Memories Upon a Wall
a four line poem contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Whoa. I did not know until looking at the contest guidelines that YOU had to adhere to a 1-5-5-9 syllable count!
I'd definitely mention that in your author's comments!
You set the scene, the somber recollection, the sadness here...
Excellent!
So nice to read something from you!
Hope all is well!
Merry Christmas, Gregory!
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Whoa. I did not know until looking at the contest guidelines that YOU had to adhere to a 1-5-5-9 syllable count!
I'd definitely mention that in your author's comments!
You set the scene, the somber recollection, the sadness here...
Excellent!
So nice to read something from you!
Hope all is well!
Merry Christmas, Gregory!
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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You are Great. Thank you so much. I added it in Thank notes. Thank you again Karenina :)
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Always an honor to read your work!
Comment from Jay Squires
What'd you do ... come back for a visit, Cody? I've been wondering about you. I just assumed when you went to Medium that you canceled your FS membership. I'll be picking up my activity over on Medium after the first of the year.
You captured the feeling of emptiness with your poem. The broken-framed pictures suggest a past that is no more.
I hope you are having a happy holiday season, my friend.
Jay
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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What'd you do ... come back for a visit, Cody? I've been wondering about you. I just assumed when you went to Medium that you canceled your FS membership. I'll be picking up my activity over on Medium after the first of the year.
You captured the feeling of emptiness with your poem. The broken-framed pictures suggest a past that is no more.
I hope you are having a happy holiday season, my friend.
Jay
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Hello!! Yes I've been trying to work on my essay collection. I cannot thank you enough btw ;)
Truly, it's a blessing we met. Thank you. And Thank you for reading this :)
We will speak again soon, And happy holidays to you as well!
Comment from Ricky1024
"Memories Upon a Wall"
This is a Four Line Contest entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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"Memories Upon a Wall"
This is a Four Line Contest entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with No Grammar Issues.
Good luck with your contest entry and have a Blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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I appreciate you reading two of mine. Thank you so much!
Comment from Karyn2
This is a superb 4 liner! The cracks, shattered frames and empty hallways give a sombre deserted tone to this poem. The reader is left wondering who lived here? What were their stories ? The frames of memories still hanging collecting dust after the occupants have left. Really captivating!!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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This is a superb 4 liner! The cracks, shattered frames and empty hallways give a sombre deserted tone to this poem. The reader is left wondering who lived here? What were their stories ? The frames of memories still hanging collecting dust after the occupants have left. Really captivating!!
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Wow. Thank you so much. Feel free to email me any time. You're a Great writer. I'd love to share ideas, I'm not on here as much.
Seriously thank you very very much :)
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You are welcome! Thank you so much for the compliment too. I have only just returned to writing in the last 3 months after well over a decade and I didn?t realise how much I have missed it. Confidence is still a little low but FS is fantastic to provide motivation to just keep going and seeing what works, what doesn?t and trying new things! I look forward to reading more of your work too!
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Very cool. If you ever want to run something by an extra set of eyes, feel free to email me. I don't know if you have my address. This is a GREAT place to learn and hone your skills. I'm telling you, it taught me so much. I love it. I take breaks from time to time I realize. But it was where I started for sure.
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done a wonderful job with the writing prompt. The poem tells a story in only four lines. The artwork adds even more meaning to the words you have written. Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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You have done a wonderful job with the writing prompt. The poem tells a story in only four lines. The artwork adds even more meaning to the words you have written. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-It's been a long time since I have seen you on the site, Greg.
-Hope you are doing well.
-That is not an inviting picture and has seen much better days!
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-The imagery creates a vivid word picture of this place,
especially "the shattered picture frames" that "remain hung."
-Good luck in the contest.
-Hope you share some more of your writing!
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reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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-It's been a long time since I have seen you on the site, Greg.
-Hope you are doing well.
-That is not an inviting picture and has seen much better days!
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-The imagery creates a vivid word picture of this place,
especially "the shattered picture frames" that "remain hung."
-Good luck in the contest.
-Hope you share some more of your writing!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2022
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Thank you! I'm happy to see your name!!
Thank you for reading this. A bit dark maybe. But it's thought provoking maybe.
Thank you again :)
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You are very welcome, and I appreciate your reply. I see that you also won the contest. Congratulations on that!!!!!
