The Attack
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is great fun and kept me very amused all the way through! I'm also impressed at how you managed to contain this very well expressed account so neatly within the 1000 word limit. The bird theme is imaginatively conveyed from the start with the reference to Poe's raven. Thereafter, those two episodes are hilarious and I think I would have been doubled up with laughter too. That said, the second attack sounded particularly painful and I hope there was no avian flu transmitted. But you've done well here. I enjoyed your writing style and humour. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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This is great fun and kept me very amused all the way through! I'm also impressed at how you managed to contain this very well expressed account so neatly within the 1000 word limit. The bird theme is imaginatively conveyed from the start with the reference to Poe's raven. Thereafter, those two episodes are hilarious and I think I would have been doubled up with laughter too. That said, the second attack sounded particularly painful and I hope there was no avian flu transmitted. But you've done well here. I enjoyed your writing style and humour. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much for a lovely review, Debbie! :)
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
That is funny, I don't care who you are! You write very well. I must tell you in all honesty, I would have been laughing too, but I would have a least offered you a kleenex or bandaid. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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That is funny, I don't care who you are! You write very well. I must tell you in all honesty, I would have been laughing too, but I would have a least offered you a kleenex or bandaid. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! I think they probably did once they calmed down. :)
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Or, offered you half my popsicle :-) Karen
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In P2 should "eucalypts" not be eucalyptus?
A comical and smart bird who achieved his goal and enjoyed your sausages.
Suppose the remainder of the barbeques went smoother than that particular incident did.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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In P2 should "eucalypts" not be eucalyptus?
A comical and smart bird who achieved his goal and enjoyed your sausages.
Suppose the remainder of the barbeques went smoother than that particular incident did.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much! Eucalypts is a correct plural. Very unusual word, I grant you. :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I know is not funny, but yeah the way you described it made me laugh. That bird is a real arial pirate. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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I know is not funny, but yeah the way you described it made me laugh. That bird is a real arial pirate. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much! :)Ha! Thank you! :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
If I had a shotgun nearby, that kookaburra would have been next to the sausages lying on the barbie. We have the onerous seagull that acts of if they were pirates of the Carribean.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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If I had a shotgun nearby, that kookaburra would have been next to the sausages lying on the barbie. We have the onerous seagull that acts of if they were pirates of the Carribean.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Ha! Thank you! :)
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't know anything about Kookaburras, unless maybe the wings at Outback Steakhouse. But I'd have to say I'd probably have been laughing too as it kept stealing your sausages. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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I don't know anything about Kookaburras, unless maybe the wings at Outback Steakhouse. But I'd have to say I'd probably have been laughing too as it kept stealing your sausages. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you! :)
Comment from Yusita
I liked how you made this humorous story even more engrossing by adding a little drama and mystery throughout. Very well done. I'm sorry about your incident but it was definitely quite humorous! hehe
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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I liked how you made this humorous story even more engrossing by adding a little drama and mystery throughout. Very well done. I'm sorry about your incident but it was definitely quite humorous! hehe
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much! :)
Comment from Sugarray77
Your writing is excellent and your talented storytelling is full of humor and fun. Thanks for the notes and explanation, they really helped. I applaud you on your clever way of relating this tale to us. Whether its true or not, it's a very good story.
Melissa
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Your writing is excellent and your talented storytelling is full of humor and fun. Thanks for the notes and explanation, they really helped. I applaud you on your clever way of relating this tale to us. Whether its true or not, it's a very good story.
Melissa
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much for your generous six stars! Yes, unfortunately, this tale is true. :)
Comment from Julie Helms
Ughh! The thought of a bird taking food out of my mouth! :-D. So glad everyone around you thought this was funny as you were being traumatized!
You have really well done descriptions in here:
"picnic table was groaning with food"
"slammed mercilessly against unyielding wood"
It draws a vivid picture of your experience.
Great story! Julie
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Ughh! The thought of a bird taking food out of my mouth! :-D. So glad everyone around you thought this was funny as you were being traumatized!
You have really well done descriptions in here:
"picnic table was groaning with food"
"slammed mercilessly against unyielding wood"
It draws a vivid picture of your experience.
Great story! Julie
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from royowen
I must admit I am having a google myself, I don't think we have to many kookaburras in South Australia, so I've never experienced them as a thief, but I have found out how emus are the most treacherous of Australia's amimals, and very treacherous, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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I must admit I am having a google myself, I don't think we have to many kookaburras in South Australia, so I've never experienced them as a thief, but I have found out how emus are the most treacherous of Australia's amimals, and very treacherous, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks, Roy! :)
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