Living On The Edge
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Living On The Edge - Chap 2"The blending of good and evil.
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Comment from John Ciarmello
I'm so happy I caught this in the early chapters. Your other book was so far advanced that I had no chance to get caught up. I'm excited about the characters here and the saga. I'm in!
Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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I'm so happy I caught this in the early chapters. Your other book was so far advanced that I had no chance to get caught up. I'm excited about the characters here and the saga. I'm in!
Best, JohnC
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thanks so much, John. If at all possible you might want to try and catch the first chapter.... it's a good lead in to what's happening throughout the book. I appreciate your reading, reviewing, and enjoying.
Smiles. Carol
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I'm going to do just that, Carol!
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Thank you so much, John. I really appreciate it. Have a great day!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Terry Broxson
Carol, this is a good chapter. You are moving the story along nicely. You have the pot simmering, and you are slowly turning the characters into "I wonder how they all got here?"
The only comment is that down here in Texas, we would never refer to a taco as a sandwich. That could just be a Texas thing. Excellent work. Terry.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Carol, this is a good chapter. You are moving the story along nicely. You have the pot simmering, and you are slowly turning the characters into "I wonder how they all got here?"
The only comment is that down here in Texas, we would never refer to a taco as a sandwich. That could just be a Texas thing. Excellent work. Terry.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much for continuing to follow my efforts and I hope you continue to enjoy it. I suppose I should say burrito or tortilla filled sandwich. I'm not a big fan so it didn't set off alarms. I'll check it out though.
Have a great day! Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
No love lost between these two brothers! I know we'll have more branches off this road than a hundred year old oak!
Your skill for capturing a scene, emotion and building on the backstory makes this a winner!
One edit
"...had my share of shives rammed into my side.".
(shivs)
Karenina
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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No love lost between these two brothers! I know we'll have more branches off this road than a hundred year old oak!
Your skill for capturing a scene, emotion and building on the backstory makes this a winner!
One edit
"...had my share of shives rammed into my side.".
(shivs)
Karenina
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Comment Written 04-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Fixed!!!
Thanks so much as always. It's a blessing to have people enjoying the stories but difficult to keep up with responses and writing.
Smiles, Caarol
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Hey....no worries about replying to me.
I know how appreciative you are!
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The scene opens with Alyssa's frustration and disbelief at seeing a notorious figure from her past walking free. Through her inner turmoil and heated exchange with her boss, Chief Richard Harrison, the reader is drawn into the complexities of her emotions and the moral dilemmas she faces in her line of work.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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The scene opens with Alyssa's frustration and disbelief at seeing a notorious figure from her past walking free. Through her inner turmoil and heated exchange with her boss, Chief Richard Harrison, the reader is drawn into the complexities of her emotions and the moral dilemmas she faces in her line of work.
Excellent.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Twists and turns and a few cliff hangers makes for so much fun. LOL Glad you enjoyed and thank you so much for your kindness and support. Awesome!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent writing, as usual. This story looks like it will be a thriller, and I'm sure it will. I like your style of writing. It makes the stories exciting and easy to follow and understand.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Excellent writing, as usual. This story looks like it will be a thriller, and I'm sure it will. I like your style of writing. It makes the stories exciting and easy to follow and understand.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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I'm thrilled that you enjoy my style. I like the edginess of crime stories and sending a chill or two up and down the spine.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
This is going to be one very dramatic novel, with wrongful imprisonment, vengeance, power plays in the police force (and the chief having been responsible for his brother's incarceration), and crime syndicates .... It'll be most interesting. Well written too, of course!
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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This is going to be one very dramatic novel, with wrongful imprisonment, vengeance, power plays in the police force (and the chief having been responsible for his brother's incarceration), and crime syndicates .... It'll be most interesting. Well written too, of course!
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. I am looking forward to unraveling this mystery and hoping that it is enjoyed by all.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from RJ Heritage
I think that this was a very well written chapter. It was real in a tradicional way as detective themes go.
I am looking forward to having the story expand a little the accepted genre of this type of story. I know that this could be difficult, but I really believe, it would
take it over tge top.
Well written and very descriptive work.
RJ
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I think that this was a very well written chapter. It was real in a tradicional way as detective themes go.
I am looking forward to having the story expand a little the accepted genre of this type of story. I know that this could be difficult, but I really believe, it would
take it over tge top.
Well written and very descriptive work.
RJ
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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I believe you are knew to my stories and I thank you for stopping by. I posted the first chapter to this story yesterday and it might give you a better insight to what is happening. I hope you will continue to follow.
Smiles, Carol
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Yes, I will. Greater insight into any story is always a good thing.
RJ
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You can find the first chapter listed on the home page...Thank you and I look forward to getting to know you too.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
Wow, I think you've written an ace plot here Carol. The brother of the police chief is a crook, getting out under a cloud, picked up by Frank DeVito, I wonder what the continued rekationship will be? Well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Wow, I think you've written an ace plot here Carol. The brother of the police chief is a crook, getting out under a cloud, picked up by Frank DeVito, I wonder what the continued rekationship will be? Well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you, Roy...As always, there will be twists and turns and surprises throughout the story... a story I have to finish in less than a month. A piece of cake! LOL
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You'll do it
Comment from Esther Brown
Really enjoyed reading that out loud to my husband. Already aligning my emotions with the characters.
Only two suggestions: Tsk sentence: maybe unfriendly remark from not for? And I didn't know what shives were?
Loved it. Want to be your fan and read more.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Really enjoyed reading that out loud to my husband. Already aligning my emotions with the characters.
Only two suggestions: Tsk sentence: maybe unfriendly remark from not for? And I didn't know what shives were?
Loved it. Want to be your fan and read more.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2024
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Thank you so much Esther. Nice to meet you and I am thrilled you are enjoying my writing. Did you catch Chapter 1? It was posted yesterday and gives an insight to what is yet to come.
I look forward to your comments. A shiver is a homemade knife that prisoners made and use. I'll check out the other suggestions as quick as possible.
Smiles, Carol
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Bless you. I tried to become a fan but exceeded my limit today. Day 2 of membership and I am totally hooked. My husband is wondering if I will get up and make supper or if he is on his own....
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How awesome. You just joined? Welcome aboard and I hope that you enjoy it as much as I do. Writing is my passion and having others enjoy it is the cherry on the top. I look forward to seeing you again.
Smiles, Carol
