Proceed With Full Faith In GOD!
Try time and again until you achieve your aim.36 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
I wholeheartedly agree with this. I would just consider changing a couple things on your verb tenses at the end. No this could be semantic depending on whether you want to emphasize discipline versus ambition. If the latter, avoid the "ing" where possible, because it is more passive. I suspect this is consistent with the message you are trying to send.
And sans <= this is a bit of an odd word to use here. It generally means without, but in a commodity context, when the assumption is that it would come with it, like grapes sans seeds. Maybe your piece would be stronger omitting this entire phrase?
"proceed forward
focusing on the main aim,
and giving our best, time and again!" - something like that.
Thank you for the read!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I wholeheartedly agree with this. I would just consider changing a couple things on your verb tenses at the end. No this could be semantic depending on whether you want to emphasize discipline versus ambition. If the latter, avoid the "ing" where possible, because it is more passive. I suspect this is consistent with the message you are trying to send.
And sans <= this is a bit of an odd word to use here. It generally means without, but in a commodity context, when the assumption is that it would come with it, like grapes sans seeds. Maybe your piece would be stronger omitting this entire phrase?
"proceed forward
focusing on the main aim,
and giving our best, time and again!" - something like that.
Thank you for the read!
Comment Written 12-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello HFPresident,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Good Wishes plus Good Luck in the contest.
Thanks for Suggestions also. Though I was more concerned about the number of SYLLABLES, yet I might still do better.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from MissMerri
An excellent poem extolling an excellent truth. To never give up is the advice I heard from my father so many times, and also, to strive to be the very best you could be at whatever you chose to pursue. So, your poem is exactly the kind of thing I love to read. Thank you for sharing your wisdom and talent. This is simply great advice set to rhyme. ~ MM
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An excellent poem extolling an excellent truth. To never give up is the advice I heard from my father so many times, and also, to strive to be the very best you could be at whatever you chose to pursue. So, your poem is exactly the kind of thing I love to read. Thank you for sharing your wisdom and talent. This is simply great advice set to rhyme. ~ MM
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello MM,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Good Wishes plus veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from harmony13
The author's words have a great message, are motivating and creative. I found this poem encouraging and filled with meaning. The artwork is
perfect and compliments these words.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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The author's words have a great message, are motivating and creative. I found this poem encouraging and filled with meaning. The artwork is
perfect and compliments these words.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello Harmony13,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Good Wishes plus veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from RGstar
Well done RP.
''God helps those who help themselves.''
That is the line that I long to hear, yet seldom see.
Those who would do little sometimes claim it to be God's will, so no need to achieve, or whatever happens, however tragic or avoidable, suddenly also becomes God's will.
That is to easy.
Much to think about my friend.
God bless you.
My best wishes.
Have a pleasant weekend.
RG
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Well done RP.
''God helps those who help themselves.''
That is the line that I long to hear, yet seldom see.
Those who would do little sometimes claim it to be God's will, so no need to achieve, or whatever happens, however tragic or avoidable, suddenly also becomes God's will.
That is to easy.
Much to think about my friend.
God bless you.
My best wishes.
Have a pleasant weekend.
RG
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello RG,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Best Wishes plus veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Anne Johnston
I like your poem very much. God gives us talents and abilities, but it is up to us to develop and use them to benefit others. We will fail, but we get up and try again and again. His grace gives us the strength to persevere.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I like your poem very much. God gives us talents and abilities, but it is up to us to develop and use them to benefit others. We will fail, but we get up and try again and again. His grace gives us the strength to persevere.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello Anne Johnston,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
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You are welcome.
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So nice of you, Anne Johnston
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Try time and again until you achieve your aim.
Proceed With Full Faith In GOD!
by RPSaxena
Excellent entry for the My Faith Poetry contest. You mentioned well known phrases we can all relate to. The presentation is awesome. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Try time and again until you achieve your aim.
Proceed With Full Faith In GOD!
by RPSaxena
Excellent entry for the My Faith Poetry contest. You mentioned well known phrases we can all relate to. The presentation is awesome. Well done!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello Gypsy Blue Rose,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Terry Broxson
A very good entry for this contest, good luck. Three really good stanzas. I like the way they seem to build on each other. Have faith that God helps those who help themselves, have a lion's heart, go forward never give up. Good job.
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A very good entry for this contest, good luck. Three really good stanzas. I like the way they seem to build on each other. Have faith that God helps those who help themselves, have a lion's heart, go forward never give up. Good job.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello Terry Broxson,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Good Wishes plus Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Yes, if we chose to take on a task we should be our entire being into it. God will be there to help us. I enjoyed reading your entry and good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Yes, if we chose to take on a task we should be our entire being into it. God will be there to help us. I enjoyed reading your entry and good luck.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Good Wishes plus Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Ben Colder
Good advice write in poetry. The photo is daring for sure but with faith, he will succeed. I was thinking of the little saying about the train climbing the grade. I think I can, I thought I could. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Good advice write in poetry. The photo is daring for sure but with faith, he will succeed. I was thinking of the little saying about the train climbing the grade. I think I can, I thought I could. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello Ben Colder,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from rspoet
Hello RP,
You've written an excellent poem for the Faith Contest
with very good rhymes and an important message
about about need to help ourselves. It's effort that
brings results.
Excellent picture to match.
Well said.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello RP,
You've written an excellent poem for the Faith Contest
with very good rhymes and an important message
about about need to help ourselves. It's effort that
brings results.
Excellent picture to match.
Well said.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hello Robert,
Thank you very much for your UPLIFTING comments and Excellent Rating backed by Best Wishes plus veiled Good Luck in the contest.
With best wishes,
~ RP