Comment from karenina

Excellent

It is with astute curiosity I flutter about your brain and feel the vibrations of your meaning...

Our words are both the photograph and the negative...as in those wonderful vintage envelopes where images are reversed, dark to light/light to dark...

Who is to say which is the reality??? We are all specters of ourselves...

Ghost writers in the most essential sense!

Karenina

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022

Thank you :-). I've come to realise that I'm obsessed with the idea of contrast and how something looks all the clearer when posed against it's opposite of lack. There's a point from an early Terry Pratchett books that's stuck in my head since I read it as a teenager - the idea that darkness isn't the opposite of light, as so often depicted, but simply a lack of it. Therefore there are deeper depths to plumb for the actually opposite.

I loved you response to my poem!

Mike

Comment from Michaela Moore

Excellent

For every perfect sunset, there's a thought,
darkening perception,
chasing light's perfection. I wish I could sew together words this brilliantly. I can say these deep musings about life, but not in the magical way you do. Another fine, fine web of words you have set down "on paper."

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022

Thank you :-). This was very much a streamer. I love to watch the words come tumbling out so I can try to make sure there's a thread of sense to them before posting. I'm so glad you liked it!

Mike

Comment from Nic

Excellent

I love the line, "lions in silhouette!" That's so specific, I'm worried about using "predators" in the next line. I feel like you already nailed a predator image with the lions. Also love the phrase "dashing scoundrels" since it plays on two meanings there. Nice job! Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022

Thank you, Nic :-). I think I saw the predators line as an enhancement to the lions one, but you make a good point - it's already there. I'll have a think on that!

Mike

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm not sure I understood the poem but I enjoyed the rich imagery. I wonder if the "beauty spots of life" are like the "black words" on our screen. We certainly can change our own perception of them and transform "blemishes" into spots of beauty.

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 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022

Thank you :-). I'd say you understood perfectly the thoughts in my head when I was writing this! I'm really glad you liked it.

Mike

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I think you wrote this "as you were moved", which is a very hackneyed cliche, but what words can one use in its place. You are a natural writer, not terribly disturbed if it's a bit abstract, which encourages others to "have a crack" at interpretation, and perhaps encourage innovation, well done, blessings Roy

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 Comment Written 31-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022

Thank you, Roy. Lol, I think you have me pegged :-). Any time I think I'm being quite straight, it turns out I'm not, and I'm okay with that!

Mike

reply by royowen on 01-Aug-2022

You?re a natural