is undoubtedly an exciting and interesting story. We often dealt with the Amish while in the dairy business. They are lovely, compassionate people but set in their ways. You're right; they would have hated an outfit like the one you described.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I've read a series by Linda Castillo whose protagonist is a female sheriff who had been Amish. The setting is Painted Mill, PA, in the heart of an Amish community. So I grew to respect and admire the Amish.
Thanks for this terrific review. Xo
Comment from Steve Foreman
Great to see another perspective on this Amish country rescue during what was always a potentially disastrous road trip. A great read and very enjoyable. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Great to see another perspective on this Amish country rescue during what was always a potentially disastrous road trip. A great read and very enjoyable. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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So glad to have you along for the ride!!
Comment from Barry Penfold
Ha,Ha. A nice tale of how things can go so wrong. However, the meeting of those from a " different world " somewhat makes up for the initial grief.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Ha,Ha. A nice tale of how things can go so wrong. However, the meeting of those from a " different world " somewhat makes up for the initial grief.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Very astute comment! Thanks, Barry, for this nice review. xo
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Until the last paragraph I had no idea where this was going but ending it with a dash of humor regarding your car, left in Baltimore. Which side of the bridge that collapsed were you on? I have kin in Glen Burnie.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Until the last paragraph I had no idea where this was going but ending it with a dash of humor regarding your car, left in Baltimore. Which side of the bridge that collapsed were you on? I have kin in Glen Burnie.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Haha.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"Within moments, I hear her sobbing like a child whose cat's just been run over by a dump truck." Classic Rachelle.
As I mention in my review of Gretchen's piece, it's a good thing you are dressed to slay men because even the Amish can be slayed. They just act like those naughty thoughts don't exist:-)
Do you need a space after Seth Hartman's chicken coop? I think you have two paragraphs connected.
Rachelle, this is very different from Gretchen's account, and I assume that was planned. As always, you have me laughing, especially with the remark of Gretchen's about using their phones.
The evening with the Amish should be quite entertaining.
Thanks for the fun read. I hope you're enjoying your time away this weekend.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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"Within moments, I hear her sobbing like a child whose cat's just been run over by a dump truck." Classic Rachelle.
As I mention in my review of Gretchen's piece, it's a good thing you are dressed to slay men because even the Amish can be slayed. They just act like those naughty thoughts don't exist:-)
Do you need a space after Seth Hartman's chicken coop? I think you have two paragraphs connected.
Rachelle, this is very different from Gretchen's account, and I assume that was planned. As always, you have me laughing, especially with the remark of Gretchen's about using their phones.
The evening with the Amish should be quite entertaining.
Thanks for the fun read. I hope you're enjoying your time away this weekend.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Oh, thank you for the eagle-eye catch, my Sicko!! Very much appreciated!!
The difference in stories I tried to assuage a little with the Author's Notes about how, at the scene of an accident, police ask everyone "What did you see?" as opposed to "what happened?" because they know no two accounts will be the same. Everyone's vantage points are different (That's a movie - Vantage Point - did you ever see it? Phenomenal!!!)
Thanks for your terrific review here this morning. I always appreciate anything you have to tell me. xo
Comment from Wendy G
I am very much enjoying this wonderful and creative collaboration. Love your sense of humour and the way the different personalities come to life. I believe I am more like Gretchen in personality and would be struggling to take this in my stride. Lol. Excellent descriptions of you both and the whole situation. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I am very much enjoying this wonderful and creative collaboration. Love your sense of humour and the way the different personalities come to life. I believe I am more like Gretchen in personality and would be struggling to take this in my stride. Lol. Excellent descriptions of you both and the whole situation. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I truly believe my greatest strength in this world is my adaptability. Going into seventy students' houses a week definitely helps strengthen that facet!! What I think is cool is the way Gretchen nailed that aspect of my personality. She's very astute that way...and, of course, a fabulous writer/storyteller. We are having the BEST time with this project, and I love having you along for the ride. xoxox
Comment from Michele Harber
As I said to Gretchen when I just reviewed her version of the story, it's much more fun for me to review it as though it were true, which leads me to ask if you might want to rethink your traveling outfits from now on (and, perhaps, your traveling companion). Kudos to Gretchen for allowing herself to be the butt of many of the jokes, and to you for your self-deprecating comments about the effect your clothing of choice is having on those poor, traumatized Amish kids.
As always, your choice of expressive adjectives (i.e. "irreverent," "brazen") and verbs ("lurches," "glower") is impeccable. It's always nice to see your sense of humor on display. ("I send out a hope to the universe that Gretchen doesn't vomit on her buggy-mates, being that she's not sitting in the driver's seat.") So far, I'm enjoying the story, and looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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As I said to Gretchen when I just reviewed her version of the story, it's much more fun for me to review it as though it were true, which leads me to ask if you might want to rethink your traveling outfits from now on (and, perhaps, your traveling companion). Kudos to Gretchen for allowing herself to be the butt of many of the jokes, and to you for your self-deprecating comments about the effect your clothing of choice is having on those poor, traumatized Amish kids.
As always, your choice of expressive adjectives (i.e. "irreverent," "brazen") and verbs ("lurches," "glower") is impeccable. It's always nice to see your sense of humor on display. ("I send out a hope to the universe that Gretchen doesn't vomit on her buggy-mates, being that she's not sitting in the driver's seat.") So far, I'm enjoying the story, and looking forward to more.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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THANK YOU!! Your reviews are always so great because they're well-thought-out and extensive. Thank you for all this feedback, which helps us know what "lands" with the readers. xoxo
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You're welcome. I've always maintained that positive comments are as helpful as corrective criticism, as you don't just want to correct what doesn't work but repeat what does. Your pieces are fun and easy to review because there is always so much that works!
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That means the world to me. Xo
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I was anxiously awaiting the Amish adventure and I wasn't disappointed. i am enjoying the dual perspectives. Very unique and fun. Keep the stories coming.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I was anxiously awaiting the Amish adventure and I wasn't disappointed. i am enjoying the dual perspectives. Very unique and fun. Keep the stories coming.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Will do! Thank you for your encouraging review! xo
Comment from GoWiSt
Okay (slapping my head), this is just 'fiction'--not actual events--and I should read the author notes. Got it!
"smoke out from beneath the dashboard like a hillbilly pig roast " The proud hog will absolutely find this insulting.
"or it's the flux capacitator" Uh, 'Back To The Future' anyone?
"I send out a hope to the universe" You didn't mention Jehovah God, so better not let your Amish good Samaritans know of your heathen soul.
Wow, so this all really happened?? :-))
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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Okay (slapping my head), this is just 'fiction'--not actual events--and I should read the author notes. Got it!
"smoke out from beneath the dashboard like a hillbilly pig roast " The proud hog will absolutely find this insulting.
"or it's the flux capacitator" Uh, 'Back To The Future' anyone?
"I send out a hope to the universe" You didn't mention Jehovah God, so better not let your Amish good Samaritans know of your heathen soul.
Wow, so this all really happened?? :-))
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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So, do you read exclusively to make wisecracking comments immediately afterward, or is there some literary joy for you in the endeavor?
You do make me smile, but I shouldn't tell you that, because then you'll think I like it and continue on. Next thing I know, you'll be dipping my braids into the inkwell. xo