Tucker - Closing Point (Part-7)
Tucker takes charge, thanks to Farnsworth.30 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from your words and the art work you chose. Very good dialogue also. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Teri
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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This is a very interesting chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery from your words and the art work you chose. Very good dialogue also. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Teri
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Teri, for your kind words, generous review, and for taking time out to read this chapter of my wacky, fast-paced, world of fiction. Much appreciated!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Plenty of rip-roaring action to end this story on. Some Notes:
-Instead of "Then came a stiff knock" this would read better as A stiff knock came at the door.
-"short, bubbly, girl with a red pixie-cut hairstyle" very descriptive.
-"your boobies" should be Your boobies.
-"Daiquiries" should not be capitolized.
-"And, within minutes" would read better as Within minutes.
-No comma (,) needed between "them" and "Farnsworth".
-What a twist - Farnsworth and Tammy an item.
-"sky dive" should be skydive.
-From "The whirlybird" to "sidewalks below" full of fast-paced action...and sentences that need to be reworked. May suggest:
+++period (.) after pieces
+++period (.) after head
+++Change "and" to It.
-If Farnsworth went out that way way what a way to go!
-Omit "And" in front of "finally". Start that sentence with Finally.
Would make a good lead-in to another story...or two.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Plenty of rip-roaring action to end this story on. Some Notes:
-Instead of "Then came a stiff knock" this would read better as A stiff knock came at the door.
-"short, bubbly, girl with a red pixie-cut hairstyle" very descriptive.
-"your boobies" should be Your boobies.
-"Daiquiries" should not be capitolized.
-"And, within minutes" would read better as Within minutes.
-No comma (,) needed between "them" and "Farnsworth".
-What a twist - Farnsworth and Tammy an item.
-"sky dive" should be skydive.
-From "The whirlybird" to "sidewalks below" full of fast-paced action...and sentences that need to be reworked. May suggest:
+++period (.) after pieces
+++period (.) after head
+++Change "and" to It.
-If Farnsworth went out that way way what a way to go!
-Omit "And" in front of "finally". Start that sentence with Finally.
Would make a good lead-in to another story...or two.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Brett Matthew, for your extra special six-star review, kind words, and suggestions. I'm just a goof of an old man who entertains himself with foolishness. It's my way of adding a little excitement to an otherwise boring life. LOL. I hope all is going well with your latest rounds of aggravation. You're in my thoughts and prayers! I appreciate YOU!
Comment from amahra
Well done, Ric. You gave lots of well-descriptive action all the way to the end.
The short and bubbly girl with a red pixie-cut hairstyle [loved this image]
Tucker grabbed his pistol as he mumbled instructions to Tammy. "Get a move on Tammy, we're leaving." [Ok, I know this is nitpicking--but you don't have to say, "Move on Tammy..." but instead, "Move on, we're leaving." Since you already said, "...he mumbled instructions to Tammy." But it's not that important to change. Just me being me. :))
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Well done, Ric. You gave lots of well-descriptive action all the way to the end.
The short and bubbly girl with a red pixie-cut hairstyle [loved this image]
Tucker grabbed his pistol as he mumbled instructions to Tammy. "Get a move on Tammy, we're leaving." [Ok, I know this is nitpicking--but you don't have to say, "Move on Tammy..." but instead, "Move on, we're leaving." Since you already said, "...he mumbled instructions to Tammy." But it's not that important to change. Just me being me. :))
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Amahra, for your extra special six-star review, kind words, and suggestion. I like you being you, so don't ever hesitate to tell what you think or give me your preferences. Syntax, punctuation, and all around structure can use some work in everything write. The way you say "Move on, we're leaving" is definitely better, but "Get a move on . . ." is what my mother used to always say, one of those southern sayings. LOL. So, I'll compromise and change it to "Get a move on, we're leaving." Just leaving out the redundant Tammy is a big improvement, thanks to you. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from leather
This is such a fast-moving and suspenseful chapter that I didn't want to stop until the end. l so admire your writing skills and hold out hope that I'll venture more in that direction while still playing with poetry.
I picked up on how you indicated a time and place shift by using the line break, so I feel like I am learning as well as reading.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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This is such a fast-moving and suspenseful chapter that I didn't want to stop until the end. l so admire your writing skills and hold out hope that I'll venture more in that direction while still playing with poetry.
I picked up on how you indicated a time and place shift by using the line break, so I feel like I am learning as well as reading.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Leather, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. When I came to this site, I didn't know a noun from a verb. I left home at 15, quit school, and didn't further my education until years later. You impressed me from the first post of yours that I read, which almost never happens. I'm expecting great things from you soon! I appreciate YOU!
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Your life story, as shared, is remarkable and inspiring. You somehow moved yourself to a positive place in life when others might have taken a dark route.
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It's always better to be lucky than good. LOL.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
The power of your adjectives and verbs is astounding. They make me see with my own eyes the action taking place; they make me weary, suspicious and distrustful; they make me breathe hard or hold my breath; they make me laugh.
I just love your Tucker and hope to peek in on many more of his adventures.
Great story, Ric! And, as always, EXCEPTIONALLY written.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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The power of your adjectives and verbs is astounding. They make me see with my own eyes the action taking place; they make me weary, suspicious and distrustful; they make me breathe hard or hold my breath; they make me laugh.
I just love your Tucker and hope to peek in on many more of his adventures.
Great story, Ric! And, as always, EXCEPTIONALLY written.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Gale, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. There is nothing that makes me happier than to get glowing reviews from you talented writers that I enjoy reading and learning from every day. I can't thank you enough! Ric
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You did it, you reached and end, but since the bad FBI agents got away, you have the set up for another story as a few of them are bound to escape justice. Really enjoyed this story and look forward to the next one. You do have a renegade comma between Miami and Beach.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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You did it, you reached and end, but since the bad FBI agents got away, you have the set up for another story as a few of them are bound to escape justice. Really enjoyed this story and look forward to the next one. You do have a renegade comma between Miami and Beach.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Carol, for your kind words and generous review. Thanks too for pointing out stupid comma that must have been hiding. LOL. I always appreciate your taking time out to read my foolishness. Much appreciated!
Comment from Terry Broxson
Okay, a good installment. I guess we have to wait till the next time. Did Farnsworth really die? Back in the 50s, I would go to a Saturday movie at the Ritz theater in downtown Midland, Texas. We always had a color cartoon and a serial...this would have made a great movie serial. Terry.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Okay, a good installment. I guess we have to wait till the next time. Did Farnsworth really die? Back in the 50s, I would go to a Saturday movie at the Ritz theater in downtown Midland, Texas. We always had a color cartoon and a serial...this would have made a great movie serial. Terry.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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No, Terry, the real bad guys never die. At some point, when they lift the shredded parachute, they'll find that Farnsworth isn't crushed on the street. And the good guy, in this case Tucker, always gets the girl. But for now, it's over, I've had enough, and I'm sure everyone else has too. LOL. Thanks for the stars and kind words! Ric
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Okay, bring 'em back when you are ready.
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Ah, the satisfaction of a resolved ending. Nothing like it. You pulled all the pieces together and wrapped the plot up nicely. Well done. I also liked the font, it was very easy to read!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Ah, the satisfaction of a resolved ending. Nothing like it. You pulled all the pieces together and wrapped the plot up nicely. Well done. I also liked the font, it was very easy to read!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Tim, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm always honored that such a talented wordsmith takes time away from his magical poetry to read my scribblings and offer so much encouragement. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from lyenochka
Wow. That was an explosive ending! Well, but hopefully a happily ever after does await Tucker and Tammy with their new names. You kept us in suspense as to whom to not trust but I guess, they were all dangerous!
Suggestions :
What are you talkin' about Tucker, you aren't supposed to be afraid of anything?" (question mark after Tucker and new sentence after that)
"let's go. We'll discuss it from the roof." (Let's)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Wow. That was an explosive ending! Well, but hopefully a happily ever after does await Tucker and Tammy with their new names. You kept us in suspense as to whom to not trust but I guess, they were all dangerous!
Suggestions :
What are you talkin' about Tucker, you aren't supposed to be afraid of anything?" (question mark after Tucker and new sentence after that)
"let's go. We'll discuss it from the roof." (Let's)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Helen, for your extra special six-star review, kind words, and suggestions. And to think, I even took time trying to be a little more cautious about mistakes, and these two are just foolish blunders. Maybe my name should have been blunder. LOL. I always appreciate your kindness and encouragement! But most of all, just YOU!
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Great job as always, Ric!
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Minor spags are invisible to the author!
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Heck, they are all invisible to me . . . well, until you point them out. Then, they look like they were written in blood and I can't believe I've made them, but I sure can't deny them either. LOL. You're always a bright spot! :-)
Comment from karenina
I see a whole lot of reviewers got here before me to award their six stars. You likely don't need more, but hey, you earn them, you get them, so I'll be leaving mine here as well...
There is always a charm, wit, and swagger interwoven with the plot ~ and all of this combines to make reading your stories a thrill.
So glad you said, "The end...for now."
I hope to read more of Tucker's adventures!
Yet another loyal fan, waiting to see this on the big screen!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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I see a whole lot of reviewers got here before me to award their six stars. You likely don't need more, but hey, you earn them, you get them, so I'll be leaving mine here as well...
There is always a charm, wit, and swagger interwoven with the plot ~ and all of this combines to make reading your stories a thrill.
So glad you said, "The end...for now."
I hope to read more of Tucker's adventures!
Yet another loyal fan, waiting to see this on the big screen!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much, Karenina, for your extra special six-star review and kind words. I'm always anxious to see what you have to say, and hope you enjoy another chapter of my foolishness. Thank for the big smile on my face. I appreciate YOU!
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Ditto. Absolutely, ditto!