Leander
poem204 total reviews
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem Brooke, with words flowing well and rhyming good to tell about this little evil boy. He was quite a rascal for sure. But mommy had the answer. Cute one.
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Good poem Brooke, with words flowing well and rhyming good to tell about this little evil boy. He was quite a rascal for sure. But mommy had the answer. Cute one.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, GWinterwin :-) Brooke
Comment from marycec
Sawyer has that Leander look! I loved the way you used nature itself as the thing that Leander stole from.images I particularly liked were stealing the hop from the frog and the tickles from a baby.Perfect quatrains as usual.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Sawyer has that Leander look! I loved the way you used nature itself as the thing that Leander stole from.images I particularly liked were stealing the hop from the frog and the tickles from a baby.Perfect quatrains as usual.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Mary, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
their wings now drab and dreary,
and plucked the silver from the stars,
the world now sad and weary.
Just a suggestion but why not swap 'dreary' and 'weary'
Sawyer 'strikes' again. Quite the reversal from 'his' previous poems. Excellent...loved the piece.
Regards:
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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their wings now drab and dreary,
and plucked the silver from the stars,
the world now sad and weary.
Just a suggestion but why not swap 'dreary' and 'weary'
Sawyer 'strikes' again. Quite the reversal from 'his' previous poems. Excellent...loved the piece.
Regards:
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thanks so much, Stephen - I'll reread those lines :-) Brooke
Comment from madhatter1977
Hi Brooke, this is a really great poem about Leander. It seems very serious in places but the rhyme is very light and the last verse seems to have some sort of control re-established over his wrongdoings. Where would we be without parents to provide moral tutelage? Enjoyed this a lot. Best wishes, Pete :)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Hi Brooke, this is a really great poem about Leander. It seems very serious in places but the rhyme is very light and the last verse seems to have some sort of control re-established over his wrongdoings. Where would we be without parents to provide moral tutelage? Enjoyed this a lot. Best wishes, Pete :)
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, Pete :-) Brooke
Comment from barbara.wilkey
What a wonderful contest entry. I loved the poem/story. I bet taking the spots from butterflies would be very hard to do. Simply a wonderful poem. Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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What a wonderful contest entry. I loved the poem/story. I bet taking the spots from butterflies would be very hard to do. Simply a wonderful poem. Good luck.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, Barbara. That Leander is a nimble and clever fellow. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from Black_Oxygen
~ Little Prince Sawyer ~
Well Done ~ Brooke
This poetry has the pacing and cadence of a nursery
rhyme. The story it tells is very entertaining and
the style in which it is told is admirable and
vintage; Brooke. Thank You for your creation.
Now, about that photo. The world should take note.
The Prince is giving us a preview of his:
competition/battle/game face.
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~ Little Prince Sawyer ~
Well Done ~ Brooke
This poetry has the pacing and cadence of a nursery
rhyme. The story it tells is very entertaining and
the style in which it is told is admirable and
vintage; Brooke. Thank You for your creation.
Now, about that photo. The world should take note.
The Prince is giving us a preview of his:
competition/battle/game face.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
Ron, thank you so much :-) I just love this face! Brooke :-)
Comment from denhagan
This was a delightful read. A quatrain poem with 8/6/8/6 syllable count, with great rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. Read and flowed easily. Told a story of a "naughty" boy, who mom straightened out in the end.
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This was a delightful read. A quatrain poem with 8/6/8/6 syllable count, with great rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. Read and flowed easily. Told a story of a "naughty" boy, who mom straightened out in the end.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Den, thank you so very much, my friend. I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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You're welcome Brooke. It was a nice poem, :)
Dennis
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Haha...what a delightful poem and photograph of your Sawyer. That expression is hilarious! You brought the character to life of the evil child. Way fun. Thanks for sharing your brilliance!
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Haha...what a delightful poem and photograph of your Sawyer. That expression is hilarious! You brought the character to life of the evil child. Way fun. Thanks for sharing your brilliance!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Jewell, thank you so much, my friend - yes, it is one of his best expressions ever :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
What an evil eye that boy has! So cute!
And like most kids an Angel when he's asleep. Great story poem with great rhythm and rhyme. Nice!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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What an evil eye that boy has! So cute!
And like most kids an Angel when he's asleep. Great story poem with great rhythm and rhyme. Nice!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much, boxergirl :-) It is one great evil eye :-) Brooke
Comment from elchupakabra
What a devious look he has lol. I can see why you have come up with such an evil little boy. I really enjoyed this piece, as always, your allusions and imagery are very strong, the linework is well writ and flows smooth as liquid, and you are extremely good at wrapping your pieces up in a way that ties the whole piece together, which I always enjoy. Great work here yet again, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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What a devious look he has lol. I can see why you have come up with such an evil little boy. I really enjoyed this piece, as always, your allusions and imagery are very strong, the linework is well writ and flows smooth as liquid, and you are extremely good at wrapping your pieces up in a way that ties the whole piece together, which I always enjoy. Great work here yet again, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2013
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elchupakabra, thank you so very much :-) Brooke