The Dying Poet
A sonnet29 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A very poignant sonnet Jessica, about the poet's life long love of writing, until his last breath. And that is what we hope for, that our words live on way after we are gone.A great write Jess, well done.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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A very poignant sonnet Jessica, about the poet's life long love of writing, until his last breath. And that is what we hope for, that our words live on way after we are gone.A great write Jess, well done.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 11-May-2024
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Valda!
Xo
Jess
Comment from kiwisteveh
Lovely sonnet. On first reading it reminded me of something I wrote years ago. I've tracked that down and will paste it at the end of the review for your interest. It has a different tone than your piece.
Great rhyme and meter in your poem with impeccable sonnet form. A hint of Shakespeare's Sonnet 18 in the idea of the words living on after death, although he was thinking of his lover as the subject of his verse living forever.
One tiny grammar/syntax issue that caught my English Teacher eye:
Line 7 I suspect method's works better than method.
Good stuff though.
Steve
Poetry In The Blood
In place of blood, within his veins,
There courses poetry's rich gore.
Where limericks lewd and quaint quatrains,
With sonnets jostle, by the score.
In garret dark, with sharpened quill,
A cautious cut releases rhyme.
Now similes, like red gouts spill,
And metaphor compounds the crime.
Alliteration's lovely lilt
And onomatopoeia's rage
Do, like a knife sunk to the hilt,
Pour forth emotion on the page.
As darkness falls, his life-blood flows;
By candle-light he scribes his last.
A work of genius it shows,
But his faint flame is fading fast.
Now death upon our poet calls,
His soul is drained, his race is run;
One thought consoles him as he falls-
His greatest masterpiece is done.
As life's last embers fade and die,
The candle falls, fate's final joke;
Before his glazed and dying eye
The manuscript goes up in smoke.
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Lovely sonnet. On first reading it reminded me of something I wrote years ago. I've tracked that down and will paste it at the end of the review for your interest. It has a different tone than your piece.
Great rhyme and meter in your poem with impeccable sonnet form. A hint of Shakespeare's Sonnet 18 in the idea of the words living on after death, although he was thinking of his lover as the subject of his verse living forever.
One tiny grammar/syntax issue that caught my English Teacher eye:
Line 7 I suspect method's works better than method.
Good stuff though.
Steve
Poetry In The Blood
In place of blood, within his veins,
There courses poetry's rich gore.
Where limericks lewd and quaint quatrains,
With sonnets jostle, by the score.
In garret dark, with sharpened quill,
A cautious cut releases rhyme.
Now similes, like red gouts spill,
And metaphor compounds the crime.
Alliteration's lovely lilt
And onomatopoeia's rage
Do, like a knife sunk to the hilt,
Pour forth emotion on the page.
As darkness falls, his life-blood flows;
By candle-light he scribes his last.
A work of genius it shows,
But his faint flame is fading fast.
Now death upon our poet calls,
His soul is drained, his race is run;
One thought consoles him as he falls-
His greatest masterpiece is done.
As life's last embers fade and die,
The candle falls, fate's final joke;
Before his glazed and dying eye
The manuscript goes up in smoke.
Comment Written 11-May-2024
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Steve, thank you for this thorough, insightful review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this piece.
I tripped over that line quite a bit, to be honest. Your catch resolved the issue entirely. I appreciate your eye!
(Gorgeous poem, by the way. I'm honored by the comparison)
Xo
Jess
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A powerful and moving traditional sonnet format poem about a dying poet confronting his mortality leaving behind his words which he hopes will live on and inspire others to write and live on.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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A powerful and moving traditional sonnet format poem about a dying poet confronting his mortality leaving behind his words which he hopes will live on and inspire others to write and live on.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Jake
Comment from juliaSjames
Well crafted sonnet which is a great achievement. You've mastered the technical aspects without sacrificing the subject matter. I see this as a poem about the power of creativity be it poetry, prose art music etc It's the urge inside that can consume its creator. So although this is written in romantic style it is a timeless poem
Thanks for sharing your talent
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Well crafted sonnet which is a great achievement. You've mastered the technical aspects without sacrificing the subject matter. I see this as a poem about the power of creativity be it poetry, prose art music etc It's the urge inside that can consume its creator. So although this is written in romantic style it is a timeless poem
Thanks for sharing your talent
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you very much, Julia!
Xo
Comment from royowen
I think you've expressed my entire motive for writing, there are sub clauses to that motive, but they are only echoes of my soul, those echoes one wants to reverberate down halls of time, hoping that souls are revived and encouraged, why else would God give the gift, well dine, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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I think you've expressed my entire motive for writing, there are sub clauses to that motive, but they are only echoes of my soul, those echoes one wants to reverberate down halls of time, hoping that souls are revived and encouraged, why else would God give the gift, well dine, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you so much, Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from Neil Samways
exellent read, i thoroughly enjoyed the story and the rhyming of the poet. your words really put me into the story thank you for a great read.
best wishes
neil
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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exellent read, i thoroughly enjoyed the story and the rhyming of the poet. your words really put me into the story thank you for a great read.
best wishes
neil
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Neil, thank you so much! Truly appreciated. Xo
Comment from Mintybee
This is beautiful and haunting. The words are clear and strong, making the subject of the poem vivid. I loved the final line, "The dying poet leaves his words to live."
Mintybee
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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This is beautiful and haunting. The words are clear and strong, making the subject of the poem vivid. I loved the final line, "The dying poet leaves his words to live."
Mintybee
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you so much!
Xo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Words go outlive the poets. All of the stanzas are wonderful, but this one stands out above the rest:
And he'll not fear the darkness as it nears;
For he's been dying long before his death.
The ink that trails behind to mark his years,
Will spill his soul until that final breath.
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Words go outlive the poets. All of the stanzas are wonderful, but this one stands out above the rest:
And he'll not fear the darkness as it nears;
For he's been dying long before his death.
The ink that trails behind to mark his years,
Will spill his soul until that final breath.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 11-May-2024
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Barbara, thank you a so much! Xo
Comment from nancyjam
This is a beautiful, well crafted Sonnet about the stronghold poetry has over the poet. So much so that, close to his last breath, he reaches for his pen....and his words live on. The hope of every poet.
Excellent rhyme and meter and terrific imagery throughout.
I'm going to bookcase it to read again and again as a reminder when I want to give up. Nancy
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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This is a beautiful, well crafted Sonnet about the stronghold poetry has over the poet. So much so that, close to his last breath, he reaches for his pen....and his words live on. The hope of every poet.
Excellent rhyme and meter and terrific imagery throughout.
I'm going to bookcase it to read again and again as a reminder when I want to give up. Nancy
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Nancy, this means so much to me. Thank you!
Xoxo
Comment from gansach
A beautiful sonnet nicely expressing the quest of the poet, to always put the beauty he sees, the pain or joy he feels, the questions he seeks answers for onto paper and leave a legacy. Another terrific effort. Great job! I always look forward to reading your work.
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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A beautiful sonnet nicely expressing the quest of the poet, to always put the beauty he sees, the pain or joy he feels, the questions he seeks answers for onto paper and leave a legacy. Another terrific effort. Great job! I always look forward to reading your work.
Comment Written 10-May-2024
reply by the author on 13-May-2024
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Thank you, I truly appreciate it!! Xo
