First Winter Storm
It will be coming soon.27 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
another great entry for the contest. I might be inspired to try. I don't rhyme traditional poems very well. But I appreciate them when I read them. just need to try new things.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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another great entry for the contest. I might be inspired to try. I don't rhyme traditional poems very well. But I appreciate them when I read them. just need to try new things.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Jake, for your praise of my poem. Don?t hesitate to try new things like rhymed poetry. It can be challenging, but you will enjoy the results if you work at it. Rod
Comment from Aussie
I enjoyed your AB rhyming poem. I felt I could see through your words that were so descriptive, the seaside being pelted and an interesting point was; no one was worried about the storm. Today, the storms are vicious and people need to escape the fury of Mother Nature. K xx
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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I enjoyed your AB rhyming poem. I felt I could see through your words that were so descriptive, the seaside being pelted and an interesting point was; no one was worried about the storm. Today, the storms are vicious and people need to escape the fury of Mother Nature. K xx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2022
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Oh, Aussie, your wonderful response to my poem made my day. Many thanks, too, for those six bright stars. Rod
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a beautiful rhyming poem entry. The text is a great size. The speaker uses very descriptive language to describe the first winter storm in a small town/village. This stanza is stated especially beautiful to me.
Stars disappear, snow falls and spins
like pillows split, their innards spilt.
Soon roofs and streets have thick white skins.} wonderful personification
On lawns Ma Nature's homespun quilt.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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This is a beautiful rhyming poem entry. The text is a great size. The speaker uses very descriptive language to describe the first winter storm in a small town/village. This stanza is stated especially beautiful to me.
Stars disappear, snow falls and spins
like pillows split, their innards spilt.
Soon roofs and streets have thick white skins.} wonderful personification
On lawns Ma Nature's homespun quilt.
The visual fits perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for your wonderful praise of my poem. I am delighted you enjoyed your imagery so much.
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You are welcome. It was a pleasure to read.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written upbeat poem, that brings a sense of hope to the reader and spring to the step, this is a lovely poem, articulate, expressive, with metaphors and poetic device to help its progress, this is beautifully written dear friend, love the theme, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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A beautifully written upbeat poem, that brings a sense of hope to the reader and spring to the step, this is a lovely poem, articulate, expressive, with metaphors and poetic device to help its progress, this is beautifully written dear friend, love the theme, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Roy, thank you so much for your marvelous praise of my poem. So glad you love its theme.
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Most welcome
Comment from Wendy G
Very beautiful. Your descriptive words were thoughtful and vivid, and you painted an excellent word picture with smooth rhyme and metre. A strong contender. Very best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Very beautiful. Your descriptive words were thoughtful and vivid, and you painted an excellent word picture with smooth rhyme and metre. A strong contender. Very best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Wendy, for your most encouraging review and high praise.
Comment from Mia Twysted
I had trouble finding the flow of this piece. That being said it did a wonderful gob of describing the winter months that are just around the corner.
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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I had trouble finding the flow of this piece. That being said it did a wonderful gob of describing the winter months that are just around the corner.
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Hi, Mia. I appreciate your praise of my descriptions of winter, but I don?t understand what you mean by the "flow of the piece."
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Okay, flow of the piece means, at least to me, how easily it flows off the tongue as it is read out loud. Kind of like a song it has a melody. Something that feels natural and not forced. I stumbled as I read it aloud and the words didn't come easy.
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Thank you for taking the time to explain, Mia.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The vocabulary in this poem was particlarly rich and evokative. I especially liked the description of snow:
pillows split, their innards spilt.
Kate xx
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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The vocabulary in this poem was particlarly rich and evokative. I especially liked the description of snow:
pillows split, their innards spilt.
Kate xx
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Katherine, for sharing and praising my poem and specifying which images you liked most.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
This is so well written I feel as if I was standing where this town lies taking in the surrounds and the movement of all things. Now, I need to search what else you have written that will take me somewhere else.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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This is so well written I feel as if I was standing where this town lies taking in the surrounds and the movement of all things. Now, I need to search what else you have written that will take me somewhere else.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2022
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Tom, I am thrilled by your enthusiastic response to my poem, and honored you want to read more of my work. Many thanks, too, for all those bright stars.
Comment from Gloria ....
Lots of great winter imagery here. The gamboling leaves doing cartwheels down the road around the bare trees resonates, as well as the blurry sunset and the rising moon.
Wishing you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Lots of great winter imagery here. The gamboling leaves doing cartwheels down the road around the bare trees resonates, as well as the blurry sunset and the rising moon.
Wishing you great luck with the voters.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you so much, Gloria. I am delighted you enjoyed the imagery of my poem.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, First Winter Storm, brings the season in to rest on the roofs, lay on the lawns, and white up all the windows in a sleepy little village near the sea. Big storm to bring the new norm.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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This poem, First Winter Storm, brings the season in to rest on the roofs, lay on the lawns, and white up all the windows in a sleepy little village near the sea. Big storm to bring the new norm.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2022
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Thank you, Bill, for sharing my snow poem.
