Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 85 "Storms of Life"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from karenina
Thanks, SO much for including the parameters and requirements of this Wordflair poetic form!
I found this online: "The Wordlflair is a poetic form invented by invented by -Lilac_Thoughts-of Allpoetry. She was inspired to create it out of her love to "put emotion into poetry, and the challenge of following the set patterns of formed poetry."
Source: https://www.ladyinreadwrites.com/wordflair-or-a-flair-for-wonderful-words-with-wings/
(It is always nice to see where a form originated, if possible!)
Your effort is extremely well written and conforms very well to the rhyme scheme as well as relating the single words beginning each stanza to one another.
It reads as a saga, or an epic ~ full of emotion and intensity!
It's so much easier to appreciate the effort when one understands the framework upon which you built your verse!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thanks, SO much for including the parameters and requirements of this Wordflair poetic form!
I found this online: "The Wordlflair is a poetic form invented by invented by -Lilac_Thoughts-of Allpoetry. She was inspired to create it out of her love to "put emotion into poetry, and the challenge of following the set patterns of formed poetry."
Source: https://www.ladyinreadwrites.com/wordflair-or-a-flair-for-wonderful-words-with-wings/
(It is always nice to see where a form originated, if possible!)
Your effort is extremely well written and conforms very well to the rhyme scheme as well as relating the single words beginning each stanza to one another.
It reads as a saga, or an epic ~ full of emotion and intensity!
It's so much easier to appreciate the effort when one understands the framework upon which you built your verse!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Karenina, Wow,Wow!! Thank you for these tidbits of information. I couldn?t agree with you more about knowing the source of style to become more knowledgeable! You friend, are amazing 🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶
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Hmmm. Nope. Look in the mirror. YOU are amazing!
Comment from HarryT
Very good description of the torment suffered when a love is lost. Images are powerful and draw on the emotions. The comparison of a storm to the feelings endured in one's heart and mind is well done.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Very good description of the torment suffered when a love is lost. Images are powerful and draw on the emotions. The comparison of a storm to the feelings endured in one's heart and mind is well done.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Thanks much dear sir!
Comment from June Sargent
Yes, I can feel the fear, the fury, the rage churning in the water and in your soul with this poem. You met the challenge beautifully with this wordflair. Great imagery. Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Yes, I can feel the fear, the fury, the rage churning in the water and in your soul with this poem. You met the challenge beautifully with this wordflair. Great imagery. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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June, I do value your input comments very much, thank you!
Comment from Heather Knight
Hi,
I'd never heard of this kind of poem, so first of all, thanks for the information. I found it fascinating, though I don't know if I'd have the patience and the skill to write one myself.
Incredible. Really good, like everything you write.
I only have one question: all the words you used before each stanza were adjectives except for fury. Does that matter?
Thanks for sharing,
MJ
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Hi,
I'd never heard of this kind of poem, so first of all, thanks for the information. I found it fascinating, though I don't know if I'd have the patience and the skill to write one myself.
Incredible. Really good, like everything you write.
I only have one question: all the words you used before each stanza were adjectives except for fury. Does that matter?
Thanks for sharing,
MJ
Comment Written 24-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Hi and Thank you for your kind comment. While I did in-fact begin with adjectives because They may name qualities of all kinds and the emphasis of the emotions have been carried throughout. I do not feel therefore that this usage would be restrictive in writing in this format.
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I was just wondering because as I told you I don't know this kind of poem.
I hope I didn't offend you.
Comment from lyenochka
WOW! You really used this form to the maximum effect! I felt like the volume of the emotional storm was raised to beyond the highest number and yet it's the "the silence " that "screamed her love." Fabulously done with expert rhymes and near rhymes!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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WOW! You really used this form to the maximum effect! I felt like the volume of the emotional storm was raised to beyond the highest number and yet it's the "the silence " that "screamed her love." Fabulously done with expert rhymes and near rhymes!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2022
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Smiles of great appreciation, thank you.
Comment from royowen
Hi Jim, you're growing as a writer, certainly in meter, but I'm wondering how you have 6 lines in the rhyming notes, when their are only 5 in the actual work, if the first four lines lines are ABAB how can there be a couplet of CC? Surely it should be ababB? But that's technical, I'm not concerned, Just a bit muddled. it was still a great poem, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Hi Jim, you're growing as a writer, certainly in meter, but I'm wondering how you have 6 lines in the rhyming notes, when their are only 5 in the actual work, if the first four lines lines are ABAB how can there be a couplet of CC? Surely it should be ababB? But that's technical, I'm not concerned, Just a bit muddled. it was still a great poem, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Hello friend, the club format is Six lines per stanza.
*Line1 ONE SINGLE WORD to convey mood and theme
*Lines 1, 2, 3, 4, rhyming scheme: abab (I think it should read ababcC
*Lines 5 and 6 is a rhyming couplet: cC
*Line six of the first stanza is repeated in the last line of following stanzas
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Your line two didn?t rhyme with anything Jim, I just read another version with only three lines. Still confused my friend.
Comment from Faith Williams
Wow, I can really feel the inner upheaval expressed through the description of the heaving ocean. I've read a few of these poems, and personally I like yours the best. Thanks for sharing your amazing poem.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Wow, I can really feel the inner upheaval expressed through the description of the heaving ocean. I've read a few of these poems, and personally I like yours the best. Thanks for sharing your amazing poem.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you Fiah, I am quite honored.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Wow! This is a unique poem. Love how you formatted each stanza. The first word sets up what is going to come. The descriptions are excellent and powerful. Rhymes are so perfect!! Great job.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Wow! This is a unique poem. Love how you formatted each stanza. The first word sets up what is going to come. The descriptions are excellent and powerful. Rhymes are so perfect!! Great job.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Michaelm thanks for kudos!
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Thank you for sharing. Nice poem and you used a good descriptive words. I could almost hear the wind howl. It was an enjoyable poem to read. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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Thank you for sharing. Nice poem and you used a good descriptive words. I could almost hear the wind howl. It was an enjoyable poem to read. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2022
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jacquelyn, thank you for your validating comments.