Bus Stop Holiday
Two teens skip school.15 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
This was also a sweet poem, I feel that memory was better than sitting in any boring class, however I am not a fan of children cutting class. lol No errors noted, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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This was also a sweet poem, I feel that memory was better than sitting in any boring class, however I am not a fan of children cutting class. lol No errors noted, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Joann, for sharing and praising my poem. Indeed the escapade was memorable for Petey.
Comment from Thatguypk
This story is cuter than cute. Beautifully written, with a lovely flow. So much fun. I skipped school once or twice myself, but rarely had the companionship of a pretty female to enhance my escapades. Good luck in the contest. :-)
PK
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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This story is cuter than cute. Beautifully written, with a lovely flow. So much fun. I skipped school once or twice myself, but rarely had the companionship of a pretty female to enhance my escapades. Good luck in the contest. :-)
PK
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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I truly appreciate your kind praise of my poem,Thatguypk. Petey certainly had fun that day with a pretty new neighbor.
Comment from lancellot
This is a nice beginning. It seems the focus was more on the set-up of the meeting, rather than what the meat of the conversations and activities you two did that day that made it so great and memorable.
The structure was well done.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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This is a nice beginning. It seems the focus was more on the set-up of the meeting, rather than what the meat of the conversations and activities you two did that day that made it so great and memorable.
The structure was well done.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Yes, it would be nice to listen in to the kids?s entire adventure. Thanks for sharing my narrative poem.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a good work done, I like and have enjoyed the read, there is a good flow of thoughts and true experience from teens, it is very common done by teens in school days; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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This is a good work done, I like and have enjoyed the read, there is a good flow of thoughts and true experience from teens, it is very common done by teens in school days; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Many thanks for sharing and praising my poem, Alcreator.
Comment from royowen
What a good theme for a poem,,in fact everybody probably has a theme for these marvellous poems that people churn out. This is very cute indeed, you've done a great job with this rhyming, deftly written narration time, well done great job, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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What a good theme for a poem,,in fact everybody probably has a theme for these marvellous poems that people churn out. This is very cute indeed, you've done a great job with this rhyming, deftly written narration time, well done great job, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
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Many thanks for sharing and praising my poem, Roy.
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A pleasure