They Walked Home From The Morgue
Six dead men walked their home from the morgue33 total reviews
Comment from Artasylum
Wow... quite the story... I was a little confused; when they walked home from the morgue we they risen or dead... and so sorry to hear that God disappeared. Good story and great, good luck in your contest. yours, diana
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Wow... quite the story... I was a little confused; when they walked home from the morgue we they risen or dead... and so sorry to hear that God disappeared. Good story and great, good luck in your contest. yours, diana
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Ulla
That was a unfortunate story. Let's hope it's pure fiction. I hope you do well with this one. I think a 'to' is missing in the subtitle before 'their home'. Good luck in the contest. Best regards, Ulla:))
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That was a unfortunate story. Let's hope it's pure fiction. I hope you do well with this one. I think a 'to' is missing in the subtitle before 'their home'. Good luck in the contest. Best regards, Ulla:))
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Well you said a lot in those 33 words my friend! Excellent piece for the 33 Word Spiritual Fiction writing prompt and best of wishes in the contest! The storyline was very interesting and held my attention;-)
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family this New Year!
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Well you said a lot in those 33 words my friend! Excellent piece for the 33 Word Spiritual Fiction writing prompt and best of wishes in the contest! The storyline was very interesting and held my attention;-)
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family this New Year!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from Jay Squires
It's not easy making your point in 33 words. I'll be honest with you, though, I believe your underlying message is that the vaccinations don't work, but God is a huge concept to throw into a 33-word story. But to say that He is Dr. Dawn and then even He has disappeared without more words to explain it, leaves me with my hands thrown up and thoroughly baffled. And why are the three dead men walking home from the morgue?
I'm really sorry. I'm not trying to be mean-spirited, but I don't think you gave me enough clues to make sense of your flash fiction.
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It's not easy making your point in 33 words. I'll be honest with you, though, I believe your underlying message is that the vaccinations don't work, but God is a huge concept to throw into a 33-word story. But to say that He is Dr. Dawn and then even He has disappeared without more words to explain it, leaves me with my hands thrown up and thoroughly baffled. And why are the three dead men walking home from the morgue?
I'm really sorry. I'm not trying to be mean-spirited, but I don't think you gave me enough clues to make sense of your flash fiction.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
Comment from LJbutterfly
I appreciate the idea of your thirty-three word story, but must admit I don't fully understand it. Why is God Dr. Dawn? I'm sure there is meaning there. Plus, why did God disappear? What is the meaning there? The contest judging committee may understand better than I. Best wishes in the contest.
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I appreciate the idea of your thirty-three word story, but must admit I don't fully understand it. Why is God Dr. Dawn? I'm sure there is meaning there. Plus, why did God disappear? What is the meaning there? The contest judging committee may understand better than I. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
An interesting piece of fiction for this contest, it could do very well, good luck. You had thirty-three words to work with, so this is very creative. It will be interesting how some of our fellow FanStory members feel about the piece. This virus has had more finger-pointing and lawsuits than anything except a Presidential Election. But nobody is blaming or suing God. It would be interesting if your work turns out not to be fiction. Excellent work!
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An interesting piece of fiction for this contest, it could do very well, good luck. You had thirty-three words to work with, so this is very creative. It will be interesting how some of our fellow FanStory members feel about the piece. This virus has had more finger-pointing and lawsuits than anything except a Presidential Election. But nobody is blaming or suing God. It would be interesting if your work turns out not to be fiction. Excellent work!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from Yuffie
This is short and sweet, and the title and last few words are the most powerful. I picture them walking away from the morgue and God behind them, phasing out and they walk away. Love it.
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This is short and sweet, and the title and last few words are the most powerful. I picture them walking away from the morgue and God behind them, phasing out and they walk away. Love it.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from NmaHassan Muhammad
An ironic poem with a tinge of mockery. It speaks funny, too, with the undead now searching for God. Above everything artistic, its spiritual absence lies in God disappearing.
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An ironic poem with a tinge of mockery. It speaks funny, too, with the undead now searching for God. Above everything artistic, its spiritual absence lies in God disappearing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from MissMerri
I read this through and hit myself in the head with the heel of my hand, then started over, reading carefully again. In spite of my best efforts and the bruised forehead, I still do not understand this story. I must be missing some very important clues. Please help me. I will gladly try again.
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I read this through and hit myself in the head with the heel of my hand, then started over, reading carefully again. In spite of my best efforts and the bruised forehead, I still do not understand this story. I must be missing some very important clues. Please help me. I will gladly try again.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a most unusual spiritual fiction. I'm not sure I have understood the significance, of the numbers, but I expect they play prominently in the prediction.
Wishing you great luck with the voters. :))
Gloria
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This is a most unusual spiritual fiction. I'm not sure I have understood the significance, of the numbers, but I expect they play prominently in the prediction.
Wishing you great luck with the voters. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022